鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating your current habit, then give one brief reason and frequency. Use linking words for contrast and avoid unnecessary words.

範例: I don't buy shoes very often nowadays. Although I liked buying new shoes when I was younger to keep up with fashion, now I prefer to buy only when a pair is worn out or on sale, so that means I shop for shoes maybe once or twice a year.

建議: Clarify meaning and use precise vocabulary. Start with a clear affirmative, then explain why with a specific example and a linking word. Avoid incorrect verbs like "appreciate" in this context.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online. I often buy running shoes on websites because many local stores don't stock the latest models, so I can find a wider selection and better prices online.

建議: Make the sentence structure correct and give a precise amount or range. Use linking words to explain why you spend that amount and avoid unclear phrases. Keep it concise.

範例: I don't buy shoes frequently, but when I do I usually spend around 5,000 to 6,000 baht. I pay that much because I prefer good quality shoes that last longer.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating preference, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "as I have gotten older") and use natural phrases such as "for exercising".

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes now. As I've gotten older, comfort matters more because I walk a lot and sometimes exercise, so I choose shoes with good support rather than the latest fashion.

× When I was younger I did like buying new shoes because I wanted to keep my fashion up to date.

✓ When I was younger, I liked buying new shoes because I wanted to keep my fashion up to date.

Use simple past rather than 'did' plus base verb for affirmative statements in past. 'I did like' is emphatic; 'I liked' is the normal past tense form. Also add a comma after introductory clause.

× However, currently I am not really into shoes.

✓ However, currently I am not really into shoes.

Sentence is grammatically correct. It correctly uses present continuous/stative expression 'am not into'. No change needed.

× Yes, I have. I usually appreciate my tennis shoes online because they don't have these tennis shoes on the physical stores.

✓ Yes, I have. I usually buy my tennis shoes online because they are not available in physical stores.

The original uses 'appreciate' incorrectly (should be 'buy') and 'don't have these tennis shoes on the physical stores' has errors in verb choice and preposition/quantifier. Use simple present 'buy' for habitual action and 'are not available in physical stores' or 'are not sold in physical stores'. Also change 'on' to 'in' and remove 'these' which is unnecessary.

× I don't frequent purchase choose but when it comes I usually purchase around 5 to 6000 baht which is a very normal price.

✓ I don't frequently buy shoes, but when I do I usually spend around 5,000 to 6,000 baht, which is a very normal price.

Multiple errors: 'frequent purchase choose' is garbled. Use 'frequently buy shoes'. 'When it comes' should be 'when I do'. Use 'spend' for money, and format numbers '5,000 to 6,000'. Include commas and a clarifying clause. 'Purchase around 5 to 6000 baht' had incorrect quantifier and number format.

× I used to prefer fashionable shoes, however as I become older I prefer comfortable shoes because I can wear them through anywhere, have exercise.

✓ I used to prefer fashionable shoes; however, as I have become older I prefer comfortable shoes because I can wear them anywhere and exercise in them.

Mix of tenses: 'as I become older' should be present perfect 'as I have become older' to show change over time. 'Wear them through anywhere' is incorrect preposition—use 'anywhere'. 'Have exercise' is unnatural; use 'exercise in them'. Also appropriate punctuation and connector ('however') placement.