鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences, use linking words for coherence, and give a brief reason or example. Focus on accurate verb forms and singular/plural agreement.

範例: Yes, I do like buying shoes, though I only buy them when my old pair is worn out. Because I value comfort, I usually choose practical designs rather than fashionable ones. For example, I replace my shoes every year when the soles start to break.

建議: Make the response concise and correct small errors. Use linking words (firstly, moreover) and give a specific example of a recent online purchase to add credibility. Limit to 3 sentences and avoid repeating words.

範例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because my schedule is quite busy, so shopping from home is convenient. Moreover, online stores usually offer discounts and a wider selection. For instance, I bought a pair of running shoes last month from a popular website at a 20% discount.

建議: Clarify the currency and correct the number. Start with a direct statement of typical spending, then explain briefly why. Keep it concise and avoid vague ranges that are unclear.

範例: I usually don't spend much on shoes; I typically spend about $80 to $90 per pair. I prefer affordable but durable brands because I buy shoes for everyday use.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then contrast reasons using linking words like 'although' or 'however'. Correct singular/plural and tense errors, and provide a brief specific example of when you might choose fashion over comfort.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes, such as sneakers, and wear them every day because they support my feet. Although I like fashionable shoes for special occasions, I seldom wear them since they are often uncomfortable—for example, I only wear heels for formal events.

× Yes, I like to buy shoes whenever my previous one pill broken.

✓ Yes, I like to buy shoes whenever my previous pair gets worn out.

The original sentence has singular/plural mismatch and incorrect word choice. 'previous one' should be 'previous pair' because shoes come in pairs (singular/plural issue). 'pill broken' is incorrect vocabulary; likely intended 'gets worn out' or 'is broken'. Use present simple 'gets' to express a habitual action. Suggestion: use 'pair' for shoes and correct verb phrase 'gets worn out.'

× At the moment I prefer to purchase new one.

✓ At the moment I prefer to purchase a new one.

The sentence misses the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'new one' (article error). Use 'a new one' to refer to a single replacement item. Suggestion: include appropriate articles before singular countable nouns.

× Apart from this, I always prefer to wear comfortable shoes instead of stylish ones.

✓ I always prefer to wear comfortable shoes instead of stylish ones.

The phrase 'Apart from this' is unnecessary and awkward in this context (incorrect conjunction/use of transitional phrase). Removing it makes the sentence natural and concise. Suggestion: use transitional phrases only when adding or contrasting additional information.

× I always prefer to purchase shoes from online.

✓ I always prefer to purchase shoes online.

'from online' is an incorrect prepositional phrase. The correct expression is 'purchase shoes online' or 'buy shoes online.' Remove 'from' when using 'online' as an adverb. Suggestion: use 'online' without 'from.'

× Firstly my schedule was little bit busy so it it really helpful for me to buy online.

✓ At first my schedule was a little bit busy, so buying online was really helpful for me.

Several issues: missing article 'a' before 'little bit' and repeated 'it it'; tense and sentence structure are awkward. 'Firstly' is fine but 'At first' or 'Initially' is better. Use 'buying online was really helpful' to make a clear subject and verb. Suggestion: include articles, remove duplicates, and use gerund 'buying' to refer to the activity.

× Apart from this it provides me some discount and offers.

✓ Besides, it provides me with some discounts and offers.

'Apart from this' is awkward; 'Besides' or 'Additionally' is better. Also missing 'with' after 'provides me' and 'discount' should be plural 'discounts' when general. This fixes conjunction/transition and prepositional use. Suggestion: use 'provides me with' and pluralize when appropriate.

× Well, I do not like to spend a lot of money on buying shoes, so usually I spend 8 to 900 on shoes.

✓ Well, I do not like to spend a lot of money on shoes, so usually I spend 800 to 900 on shoes.

The range '8 to 900' is incorrect; likely intended '800 to 900.' Also 'on buying shoes' is wordy; use 'on shoes.' This fixes quantifier/numeric expression and phrasing. Suggestion: write numerical ranges clearly and remove unnecessary words.

× Well, I always prefer to wear comfortable shoes such as sports shoes everyday I wear it.

✓ Well, I always prefer to wear comfortable shoes such as sports shoes; I wear them every day.

Run-on sentence with incorrect adverb placement and pronoun agreement. 'Everyday' (one word) is an adjective meaning commonplace; use 'every day' (two words) as an adverbial phrase. Also 'it' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'shoes.' Suggestion: split into two clauses, use 'every day' and correct plural pronoun 'them.'

× However, I love fashionable shoes, but it is so uncomfortable, so I do not prefer to wear it.

✓ However, I love fashionable shoes, but they are so uncomfortable, so I do not prefer to wear them.

Pronoun and agreement errors: 'shoes' is plural, so use 'they' and 'them' rather than 'it.' Also avoid repeating contrasting conjunctions 'however' and 'but' together; here 'however' at sentence start is acceptable but keep structure consistent. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.