鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は内容が明確ですが、文法ミスと冗長表現がいくつかあります。特に「until we until they wear out it」は不自然で繰り返しがあります。また、話の構成を改善するために主題文を明確にしてから短い理由や頻度を述べると良いでしょう。具体的には、誤った語順の訂正、余分な語の削除、文を2〜3文に分ける練習をしてください。さらに、頻度を述べる際は「once a year」の前に簡単な時間表現を付け加えると自然です。

範例: I don’t usually like buying shoes. I wear them until they wear out because it’s more economical, and I don’t change my style often. As a result, I usually buy new shoes about once a year.

建議: 内容は的確で理由も明確です。ただし「trying demo in person」は不自然な表現です。より自然な語句（try them on / try shoes on）を使い、接続詞を使って文を滑らかに繋げると良いでしょう。また短い一文で主張→理由の順に話す練習をしてください。

範例: No, I’ve never bought shoes online. I’m not confident about the sizing because it varies between brands, so I prefer to try shoes on in person before I buy them.

建議: とても良い回答です。理由や補足が明確でまとまりもあります。改善点としては、接続語をさらに活用して文の流れを滑らかにし、具体的な金額範囲や頻度（例：every few years）を一つ付け加えると説得力が増します。

範例: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I value durability and comfort. Since I don’t buy shoes often, I don’t mind paying a bit more, and I sometimes wait for sales to get a better deal.

建議: 考えは明確ですが、繰り返し（"comfortable and com comfortable and fashionable"）や語の過剰が見られます。主題文を簡潔にし、理由や例（例えばどんなデザインやブランド）を一つ追加すると良いでしょう。また「both...and...」構文を正しく使ってください。

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes, but I also like them to look stylish. I believe you can find shoes that are both comfortable and fashionable, for example, sneakers with cushioned soles that come in modern designs.

× I don't really like buying shoes, I prefer to wear them until we until they wear out it because it's more economical and I don't change my style very often so I usually buy new ones once a year.

✓ I don't really like buying shoes; I prefer to wear them until they wear out because it's more economical and I don't change my style very often, so I usually buy new ones once a year.

The sentence contains redundant and incorrect pronoun uses: 'we until they wear out it' is ungrammatical and confusing. Replace with 'until they wear out' to refer clearly to 'shoes'. Also improve sentence punctuation by using a semicolon or separating clauses to avoid run-on sentences. Suggestion: identify the noun 'shoes' and use the plural pronoun 'they' consistently, and remove extra words.

× I've never bought shoes online because I'm not confident about the size since sizes vary between brands. I prefer trying demo in person.

✓ I've never bought shoes online because I'm not confident about sizes since sizes vary between brands. I prefer trying them on in person.

'Trying demo' is incorrect collocation and missing appropriate verb structure. Use the verb phrase 'trying them on' (present participle 'trying' followed by object 'them' and particle 'on') to indicate trying shoes for fit. Also 'the size' is better as plural 'sizes' when speaking generally. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'try on' and match noun number when generalizing.

× I prefer comfortable shoes, but I still try to choose stylish designs. I think it's possible to find ones that are both stylish and com comfortable and fashionable.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes, but I still try to choose stylish designs. I think it's possible to find ones that are both stylish, comfortable, and fashionable.

There is a typo 'com comfortable' and awkward coordination. Remove the duplicate fragment and list adjectives correctly separated by commas. Also ensure parallel structure when listing adjectives. Suggestion: proofread for typos and use parallel adjective lists like 'stylish, comfortable, and fashionable.'