鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は明確で自然ですが、文がやや長く冗長に感じられます。トピック文を明確にし、理由を2つ以内で簡潔に述べると良いです。また、リンク表現（例えば“because”の代わりに“mainly because”や“so”の前に短い句を入れる）を使って論理を整えると更に効果的です。発音や流暢さを意識して、1〜2文で述べ切る練習をしてください。

範例: I don't like buying shoes very often. Mainly, I wear them until they wear out because it's more economical, so I usually buy new ones about once a year.

建議: 内容は具体的で自然ですが、2文目が文法的に分割されているため、接続詞を使って一文でつなぐとより流暢に聞こえます。また、補足として実際の経験や対策（例えば店舗での試し方）を加えると深みが出ます。発話は簡潔に保ち、接続詞を意識して繋げてください。

範例: I haven't bought shoes online because I'm not confident about sizes, which vary between brands, so I prefer trying them on in person.

建議: 回答は要点があるものの、文が断片的で未完了の文（“I also.”）があり、流暢さと構成が欠けています。トピックセンテンスの後に理由を一貫して示し、具体例や金額の幅を添えると説得力が増します。文を完全な形で1〜3文にまとめ、不要な切れを無くしてください。

範例: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I prefer comfortable, durable pairs. Since I don't buy them often, I'm happy to pay a bit more—typically between $60 and $100 for a good pair.

建議: 意見は明確でバランスの取れた回答ですが、文中に小さな冗長（“that are that look”）や繰り返しがあり、より流暢に整える余地があります。最初に直接答えを置き、続けて理由と具体例（例えば具体的なブランドやタイプ）を短く付け加えると良いでしょう。

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day, but I look for styles that are also smart. For example, I often choose cushioned sneakers that have a clean, modern design.

× I don't really like buying shoes, I prefer to wear them until they wear out because it's more economical and I don't change my style very often, so I usually buy new ones once a year.

✓ I don't really like buying shoes. I prefer to wear them until they wear out because it's more economical and I don't change my style very often, so I usually buy new ones once a year.

The original is a run-on sentence joined with commas. Separate independent clauses into shorter sentences or use a coordinating conjunction with a comma. Suggestion: split after 'shoes' or use 'so' appropriately to avoid comma splice. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I've never bought shoes online. Because I'm not confident about the size since sizes vary between brands, I prefer trying them on in person.

✓ I've never bought shoes online because I'm not confident about the size; sizes vary between brands, so I prefer trying them on in person.

Beginning the second sentence with 'Because' creates a sentence fragment. Combine the clauses into one sentence or attach the dependent clause to the main clause. Use a semicolon or conjunction for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes. Because I prefer comfortable and durable ones. I don't buy them very often so I don't mind paying a bit more. I also.

✓ I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I prefer comfortable and durable ones. I don't buy them very often, so I don't mind paying a bit more.

There are sentence fragments ('Because I prefer...' and 'I also.') and a trailing incomplete sentence ('I also.'). Combine the dependent clause with the main clause, remove the incomplete fragment, and add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: delete 'I also' or complete it with more information. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day, but I still try to find ones that are that look stylish.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day, but I still try to find ones that look stylish.

The phrase 'that are that look' contains a duplicated connector 'that' causing ungrammatical structure. Remove the extra 'that' so the relative clause reads 'that look stylish'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I think it's possible to find ones that are both comfortable and fashionable.

✓ I think it's possible to find ones that are both comfortable and fashionable.

This sentence is grammatical and needs no change. It correctly uses a relative clause and parallel adjectives. No error to correct. Grammar problem type ID:26