鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct grammar, and give a clear frequency with one coherent sentence plus one supporting detail. Correct repetition and article/plural errors. Use linking words if adding detail (e.g., because, so).

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often. I usually buy new shoes once every few months because I only replace shoes when they wear out.

建議: Avoid fillers and repetition. Start with a direct statement, then add a clear reason using a linking word. Use correct prepositions ('online' not 'on the online', 'offline' or 'in stores').

範例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer trying them on in stores to check the fit and comfort.

建議: Give a specific, concise range or exact amount and explain why. Avoid hesitations and unnecessary repetition. Use correct number words and currency if relevant.

範例: I usually spend around 10,000 to 20,000 (local currency) on a good pair of shoes because I value durability and comfort.

建議: Give a clear preference first, then support it with specific examples. Avoid contradictions and unclear phrases. Use linking words ('however', 'for example') and keep to 2–3 sentences max.

範例: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable. For example, I wear heels for parties but choose simple, comfortable sneakers for everyday activities.

× Yes I do. I like buying shoes, but I don't often often buy shoes. I buy shoes every seasons of the year, years and the.

✓ Yes, I do. I like buying shoes, but I don't often buy them. I buy shoes every season of the year.

Errors: repeated word 'often often' (redundancy/adverb placement) and incorrect plural 'seasons' with 'every' which requires singular 'season'. Also awkward 'years and the' is meaningless and removed. Suggestion: Use a single 'often' and say 'every season' when referring to each season in the year. Use 'them' as pronoun for shoes to avoid repetition.

× I haven't, I have never bought uh, shoes on the online because I prefer, I prefer, uh, buying shoes in on offline because it's comfortable for me and I think it's right.

✓ I haven't. I have never bought shoes online because I prefer buying shoes offline; it's more comfortable for me and I think it's better.

Errors: 'on the online' is incorrect preposition and article usage — say 'online' without article or 'on the internet'. 'in on offline' mixes prepositions; use 'offline'. 'I haven't' alone is incomplete; better to use 'I haven't' with a verb or 'I have never'. Repetition removed. Suggestion: Use 'I have never bought shoes online' (present perfect negative) and contrast with 'I prefer buying shoes offline'.

× I usually spend approximately. 10 thousands or 20,000? I prefer buying umm good shoes shoes.

✓ I usually spend approximately 10,000 to 20,000. I prefer buying good-quality shoes.

Errors: '10 thousands' is incorrect — use '10,000' (no 's') or 'ten thousand'. The question mark and period are misplaced. Repetition 'shoes shoes' removed. 'Good shoes' is vague; 'good-quality shoes' is clearer. Suggestion: Express amounts without plural 's' and use a range '10,000 to 20,000'.

× On my point of view, I prefer buying fashionable and comfortable shoes because it's convenient and uncomfortable and I it's 5050 for me because for example, as a party I like wearing fashionable shoes like heels and on the simple day I just. Wear on.

✓ From my point of view, I prefer buying shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because it's a balance for me. For example, at a party I like wearing fashionable shoes like heels, and on a simple day I just wear casual shoes.

Errors: 'On my point of view' should be 'From my point of view' (preposition). 'because it's convenient and uncomfortable' is contradictory and likely meant 'comfortable'. 'it's 5050 for me' is informal and unclear — use 'it's a balance for me'. 'as a party' needs 'at a party'. 'on the simple day I just. Wear on.' has sentence fragments and wrong preposition; correct to 'on a simple day I just wear casual shoes'. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions, avoid fragments, and clarify meaning with standard phrases.