鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần rút gọn và sửa ngữ pháp để trả lời tự nhiên hơn; chú ý thì (tense), số ít/nhì (singular/plural), và phát âm của tên riêng. Thêm liên từ hợp lý nếu muốn mở rộng một chút. Hãy nói 2–3 câu rõ ràng: câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp + một chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất hoặc lý do.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially sneakers. I usually buy one new pair each year, often using money I receive during the Lunar New Year. I prefer Adidas because their shoes fit me well and last a long time.

建議: Cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (thì và động từ), làm rõ ý (why dad gave money vs gave shoes), và tránh câu rời rạc bằng cách dùng liên từ. Giữ 2–4 câu: khẳng định, hoàn cảnh ngắn gọn, và kết quả cụ thể.

範例: Yes, I have. For my 15th birthday my dad gave me money, so I ordered a pair of trainers from an online store I trust. The design matched my taste and they arrived quickly and fitted perfectly.

建議: Câu dài, lủng củng và nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, cần rút gọn và dùng từ chính xác (e.g. 'quality' và 'comfortable' là tính từ). Nên nói trực tiếp số tiền, lý do cụ thể (chất lượng, độ thoải mái) và so sánh nếu cần. Tránh các cụm từ thừa như 'like'.

範例: I don't spend a lot on shoes; typically I pay about 1,000,000 VND for a pair. I prefer to buy mid-range shoes that offer good quality and comfort rather than expensive brands.

建議: Ý rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi từ vựng ('destroying the park' sai), ngữ pháp và một vài cụm từ không tự nhiên ('have me make a good impression'). Nên dùng ví dụ cụ thể, liên từ để mạch lạc và tối đa 3-4 câu.

範例: It depends on the occasion. For daily activities like going to school or walking in the park, I prefer comfortable shoes because they are practical for long periods. However, for formal events I choose fashionable shoes to look more professional and make a good impression.

× I have a collection of all the Adidas ones and I usually get a new pairs in the new year where I have my money come from the lucky money in Ted Holiday.

✓ I have a collection of all the Adidas ones and I usually get a new pair in the new year when I get lucky money during Tet Holiday.

Use singular 'pair' with 'a' instead of plural 'pairs'. Also use 'when I get' to show time and 'Tet Holiday' is the correct name; 'lucky money' is a fixed phrase. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches its article (a/an) and use appropriate time conjunctions.

× I bought a pair of shoes online on my 15th birthday because my dad give me so many as a present.

✓ I bought a pair of shoes online on my 15th birthday because my dad gave me so many as presents.

Past action requires past tense 'gave' for the third person singular subject 'dad'. Also 'so many' should refer to countable items and use plural 'presents' or 'gifts'. Suggestion: match verb tense to past context and ensure noun plurality fits.

× So I ordered them from the only store I choose a design I liked and the shoes arrived quickly and they fit well.

✓ So I ordered them from the only store where I had chosen a design I liked, and the shoes arrived quickly and fit well.

Original sentence mixes tenses and lacks connector; use past perfect or simple past 'had chosen'/'chosen' to show prior choice, and 'where' to introduce the clause. Also remove redundant 'they' before 'fit well'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and use relative clauses correctly.

× Honestly I'm not trying to spend lots of money on shoes because I'm not really like have lots of money so I usually spend around like 1,000,000 Vietnamese Dong for a pair of shoes to like certificate of its quality and also the comfortable.

✓ Honestly, I don't try to spend a lot of money on shoes because I don't really have much money, so I usually spend around 1,000,000 Vietnamese Dong for a pair of shoes to guarantee its quality and comfort.

Use simple present negative 'don't try' and 'don't have' instead of incorrect 'I'm not trying'/'I'm not really like have'. Use 'a lot of' for uncountable amount, 'much money' for uncountable, and 'guarantee its quality and comfort' is clearer. Suggestion: use correct negative forms and proper collocations (a lot of, much money, guarantee, comfort).

× For everything activities like going to school, work or taking destroying the park, I prefer comfortable shoes because they are practical and better for long periods of working.

✓ For everyday activities like going to school, work, or taking walks in the park, I prefer comfortable shoes because they are practical and better for long periods of activity.

Use 'everyday' adjective, not 'everything'. Replace 'taking destroying the park' with 'taking walks in the park'. Use 'for long periods of activity' rather than 'long periods of working'. Suggestion: choose correct prepositions and collocations (in the park, taking walks, periods of activity).

× But for formal or social events, I choose fashionable shoes because they look more appropriate and have me make a good impression.

✓ But for formal or social events, I choose fashionable shoes because they look more appropriate and help me make a good impression.

'Have me make' is incorrect; use 'help me make' or 'allow me to make'. The pronoun 'me' must be used with an appropriate verb. Suggestion: use verbs that collocate with 'me' to express enablement (help me, allow me).