鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, reduce redundancy, and make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and word choice (e.g., "in person" not "personally").

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually shop online when I’m busy, but I prefer going to stores in person when I want to try shoes on.

建議: Make sentences grammatically correct and more specific. Name the app or describe it correctly, use past tense for past purchases, and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and give one specific detail about the purchase (brand, price, or why it was comfortable).

範例: Yes, I often shop online in Poland. I use an app called Demo because it’s convenient and has good delivery. Recently I bought a pair of running shoes there; they fit well and were very comfortable for daily walks.

建議: Give a clear estimate and concise reasons. Start with an approximate amount or price range, then briefly explain why. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "shoes" not "shows") and linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas. Keep to two or three sentences.

範例: I usually spend around $30–$50 on a pair of shoes because I prefer affordable options. I choose cheaper shoes so I can save money to help my younger sister with her studies.

建議: Be more decisive and concise: give a direct topic sentence then a short explanation with linking words. Use specific examples and correct word forms (e.g., "going on a trip"), and avoid repeating phrases like "actually" and "dependable."

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday use, such as for school or work, because I’m on my feet a lot. However, I choose fashionable shoes for special occasions or when I go on a trip to look nicer.

× Sometimes it will be online or sometimes I go to personally.

✓ Sometimes it is online or sometimes I go in person.

The student used 'will be' and 'go to personally' incorrectly. The context asks about frequency/habit, so present simple 'is' fits. 'Go to personally' is unidiomatic; use 'go in person' which correctly uses the present participle form 'going' is not needed here. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and the idiomatic phrase 'go in person'.

× Actually it depends.

✓ Actually, it depends.

Missing comma after 'Actually' is punctuation rather than tense, but the sentence is otherwise correct present simple. Keep present simple 'depends' for habitual situations. Suggestion: add comma for clarity.

× If I am busy, I buy online.

✓ If I am busy, I buy online.

This sentence is grammatically correct: present simple in a conditional for habitual actions. No change needed.

× Yes, I prefer online shopping especially in Poland.

✓ Yes, I prefer online shopping, especially in Poland.

Sentence is correct using present simple to state preference. Add comma for clarity before the phrase 'especially in Poland'.

× I am using demo because it's a flexible apps for online shopping.

✓ I am using Demo because it's a flexible app for online shopping.

Problems: 'am using' is acceptable if the action is temporary, but 'apps' should be singular 'app' to agree with 'it's' and 'a'. Also proper noun 'Demo' capitalized if it's an app name. Suggestion: match singular/plural and article with the noun: 'a flexible app'.

× Recently I buy a shows it.

✓ Recently I bought a pair of shoes there.

Tense error: 'Recently' with past action requires past tense 'bought' (Grammar Problem Type 5), and the original word order/words are incorrect. Also 'a shows it' is ungrammatical; use 'a pair of shoes' and indicate location with 'there' if referring to the app/site. Suggestion: use past simple for completed recent actions and correct collocations: 'bought a pair of shoes there'.

× It was a really comfortable and enjoyable for me.

✓ They were really comfortable and enjoyable for me.

Subject-pronoun agreement and article use: referring to shoes (plural) requires plural pronoun 'They' and plural verb 'were'; also drop unnecessary article 'a'. Suggestion: match verb number to the noun and remove 'a' before adjectives when describing plural items.

× It's a really good.

✓ They're really good.

'It's a really good' is ungrammatical because 'good' needs a noun (good what?) and shoes are plural. Use plural pronoun 'They're really good' or 'They're really good shoes.' Suggestion: ensure adjectives modify a clear noun and match number.

× Actually I am very simple person and I prefer affordable shows than expensive shows because I need to help my family.

✓ Actually, I am a very simple person and I prefer affordable shoes to expensive ones because I need to help my family.

Missing article 'a' before 'very simple person'. 'Shows' is misspelling of 'shoes'. Use 'prefer... to...' construction rather than 'prefer... than'. Use 'ones' as pronoun for 'shoes' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: add articles, correct spelling, and use correct 'prefer... to' pattern.

× I have younger sister I need to help her for her studies so I need to manage for my family budget.

✓ I have a younger sister; I need to help her with her studies, so I need to manage my family budget.

Missing article 'a' before 'younger sister'. Add linking punctuation. Use 'help her with her studies' (correct preposition). Remove unnecessary 'for' after 'manage' and use 'manage my family budget'. Suggestion: add articles and correct prepositions and sentence connectors.

× It depends actually, I prefer both.

✓ It depends, actually; I prefer both.

Tense is fine (present simple), but punctuation and word order: place comma after 'depends' and use semicolon or split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use proper punctuation to separate clauses.

× Sometimes when I go outside or trip, I prefer fashionable shoes.

✓ Sometimes when I go out or travel, I prefer fashionable shoes.

'Go outside or trip' is unidiomatic. Use 'go out' for going outside and 'travel' or 'go on a trip' for trips. Present simple tense is correct for habitual preference. Suggestion: use idiomatic verbs 'go out' or 'travel'.

× But if I go to school, college or go to work, I prefer comfortable shoes.

✓ But if I go to school, college, or work, I prefer comfortable shoes.

Sentence is correct in present simple. Remove redundant 'go to' before 'work' for conciseness and add commas in a list. Suggestion: list items clearly and keep parallel structure.

× Actually, it's totally dependable.

✓ Actually, it's totally dependable.

'Dependable' is a choice but 'dependent' or 'it depends' would be more natural. If meaning 'it depends', better: 'Actually, it depends.' However, grammatically 'it's totally dependable' is correct but may not convey intended meaning. Suggestion: use 'it depends' to express that preference varies.