鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes, then give a specific frequency and one or two brief reasons with linking words. Avoid filler words (umm) and correct grammar (e.g., 'I don't buy them very often', 'trainers' not 'trainer', 'formal shoes' not 'former shoes'). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I don't do it very often. I usually buy new shoes about once every three months when my current pair becomes uncomfortable. For example, I recently bought a Chelsea boot last month because my old boots were worn out.

建議: Give a direct opening sentence, then add 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Improve grammar and phrasing (e.g., 'online platforms', 'more variety', 'choose my size in the app and have them delivered'). Avoid repetition and keep it fluent.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times, using platforms like Amazon, eBay and Clarks. I prefer shopping online because there is more variety and I can easily choose my size in the app and have the shoes delivered to my home.

建議: Be specific and realistic with figures, avoid hesitations and correct number words and currency. Use linking words to explain variation and give a clear range, plus one concise reason. Correct mistakes like 'over than' → 'more than' and unrealistic '1000' if you meant '100'. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: It varies, but I usually spend between £20 and £100 on shoes depending on quality. For example, I buy cheaper casual shoes for everyday use, but I will pay over £100 for sturdy shoes for long travel or for office wear.

建議: Answer directly and then briefly explain with a specific reason and an example. Improve wording and coherence (e.g., 'comfort is my priority' not 'comfort is more priority'), avoid informal phrases like 'OK see I buy Nike'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I value how they feel during long days. For instance, even if I like the look of trendy brands like Nike, I choose models with good cushioning and support so I can walk comfortably all day.

× I really like buying shoes but I don't buy it so much often.

✓ I really like buying shoes but I don't buy them very often.

The plural noun 'shoes' requires the plural pronoun 'them' not 'it'. Also 'so much often' is ungrammatical; use 'very often' for frequency. Suggestion: replace 'it' with 'them' and use 'very often' for natural frequency expression.

× I usually buy shoes quarterly UMM if I feel like they know my shoes is not working well and I'm I don't feel comfortable.

✓ I usually buy shoes quarterly if I feel like my shoes are not in good condition or I don't feel comfortable.

The clause is confusing and mixes tenses and pronouns. 'They know my shoes is' is incorrect. Use 'my shoes are not in good condition' (plural subject 'shoes' with 'are'). Remove filler 'UMM' and restructure the sentence for clarity. Suggestion: keep present tense 'are' for current states and use 'or' to join reasons.

× I prefer to buy trainer sometimes former shoes for my office.

✓ I prefer to buy trainers or formal shoes for my office sometimes.

Word choice and order are incorrect: 'trainer' should be plural 'trainers'; 'former' is wrong word — use 'formal'. Adverb placement: 'sometimes' fits at end. Reorder for natural English. Suggestion: use plural nouns and correct adjective 'formal'.

× Recently last month I bought a Chelsea boot.

✓ Last month I bought a pair of Chelsea boots.

'Recently last month' is redundant; choose one. Also people usually buy a pair of shoes, so use 'a pair of Chelsea boots' and plural 'boots'. Suggestion: use either 'recently' or 'last month' and say 'a pair of' for shoes.

× Yes, I bought shoes multiple times through online platform such as Amazon, eBay and Clarks and I feel buying from online is more convenient than going to physical stores.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes multiple times through online platforms such as Amazon, eBay and Clarks, and I find buying online more convenient than going to physical stores.

Use present perfect 'have bought' to indicate experience up to now. 'Through online platform' should be 'through online platforms' or 'on online platforms'. 'Buying from online' is incorrect; use 'buying online'. Also add comma and 'find' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'have bought' for experience and 'on/through online platforms' and 'buying online'.

× I can see more variation in online.

✓ I can see more variety online.

Preposition 'in' with 'online' is awkward. Use 'online' as adverb and 'variety' instead of 'variation' for natural collocation. Suggestion: say 'more variety online'.

× Select my shoe size and over it over app and I will get home.

✓ I can select my shoe size in the app and have it delivered to my home.

Original is ungrammatical. Use 'select my shoe size in the app' and 'have it delivered to my home' to express ordering and delivery. Suggestion: restructure sentence to show actions clearly and use passive 'have it delivered' or 'and it will be delivered to my home'.

× It varies, sometimes I spend maybe 20 to 30 lbs uh, sometimes even I spend more than 100.

✓ It varies; sometimes I spend maybe 20 to 30 pounds, and sometimes I spend more than 100.

Use 'pounds' spelled out in context and add conjunction to connect clauses. Avoid filler 'uh' and keep consistent punctuation. Suggestion: remove filler words and use consistent currency wording.

× Uh, that depends on shoes quality.

✓ That depends on the quality of the shoes.

The noun phrase 'shoes quality' needs the structure 'the quality of the shoes'. Suggestion: use 'the quality of the shoes'.

× When I need good shoes for long travel or any shoes for office work, I usually buy expensive shoes which is often over than 1000.

✓ When I need good shoes for long travel or for office work, I usually buy expensive shoes which are often over 1000 pounds.

'Shoes' is plural so use 'which are' not 'which is'. Also use 'over 1000 pounds' (include currency and correct preposition 'over'). Suggestion: match verb to plural subject and include currency unit.

× Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes? Student: It's an interesting question but anyways I prefer comfortable shoes over fashion.

✓ It's an interesting question, but I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones.

Use 'fashionable ones' to contrast with 'comfortable shoes'. 'Over fashion' is incorrect; 'over' should compare with adjective+noun. Remove 'anyways' and add comma. Suggestion: say 'prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones'.

× I like to buy shoes which are more trendy or I can tell people OK see I buy Nike but comfort is more priority.

✓ I like to buy shoes that are trendier or that I can show people, 'See, I buy Nike,' but comfort is more of a priority.

Use 'that' instead of 'which' in restrictive clauses. Use comparative 'trendier' not 'more trendy'. 'More priority' is incorrect; use 'more of a priority'. Phrasing for 'show people' clarified. Suggestion: use 'that' for defining clauses, comparative adjective 'trendier', and 'more of a priority'.