鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and correct verb forms (e.g., 'I like buying shoes' not 'to buying').

範例: I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy them when I have free time or when I see good deals on Instagram and other social media, because online stores often offer discounts that make it worth purchasing.

建議: Correct verb use and improve sentence structure. Give a direct answer, then explain with a clear contrast using linking words like 'however' or 'but', and provide a specific example of when you choose offline shopping.

範例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it's convenient and there is a wide selection. However, I buy shoes in physical stores when I want to check the quality and fit, for example, when buying leather shoes I prefer trying them on in-store.

建議: Be clear about the currency and amount, and correct grammar. Give one precise figure or a range, then explain the reason briefly and coherently. Use linking words like 'because' correctly and avoid unclear phrases such as 'daily teens'.

範例: I usually spend about 5,000 to 6,000 rupees on a pair of shoes because I wear them daily and value comfort and durability over price.

建議: Give a clear direct preference then support it with one contrasting example. Fix grammar and linking: use 'however' or 'but' to introduce exceptions, and avoid redundant phrases like 'in any'.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them most days and they help me stay on my feet. However, I sometimes choose fashionable shoes for special occasions like weddings or parties when appearance matters.

× Yes I like to buying shoes and when I have free time and when I watch the advertisement on Instagram and social media that time I buy the shoes because sometime I give good offers online so that.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes, and when I have free time or when I see advertisements on Instagram and social media, I buy shoes because sometimes there are good offers online.

The verb after 'like' should be the -ing form (gerund), not the infinitive with to. Use 'see advertisements' rather than 'watch the advertisement' for natural collocation. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'There are' is needed to state existence of offers (There be issue). Use conjunctions correctly ('or' instead of repeated 'and') and punctuation for clarity.

× Yes, I often to buy shoes online, but sometimes I buy the shoes offline when I get good quality in shoes and that time I buy shoes on offline.

✓ Yes, I often buy shoes online, but sometimes I buy shoes offline when I find better quality in them.

Remove the incorrect 'to' after 'often' (modal/auxiliary placement issue). 'Buy the shoes offline' is awkward; use 'buy shoes offline'. 'Get good quality in shoes' should be 'find better quality in them'. 'On offline' is incorrect preposition usage; 'offline' as an adverb is sufficient.

× I like to spend almost 5 and 6000 on my shoes because I always wear comfortable shoes and I wear the shoes in my daily teens so that I choose comfortable shoes.

✓ I like to spend almost 5,000 to 6,000 on my shoes because I always wear comfortable shoes and I wear them every day, so I choose comfortable ones.

Numbers were written incorrectly ('5 and 6000'); use a clear range '5,000 to 6,000'. 'In my daily teens' is unclear; likely 'every day' or 'in my daily routine'. Use pronoun 'them' instead of repeating 'the shoes'. Use 'ones' to refer back to shoes. Also adjust punctuation for clarity.

× I recently mentioned I prefer comfortable shoes because but sometime when I go with my friend in any party and function and that time I wear a fashionable shoes because it's a suit on me when I wear fashionable shoes in any wedding.

✓ As I mentioned, I prefer comfortable shoes, but sometimes when I go with my friends to a party or function, I wear fashionable shoes because they suit me at weddings.

'I recently mentioned' is unnatural; 'As I mentioned' is clearer. Remove the redundant 'because' after 'prefer comfortable shoes'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Use plural 'friends' if referring to more than one. Use 'to a party' not 'in any party'. 'A fashionable shoes' has article-number mismatch; use 'fashionable shoes' and 'they suit me' for correct pronoun reference. Simplify 'in any wedding' to 'at weddings'.