鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + frequency), avoid filler words, correct grammar (a new pair of shoes), and give one specific reason with linking words. Limit to 2–4 sentences. Also clarify unclear phrases (e.g., brand name) and use simple vocabulary accurately.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying new shoes quite often — about once every two months. I like collecting the latest models from my favorite brands because they release new designs frequently and I appreciate updated technology and styles.

建議: Answer directly and correct phrasing (online platforms). Remove fillers and finish the thought: explain why you prefer online shopping with a specific detail (discounts, convenience, reviews). Use linking words (because, so) and 1–3 supporting details.

範例: Yes, I often buy shoes online from platforms like Shopee or Lazada because they offer big discounts and a wide selection. Also, I can read customer reviews to choose the right size and style.

建議: Be precise and consistent with currency and numbers (e.g., 3,000 baht). Avoid hesitation and unclear phrases (on cloud). Start with a clear amount, then give a brief reason for that budget and name brands if relevant. Use one linking phrase to add justification.

範例: I usually spend about 3,000 baht per pair, though I rarely pay more than 5,000 baht. I prefer established brands like Nike because they offer good comfort and durability.

建議: Provide a clear preference and concise reasons. Correct vocabulary (sports shoes, support my foot) and grammar. Use one linking word (because, since) and give a specific example or consequence (e.g., I wear them all day, they reduce pain). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I wear them for long periods and need good support. For example, I choose running shoes with cushioned soles to protect my feet during exercise and daily walking.

× I usually like buying a new shoes because, uh, I like to brand car on cloud and it also have like release the new model of shoes quite often, so I usually buy it when it release because it.

✓ I usually like buying new shoes because I like the brand On Cloud and it also releases new models of shoes quite often, so I usually buy them when they are released.

Errors: 'a new shoes' uses singular article with plural noun (singular/plural issue). 'brand car on cloud' is incorrect word order and name; should be 'brand On Cloud'. 'it also have like release' uses incorrect verb form and subject-verb agreement; should be 'it also releases'. 'new model' should be plural 'new models' to match 'quite often'. 'I usually buy it when it release' uses wrong pronoun and verb form; use plural pronoun 'them' for shoes and passive or correct verb 'are released'. Suggestion: match number (singular/plural), use correct brand name and proper subject-verb agreement, and use correct pronouns for plural nouns.

× I usually buy new shoes through a life platform quite often like uh Shopee or Lazada, because this platform provide a lot of uh, discount that give me uh.

✓ I usually buy new shoes through live platforms quite often, like Shopee or Lazada, because these platforms provide a lot of discounts for me.

Errors: 'a life platform' is wrong word choice and article; should be 'live platforms' (plural) — article and noun number error (singular/plural and word choice). 'this platform provide' has subject-verb disagreement; with plural 'platforms' use 'provide'. 'discount' should be plural 'discounts' or 'a lot of discounts' or 'many discounts'. Suggestion: use correct noun ('live platform' meaning live-streaming platforms) or 'online platforms', match singular/plural, and ensure subject-verb agreement in present tense.

× I usually spend around 3000 per pair of shoes. Uh, it's of a not over 5000 baht and I always choose a brand like Nike, uh, on cloud.

✓ I usually spend around 3,000 baht per pair of shoes; it's usually not over 5,000 baht, and I always choose brands like Nike or On Cloud.

Errors: Number formatting and currency phrasing awkward; need '3,000 baht per pair'. 'it's of a not over 5000 baht' is ungrammatical — correct to 'it's usually not over 5,000 baht'. 'choose a brand like Nike, uh, on cloud' mixes singular/plural and brand names; use 'brands like Nike or On Cloud' and capitalize proper nouns. Suggestion: use clear currency phrasing, correct article use, and coordinate multiple brands with 'or' and plural 'brands' if referring to more than one.

× I generally prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable shoes because I quite go for the sport shoe that like make for running or docking that can support my food better and.

✓ I generally prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because I tend to choose sports shoes made for running or walking that can support my feet better.

Errors: 'fashionable shoes' repetition ok but 'fashionable ones' is more natural. 'I quite go for' is incorrect collocation — use 'I tend to choose' or 'I prefer'. 'the sport shoe' should be 'sports shoes' (singular/plural). 'that like make for running or docking' contains wrong verb forms and word choice; 'made for running or walking' is correct. 'support my food' is wrong word choice; should be 'support my feet'. Suggestion: use correct collocations ('tend to', 'sports shoes'), correct word choices ('walking' not 'docking', 'feet' not 'food'), and match singular/plural.