鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 'because'가 중복 사용되었고, 문장이 명확하지 않습니다. 또한, 'self appointment'라는 표현은 부자연스럽습니다. 답변은 간결하고 명확하게, 그리고 문법적으로 정확하게 구성해야 합니다.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they are an essential part of fashion. I usually buy new shoes once a month as a personal treat.

建議: 답변에 중복된 단어('compared compared')와 부자연스러운 표현('both shoes online', 'buy in a prime')가 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 만들기 위해 불필요한 단어를 제거하고, 올바른 표현을 사용해야 합니다.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online and I really enjoy it because it's more convenient than shopping in physical stores. It has become one of my hobbies.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 브랜드 이름도 일부 잘못 표기되어 있습니다. 구체적인 금액이나 범위를 제시하고, 문장을 명확하게 구성하는 것이 필요합니다.

範例: I usually spend quite a lot on shoes because I prefer luxury brands like Chanel, Dior, or Gucci. Their shoes are expensive but worth the price.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미가 불분명합니다. 'shoes is poor old fashioned'라는 표현은 이해하기 어렵습니다. 명확한 이유를 제시하고, 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 만드는 것이 필요합니다.

範例: I prefer fashionable shoes over comfortable ones because I believe style is more important. However, I try to find a balance between fashion and comfort.

× I like buying shoes because I like fashion because and the shoes is the key point of the fashion.

✓ I like buying shoes because I like fashion and shoes are the key point of fashion.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'because' twice and has a subject-verb agreement error ('shoes is'). The conjunction 'and' should connect the two ideas, and 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'.

× the shoes is the key point of the fashion.

✓ shoes are the key point of fashion.

The noun 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'the fashion' is better as 'fashion' without 'the' in this context.

× the shoes is the key point of the fashion.

✓ shoes are the key point of fashion.

The definite article 'the' before 'fashion' is unnecessary here because 'fashion' is an uncountable noun used in a general sense.

× Yes, absolutely I have ever bought shoes online and actually I really enjoy both shoes online because it is convenient compared compared to buy in a prime.

✓ Yes, absolutely I have bought shoes online and actually I really enjoy buying shoes online because it is more convenient compared to buying in a store.

The phrase 'have ever bought' is incorrect; 'have bought' is appropriate. 'Both shoes online' is unclear; 'buying shoes online' is better. 'Compared compared' is a repetition error. 'Buy in a prime' is incorrect; likely meant 'buying in a store' or 'in person'. Modal verb 'have' is used correctly but needs proper phrasing.

× compared compared to buy in a prime.

✓ compared to buying in a store.

The phrase 'compared compared' is a repetition error. 'Buy in a prime' is incorrect; the correct preposition and gerund form is 'compared to buying in a store'.

× I really enjoy both shoes online because it is convenient compared compared to buy in a prime.

✓ I really enjoy buying shoes online because it is convenient compared to buying in a store.

After 'enjoy', the verb should be in the '-ing' form ('buying'). Also, 'both shoes online' is unclear and should be 'buying shoes online'.

× this kind of brand are so expensive like that or even Manon.

✓ this kind of brand is so expensive like that or even Manon.

The phrase 'this kind of brand' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'.

× So I usually spend on the shoe like that.

✓ So I usually spend on shoes like that.

The phrase 'spend on the shoe' is awkward; 'spend on shoes' is more natural and matches plural usage.

× I prefer fashionable shoes more than comfortable shoes because I think shoes is poor old fashioned so comfortable is less important than fashionable.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes more than comfortable shoes because I think shoes are old-fashioned, so comfort is less important than fashion.

'Shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. 'Poor old fashioned' is incorrect; 'old-fashioned' is the correct adjective. 'Comfortable' is an adjective; 'comfort' (noun) fits better here. 'Fashionable' should be 'fashion' to contrast with 'comfort'.