鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid filler words like 'umm'. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add specific reasons. For example, mention how having a child limits your shopping time and how often you manage to shop.

範例: I don't shop for shoes very often because having a young child keeps me busy. Usually, I only buy shoes when I really need them, maybe once every few months.

建議: Avoid repeating filler words and try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, use more precise vocabulary like 'try on' instead of 'trade'.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online, but I prefer trying them on in person because returning them if they don't fit can be quite a hassle.

建議: Be more direct and avoid filler words. Use linking words to explain why you spend that amount and what 'good quality' means to you.

範例: I usually spend between $200 and $250 on shoes because I value good quality that lasts longer and provides better comfort.

建議: Try to reduce filler words and structure your answer with a clear preference followed by a reason and a contrasting point using linking words like 'however'.

範例: Currently, I prefer comfortable shoes because I need to be active while looking after my child. However, I still buy fashionable shoes occasionally to feel good about my appearance.

× I'd say that I'm not a big shopper in in general because, umm, since I have a kid, I don't really have time to go shopping in peace and have a look around what's on the shelf and what I would like.

✓ I'd say that I'm not a big shopper in general because, umm, since I have a kid, I don't really have time to go shopping in peace and have a look around at what's on the shelf and what I would like.

The phrase 'have a look around what's on the shelf' is missing the preposition 'at' which is necessary to correctly link 'look around' with the object 'what's on the shelf'. Adding 'at' clarifies the meaning and improves sentence structure.

× I'm not a big fan of buying shoes online as I prefer to trade them on in person.

✓ I'm not a big fan of buying shoes online as I prefer to try them on in person.

The phrase 'trade them on' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'try them on' when referring to testing shoes for fit. This is a common prepositional error that changes the meaning of the sentence.

× I tend to buy shoes that are a good quality, so that means I, uh, spend usually in, uh, 200 to $250 range.

✓ I tend to buy shoes that are good quality, so that means I usually spend in the $200 to $250 range.

The phrase 'spend usually in, uh, 200 to $250 range' is awkward and incorrectly uses prepositions and word order. The correct form is 'usually spend in the $200 to $250 range' with the definite article 'the' before the range and proper word order for adverbs.