鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答不够自然且有语法错误，句子结构不完整，表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免重复和不必要的细节。

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often. Usually, I buy shoes when I really need a new pair.

建議: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议使用连贯的句子，避免重复，并且明确表达观点。

範例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is more convenient and allows me to browse many styles without leaving home.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用完整句子，清楚表达原因，并避免语法错误。

範例: I usually spend around 200 to 300 yuan on shoes because I believe that more expensive shoes tend to be more comfortable.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和口语填充词，表达不够流畅。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用连贯的句子支持理由。

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because we wear them every day, and uncomfortable shoes can cause foot pain.

× Yes, I like buying shoes because shoes are necessities to our daily life and when we go outside we need to try the shoes and to wear it.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes because shoes are necessities in our daily life and when we go outside we need to try the shoes and wear them.

这里“to wear it”中的“it”指代复数“shoes”，应使用复数代词“them”；另外“to wear it”中的不定式“to”多余，直接用动词原形“wear”更自然。

× And I don't buy shoes very often and I usually buy them in.

✓ And I don't buy shoes very often; I usually buy them online.

原句末尾“in”不完整，缺少地点或方式，且句子结构不完整。应补充完整信息并用分号分隔两个独立句子。

× Yes, I usually buy the shoes online because as a student we have a lot of time to go shopping or go outside. I I think the online shopping is more convenient for us to try different kinds of shoes, so I usually buy it.

✓ Yes, I usually buy shoes online because as a student we have a lot of time to go shopping or go outside. I think online shopping is more convenient for us to try different kinds of shoes, so I usually buy them.

“the shoes”前面无特指，改为“shoes”更自然；“the online shopping”应去掉定冠词；“buy it”中“it”指代复数鞋，应改为“them”。

× I usually spend around 200 or CN¥300 on shoes one time.

✓ I usually spend around 200 to CN¥300 on shoes each time.

“around 200 or CN¥300”表达不准确，改为“around 200 to CN¥300”表示范围更清晰；“one time”改为“each time”更符合习惯表达。

× Uh, because the more expensive shoes I think might be more comfortable and I think the comfortable shoes needs that price.

✓ Uh, because more expensive shoes, I think, might be more comfortable and I think comfortable shoes need that price.

“the more expensive shoes”前缺少比较结构，去掉“the”更合适；“the comfortable shoes needs”主谓不一致，复数主语应用“need”。

× It's most the comfortable shoes because, uh, I think the shoes are the necessities of our daily life.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes the most because, uh, I think shoes are necessities in our daily life.

“It's most the comfortable shoes”表达不自然，改为“I prefer comfortable shoes the most”；“the shoes are the necessities”中“the”多余，改为“shoes are necessities”；“of our daily life”改为“in our daily life”更地道。

× So we don't to umm, change it frequently, but to keep a comfortable one and don't 'cause our feet get pain.

✓ So we don't need to, umm, change them frequently, but keep a comfortable pair so our feet don't get pain.

“don't to change”结构错误，应为“don't need to change”；“change it”中“it”指鞋，应改为复数“them”；“keep a comfortable one”改为“keep a comfortable pair”更准确；“don't 'cause our feet get pain”表达不完整，改为“so our feet don't get pain”。