鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly (Yes/No and frequency), then add one specific reason or example. Reduce hesitations and repetitions and avoid filler words. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, usually a few times a month. I often go shopping when I feel bored, and because I like trying new styles, I sometimes buy more than one pair during a trip.

建議: Give a direct answer, then briefly describe the experience with specific details and a linking word. Avoid long pauses and repeated fillers. Mention what happened and how you felt in one or two supporting sentences.

範例: Yes, I once bought shoes online, but I was disappointed because the size I needed was out of stock. As a result, I couldn't wear them and had to return them, which was frustrating.

建議: Answer directly with a typical amount or a range, then explain briefly what affects your spending. Avoid unclear phrases and fillers; use numbers clearly and a linking word like 'usually' or 'depending on'.

範例: It depends, but I usually spend around 2,000–5,000 taka on a pair of shoes. My budget varies depending on the brand and whether I need them for work or casual use.

建議: State your preference clearly with a straightforward topic sentence, then give one specific reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and avoid repeated words.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day and need support. For example, I choose cushioned sneakers rather than high heels when I plan to be on my feet for several hours.

× Yes, I like buying buy shoes when I feel bored and then I go, uh, then I want to shopping and I saw the shoes and I I like I buy a some shoes many times I repeat this, uh, moment.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes when I feel bored, and then I go shopping; if I see shoes I like, I buy some of them many times and repeat this moment.

Multiple issues centered on verb forms and gerunds: 'like buying buy shoes' has an extra verb 'buy' — use the gerund 'buying' after 'like'. 'I want to shopping' should be 'I want to go shopping' or simply 'I go shopping' because 'want' requires 'to' + base verb. 'I saw the shoes and I I like I buy a some shoes' mixes tenses and has unnecessary articles; use present simple for habitual actions: 'if I see shoes I like, I buy some.' Suggestions: remove duplicate words, use gerund after 'like', use 'go shopping' or 'shop', and use present simple for repeated actions.

× Yes, one day I buy shoes and online and I just, uh, talk, umm, uh, totally shocked because, uh, there are no size available in my food and there there's no shoes available in my food size. That's why very sad.

✓ Yes, one day I bought shoes online and I was totally shocked because there were no sizes available in my foot size. That made me very sad.

Tense and word choice errors: 'buy' should be past tense 'bought' for a completed past event. 'I just... talk' is incorrect and unnecessary; use 'I was totally shocked.' 'There are no size available' should be plural 'there were no sizes available' to agree with noun; also 'in my food' is a wrong word, should be 'in my foot size' or 'in my size.' 'That's why very sad' lacks a verb — use 'That made me very sad.' Suggestions: use past simple for past events, match singular/plural for 'size/sizes', and choose correct vocabulary 'foot'.

× Umm, I think uh, it, it's, it depends on my monies as uh, that's uh, umm, sometimes I buy, I bought UH-5 Ki mean 5000 taka when I bought a shoes. So it depends, it's, it totally depends on my own money.

✓ I think it depends on my money. Sometimes I have bought shoes for 5000 taka. So it totally depends on my own money.

Tense and noun form errors: 'it, it's, it depends' is repetitive; use 'it depends.' 'Monies' is unnatural — use uncountable 'money.' Mixing present and past: 'sometimes I buy, I bought' should be clarified; use present perfect 'I have bought' or past simple 'I bought' depending on context. 'UH-5 Ki mean 5000 taka' contains extraneous filler; simplify to '5000 taka.' 'a shoes' incorrect article + plural — use 'shoes' without 'a' or 'a pair of shoes.' Suggestions: use 'money' for uncountable noun, avoid filler words, and be consistent with tense for habitual vs specific past purchases.

× I always prefer to, uh, comfortable shoes because if you going another anywhere, so you, uh, wear a comfortable shoes or sandals. So I preferred it.

✓ I always prefer comfortable shoes because when you go somewhere else, you should wear comfortable shoes or sandals. So I prefer them.

Verb tense and form errors: 'prefer to, uh, comfortable shoes' should be 'prefer comfortable shoes' — 'prefer' can take a noun directly. 'If you going another anywhere' lacks proper verb form; use 'when you go somewhere else' (present simple). 'wear a comfortable shoes' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'wear comfortable shoes' or 'wear a pair of comfortable shoes.' 'So I preferred it' wrongly uses past tense; maintain present 'I prefer them.' Suggestions: use present simple for general preferences, correct verb forms, and match article with noun number.