鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with grammar and phrasing—use correct verb forms and make the response slightly more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a linking word. Avoid repeating 'favorite'.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually go to the nearby shopping center when my preferred brands have sales, because I can try them on and get good discounts.

建議: Good direct answer and reason. Improve cohesion by using a linking word and be more specific about why online is better (selection, price, convenience). Also avoid giving a global recommendation—focus on personal experience.

範例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because there are bigger discounts and a wider selection, so I can compare styles and prices quickly before I buy.

建議: The answer is vague and contains redundant phrases; also check currency context and be realistic. Start with a clear estimate, then give one specific reason or habit. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating the shopping behaviour.

範例: I usually spend about $500 a year on shoes because I buy both trainers for the gym and casual shoes; when I save extra money, I sometimes buy a higher-priced pair at the shopping centre.

建議: Good clear preference and reason. Improve grammatical accuracy (subject-verb agreement and comparative phrasing) and tighten the sentence. Use one linking word and a specific example of the comfortable shoes you choose.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot and train at the gym; for example, I wear cushioned running shoes that reduce foot pain and support my arches.

× Whenever I got a sale on my favorite brands, I just visit the nearby shopping center and buy my favorite brand shoes.

✓ Whenever there was a sale on my favorite brands, I would visit the nearby shopping center and buy my favorite-brand shoes.

The original mixes past ('got') with present habitual ('visit', 'buy'). Use past habitual to match 'Whenever I got a sale' or change 'got' to present. 'Whenever there was a sale' correctly uses 'there was' for past occurrence, and 'would visit' indicates repeated past action. Also use a hyphen in 'favorite-brand' when used as a compound adjective.

× Yes, I often buy shoes online because the online sale is better than the shopping center sale, so I recommend buying shoes online.

✓ Yes, I often buy shoes online because online sales are better than shopping center sales, so I recommend buying shoes online.

Use plural 'sales' for general plural events and maintain simple present tense for habits. 'The online sale is better' implies a specific sale; using 'online sales are better' generalizes appropriately. No tense change needed; just correct countable noun form.

× Well, I spend too much on buying shoes. I usually spend $500 buying shoes online and whenever I get extra money saved, I go to the nearby shopping centre and then again buy shoes.

✓ Well, I spend a lot on shoes. I usually spend $500 buying shoes online, and whenever I save extra money, I go to the nearby shopping centre and buy more shoes.

'Spend too much on buying shoes' is awkward; use 'spend a lot on shoes'. Keep present simple for habits: 'I usually spend', 'whenever I save extra money'. 'Get extra money saved' is incorrect word order; 'save extra money' is correct. 'Then again buy shoes' is unnatural; 'buy more shoes' is clearer.

× Well I walk along and train a lot in the gym so I prefer comfortable shoes as compared to the fashion ones as the comfortable shoes relieves my foot pain as well.

✓ Well, I walk a lot and train frequently at the gym, so I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because comfortable shoes relieve my foot pain as well.

'Walk along' is incorrect in this context; use 'walk a lot'. 'Train a lot in the gym' is better as 'train frequently at the gym'. 'As compared to the fashion ones' is awkward; use 'rather than fashionable ones'. Subject-verb agreement: plural 'shoes' requires plural verb 'relieve', not 'relieves'. Also 'fashionable' is the correct adjective form.