鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, concise and accurate. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'own' not 'owe', 'pair' not 'spoke', 'for daily walking' not 'daily protein'). Avoid repetition and keep to under five sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

範例: I don't buy shoes very often; I only buy them occasionally. I currently own only a few pairs, mainly one pair of sneakers that I use for daily walking because they're comfortable and durable.

建議: Answer directly and organize your response. Start with a clear yes/no, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'so'). Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., 'try them on' not 'have a try on it'). Avoid vague fillers like 'umm' and redundant phrases.

範例: Yes, I often browse shoes online first because it's convenient and shows many styles. However, I usually try them on in a store before buying because sizes and colours can look different in real life.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your typical spending range. Use specific numbers and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'depending on the purpose', 'sports shoes', 'formal shoes'). Explain reasons briefly with linking words ('for example', 'because'). Remove filler words and correct sentence structure.

範例: It depends on the purpose, but I usually spend under $100 for casual shoes. For example, I prefer to keep a low budget for everyday sneakers, although I might spend more on formal shoes if needed.

建議: Give a direct answer then a brief, specific explanation using linking words (e.g., 'but', 'because'). Correct repetition and incomplete sentences. Use precise vocabulary ('comfortable', 'formal event', 'walk in the park') and finish your thought to avoid abrupt endings.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday activities, but I choose fashionable shoes for formal events. For example, I'll wear dress shoes to a dinner because they look smart, whereas I wear sneakers when walking my dog because they are much more comfortable.

× I only owe a few shoes because I don't often buy so many shoe excessively.

✓ I only own a few pairs of shoes because I don't often buy shoes excessively.

The student used 'owe' instead of 'own' and mixed singular/plural forms incorrectly: 'a few shoes' is okay but more natural is 'a few pairs of shoes'; 'so many shoe' is incorrect because 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes'. Suggestion: use 'own' for possession and 'pairs of shoes' or 'shoes' for plural reference.

× I only buy it occasionally.

✓ I only buy shoes occasionally.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to the plural noun 'shoes'. Use the plural noun 'shoes' to match the verb 'buy'. Also, subject is first person so no third-person -s is needed. Suggestion: keep noun/pronoun agreement: 'I buy shoes occasionally.'

× Only at the moment I have one spoke shoe which is for walking in daily protein.

✓ At the moment I have one pair of sport shoes which I use for walking every day.

This sentence has multiple lexical and structure problems: 'Only at the moment' is awkward — use 'At the moment'; 'one spoke shoe' seems to be a misuse of 'sport' and 'one' should be 'one pair' for shoes; 'walking in daily protein' is nonsensical — likely intended 'walking every day'. Suggestion: simplify structure: 'At the moment I have one pair of sport shoes which I use for walking every day.'

× Yeah, I usually have to look at them online first.

✓ Yes, I usually look at them online first.

'Have to look' implies obligation rather than habit; context asks about habit. Use simple present 'I usually look' to describe habitual action. Suggestion: use simple present for routines.

× People are coming to the store, have a try on it and decide whether I really like it or not.

✓ Then I go to the store to try them on and decide whether I really like them or not.

Original mixes tenses and uses incorrect pronouns: 'People are coming' is irrelevant and wrong tense; 'have a try on it' is incorrect phrasing and pronoun 'it' should be 'them' (plural 'shoes'). Suggestion: state sequence clearly: 'I go to the store to try them on and decide whether I like them.'

× Because sometimes they might look different from the Internet.

✓ Because sometimes they might look different than they do online.

Use 'different than' or 'different from' + comparison; better to specify 'online' rather than 'the Internet' in this context and match structure with 'they do online'. Suggestion: 'different than they appear online' or 'different from the pictures online.'

× Umm, and in the real life.

✓ Umm, in real life, they can look different.

Fragment lacking verb and context. Convert into a full sentence explaining the contrast. Suggestion: avoid fragments; combine with previous sentence or complete it: 'In real life they can look different.'

× Then I will say it depends for on the purposes that I'm buying.

✓ I would say it depends on the purpose I'm buying them for.

Incorrect preposition order 'depends for on' and pluralization: 'purposes' should be 'purpose' or 'the purposes'; placement of 'for' should be at end or use 'depends on'. Suggestion: use 'depends on' + object: 'depends on the purpose' or 'depends on what I need them for.'

× If I buy a washroom, my budget would be within 100 or under 100.

✓ If I buy casual shoes, my budget would be around 100 or less.

'Buy a washroom' is incorrect word choice; likely meant a type of shoe. 'Within 100 or under 100' is redundant — use 'around 100' or '100 or less'. Suggestion: choose correct noun and state amount clearly: 'around 100' or '100 or less'.

× I wouldn't go buy excessive.

✓ I wouldn't buy excessively.

Incorrect verb phrase 'go buy excessive' and misuse of adjective/adverb. Use adverb 'excessively' to modify 'buy' or rephrase 'I wouldn't buy too much.' Suggestion: use proper adverb or restructure sentence.

× I wouldn't spend excessively on work or umm if I buying a shoe.

✓ I wouldn't spend a lot on work shoes or if I were buying a shoe for work.

Errors: missing auxiliary in conditional 'if I buying' should be 'if I were buying' or 'if I am buying'; unclear phrase 'on work' needs 'work shoes'. Suggestion: use conditional structure 'if I were buying' and specify 'work shoes'.

× Wow. I will say it depends on where I am going out.

✓ I would say it depends on where I am going out to.

Use conditional 'would' to be more natural in this hypothetical; also add preposition 'to' after 'going out'. Suggestion: 'I would say it depends on where I'm going out to.'

× I would probably probably wear a fashionable shoe, but if I go for walk with my dog or just uh, marker, I would prefer a comfy shoe because I.

✓ I would probably wear fashionable shoes, but if I go for a walk with my dog or just go for a walk, I would prefer comfortable shoes.

Issues: repeated 'probably'; 'wear a fashionable shoe' better as plural 'wear fashionable shoes'; 'go for walk' needs article 'a'; 'marker' seems wrong word—likely 'market' or 'a walk' so corrected to 'go for a walk'; sentence ends incomplete 'because I.' removed. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and complete the sentence with reason or stop at preference.