鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatically accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, give a precise frequency, and then briefly explain why. Correct singular/plural and articles, and avoid contradictory words like “maybe twice a year” vs “I buy often.” Use linking words (because/so) properly and keep to 2–4 short sentences.

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy shoes about twice a year because I don’t have much money. I prefer comfortable shoes because I have a part-time job and I’m on my feet a lot.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then give specific reasons with clear linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and repeated words. Use accurate expressions like “buy shoes online” and explain concerns (size, fit, return policy) succinctly. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I’m worried about sizing and fit. Also, I prefer to try shoes on in a store to make sure they’re comfortable and that I can return them easily if needed.

建議: Start with a clear amount and then justify it briefly. Avoid hesitation and repetition. Use correct phrasing: “I usually spend around ¥10,000 on shoes.” Add one reason (quality/comfort) using a linking word like because or so.

範例: I usually spend about ¥10,000 on a pair of shoes because that price gets me comfortable and reasonably durable footwear. I can’t afford expensive brand-name shoes, so this is a practical choice.

建議: Answer directly and clearly: state your preference and give two concise, specific reasons. Avoid unclear phrases (“first generation doesn't come for the best”) and repetition. Use linking words (because, so) and finish with a complete sentence. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I stand for long periods at my part-time job. Fashionable shoes often sacrifice support, so I choose comfort to avoid foot pain and tiredness.

× I like buying shoe and maybe twice in a year I buy because I don't have a money.

✓ I like buying shoes and maybe twice a year I buy because I don't have much money.

Use plural 'shoes' for general shopping and 'money' is uncountable so omit 'a' and use 'much' to indicate limited amount. Also 'twice a year' is the correct time expression.

× So I buy often shoes and then I prefer to buy a comfortable shoe.

✓ So I often buy shoes and then I prefer to buy comfortable shoes.

Adverb placement: 'often' goes before the main verb. Use plural 'shoes' when speaking generally and 'comfortable shoes' matches plural subject.

× Yeah, because I have a part time job, so comfortable.

✓ Yeah, because I have a part-time job, I need comfortable shoes.

Sentence lacked a main verb and clear subject-verb agreement. Adding 'I need' makes it a complete clause. Also use hyphenated 'part-time' as a compound adjective.

× Uh, no, I haven't ever bought shoes from online because the size is different and and then I can, uh, see by I can see my size.

✓ Uh, no, I haven't ever bought shoes online because sizes are different and I can't be sure about my size.

Remove unnecessary 'from' before 'online'. Use plural 'sizes' to indicate variation. Replace awkward 'I can see by I can see my size' with 'I can't be sure about my size' to convey uncertainty.

× So it's correct or not.

✓ So I'm not sure if it's correct or not.

Original is a fragment; adding 'I'm not sure if' completes the idea and fits spoken uncertainty.

× I don't know. That's why I don't, I don't have an buying from online.

✓ I don't know. That's why I haven't bought from online.

'Have an buying' is ungrammatical. Use present perfect 'haven't bought' to match 'ever' earlier and remove extraneous words. Also prefer 'bought online' (without 'from').

× I can't afford uh on brand new shoes, so I usually spend on shoe around ¥10,000.

✓ I can't afford brand-new shoes, so I usually spend around ¥10,000 on shoes.

Remove extra preposition 'on' after 'afford' (afford takes an object). Use 'brand-new' as adjective before plural noun 'shoes'. Place 'around ¥10,000' before 'on shoes' for natural word order.

× Yeah, it's very comfortable and affordable shoes.

✓ Yeah, they are very comfortable and affordable shoes.

'It' is incorrect for plural 'shoes'; use 'they are' to agree with plural noun.

× I want to buy around uh ¥10,000, yeah.

✓ I want to spend around ¥10,000.

Use 'spend' to indicate the amount of money. 'Buy around ¥10,000' is unclear; 'spend around ¥10,000' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× So first generation doesn't come for the best.

✓ So being fashionable doesn't come first for me.

Original is unclear and ungrammatical. 'First generation' is incorrect; intended meaning is that fashion is not their priority. Rephrase to 'being fashionable doesn't come first for me.'

× So that's why I don't want to buy fresh individual shoes and then the comfortable shoe is for a.

✓ So that's why I don't want to buy fashionable shoes; I prefer comfortable shoes.

'Fresh individual shoes' is incorrect and unclear. Replace with 'fashionable shoes' and make a clear contrast: 'I prefer comfortable shoes.' Ensure sentence is complete and coherent.