鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng và tự nhiên nhưng cần rút ngắn để tránh lặp và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể (ví dụ: loại giày và tần suất). Tránh câu quá dài; sửa lỗi như “more comfortable” nên là “more comfortable” kèm cấu trúc so sánh đúng. Sử dụng liên từ hợp lý như “because” hoặc “so” nhưng không chồng chéo.

範例: I don’t often buy shoes because I prefer quality over quantity. I usually buy a new pair only when I really need one, about once every year or two, and I tend to choose leather shoes because they last longer and are more comfortable.

建議: Nội dung đủ nhưng diễn đạt rối, nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cú pháp khiến ý không rõ ràng. Cần tổ chức lại: nêu rõ hoàn cảnh, hành động bạn làm và kết quả. Sử dụng thì phù hợp (past simple) và liên từ chính xác. Tránh từ thừa như “and pleased” khi đã nói “satisfied”.

範例: Yes. I once needed shoes for a presentation the next day, so I hurriedly ordered from Shopee using user reviews to choose a reliable seller. Thanks to a flash sale and coupons, the price was much lower, and the shoes arrived on time, so I was very satisfied.

建議: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng có vài lỗi như “isn't” thừa và thì không nhất quán. Nên dùng cấu trúc ngắn, mạch lạc: nói tỷ lệ, lý do và tần suất. Cải thiện tính cụ thể bằng cách nêu ví dụ về mức chi tiêu thực tế nếu có thể. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và ngắt câu hợp lý.

範例: Not much. I usually spend about 5–10% of my monthly budget on shoes because they aren’t a priority. I prefer to spend on essentials like food and transport, so I normally buy new shoes only once a year.

建議: Câu trả lời tốt: rõ ràng, liên kết hợp lý và có lý do cá nhân. Để cao điểm hơn, bạn có thể thêm một so sánh ngắn hoặc một ví dụ cụ thể về thương hiệu/loại giày để tăng tính cụ thể. Giữ độ dài trong 3–4 câu.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I value good materials and overall quality. Since I enjoy sports, I usually choose high-quality trainers for walking and daily exercise, as they provide better support and last longer. For example, I often buy a well-known running brand for its cushioning and durability.

× I'm not very keen on buying shoes because I prefer quality over quantity, so I usually buy a new pair only when I really need it once, typically once every year or two years.

✓ I'm not very keen on buying shoes because I prefer quality over quantity, so I usually buy a new pair only when I really need one, typically once a year or every two years.

The sentence mixes singular/plural references and redundant time expressions. Replace 'it' with 'one' to refer to 'a new pair' correctly. 'Once, typically once every year or two years' is redundant; simplify to 'once a year or every two years' for clarity and correct present simple usage for habits.

× I tend to choose shoes made of higher quality materials like leather because they last longer and more comfortable.

✓ I tend to choose shoes made of higher-quality materials like leather because they last longer and are more comfortable.

'Higher quality' used as a compound adjective before a noun should be hyphenated: 'higher-quality materials'. The sentence lacks a verb in the second clause; use 'are' before 'more comfortable' to form a correct predicate.

× Yes, of course I was in a hurry and needed a pair of shoes for a presentation the next day.

✓ Yes, of course I was in a hurry and needed a pair of shoes for a presentation the next day.

This sentence is correct in past tense and matches the context. No grammatical change needed. (Kept for completeness.)

× So I quickly use an e-commerce app Shopee and Boss one.

✓ So I quickly used e-commerce apps like Shopee and Boss one.

The context refers to a past event, so use past tense 'used' not 'use'. Also plural 'apps' and 'like' makes the example natural; include 'one' only if naming a specific app; otherwise 'like' clarifies examples.

× After reading user reviews, flash sales and coupons make is much cheaper and the shoes around time so I was really satisfied and pleased.

✓ After reading user reviews, I found that flash sales and coupons made the shoes much cheaper and available on time, so I was really satisfied and pleased.

Original has missing subject and incorrect verb forms. Add subject 'I found that' to introduce the result clause, change 'make is' to 'made' (past tense) and clarify 'available on time' instead of 'the shoes around time'. This corrects tense consistency and sentence structure.

× Not very much. I usually spend about 5 to 10% of my monthly budget on shoes because buying new ones is isn't a priority.

✓ Not very much. I usually spend about 5 to 10% of my monthly budget on shoes because buying new ones isn't a priority.

Remove the extra 'is' in 'is isn't' which is a typographical duplication. The corrected sentence uses 'isn't' properly to express non-priority.

× I prefer to allocate money to essential like food and transport, so I only buy shoes when I really needed them, normally about once a year.

✓ I prefer to allocate money to essentials like food and transport, so I only buy shoes when I really need them, normally about once a year.

Use the noun 'essentials' (plural) after 'allocate money to'. Change 'needed' to present simple 'need' to express habitual action. Maintain tense consistency for habits.

× Personally, I prefer comfortable shoes because I value the material and overall quality.

✓ Personally, I prefer comfortable shoes because I value the materials and overall quality.

Prefer plural 'materials' to match general reference; sentence is otherwise fine. This small change improves noun agreement.

× As someone who enjoys sports, I usually choose high quality trainers for walking and daily exercise because they offer better support and durability.

✓ As someone who enjoys sports, I usually choose high-quality trainers for walking and daily exercise because they offer better support and durability.

Use a hyphen in the compound adjective 'high-quality' when it precedes the noun 'trainers' to follow standard adjective formation.