鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện: Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ, lắp lời (uh, umm). Cần câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ. Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (e.g. durable, versatile) và kiểm soát ngữ pháp (e.g. 'I only buy shoes once a year' thay vì 'just only once a year').

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy them only once a year because I prefer to invest in durable, versatile pairs. For example, I choose leather sneakers that can be worn for both casual and semi-formal occasions, so they last longer.

建議: Cải thiện: Trả lời ngắn gọn, sửa cấu trúc và ngữ pháp (e.g. 'I have bought shoes online several times'). Hạn chế lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ hợp lý (e.g. 'so', 'therefore'). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về trải nghiệm (kích cỡ, chất lượng, hoàn trả) để làm câu trả lời chi tiết hơn.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times because it is very convenient. For example, I can compare prices and read customer reviews across different websites, so I can choose the best value and return them easily if the size is wrong.

建議: Cải thiện: Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng nêu mức chi tiêu (give approximate amount or range). Tránh lỗi từ vựng/lỗi ngữ pháp và từ thừa ('marriage' không phù hợp). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (price range, stores, types) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

範例: I don't spend much on shoes because I'm a student; I usually spend around $20–$40 per pair. For example, I buy affordable canvas or synthetic shoes from budget stores that are comfortable enough for daily use.

建議: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp và chính xác, tránh nhiều tiếng lắp và từ thừa. Nên đưa lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ như 'because' và kết hợp so sánh ngắn gọn nếu cần. Thêm ví dụ cá nhân để minh họa.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they allow me to walk and stand for long periods without pain. For example, I choose sneakers with good cushioning for commuting, although I still buy one or two fashionable pairs for special occasions.

× I mean, I do prefer purchasing shoes since they are really useful and versatile as well.

✓ I mean, I do prefer buying shoes since they are really useful and versatile as well.

The verb 'prefer' is commonly followed by the base verb with or without 'to' (prefer to buy) or by the gerund (prefer buying). Here 'purchasing' is grammatically possible but 'buying' is more natural and simpler in conversational English. Suggestion: use 'buying' or 'prefer to buy' for clarity.

× Umm, for example, I allocate my money to buying shoes just only once a year.

✓ Umm, for example, I allocate money to buying shoes only once a year.

The phrase 'just only' is redundant; using both 'just' and 'only' is unnecessary. Also 'my money' can be shortened to 'money' in this context. Suggestion: use a single limiter like 'only once a year'.

× Uh, because I tell them to prioritize their sustainability over the.

✓ Uh, because I try to prioritize durability when I choose shoes.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear: 'I tell them' and the phrase 'over the' are incomplete. Likely intended meaning is to emphasize prioritizing long-lasting quality (durability). Suggestion: restructure sentence to clearly state the subject's action and object.

× I mean I have several times purchasing shoes online due to its convenience.

✓ I mean I have purchased shoes online several times due to their convenience.

After 'have' in present perfect, the past participle 'purchased' is required, not the gerund 'purchasing'. Also 'its convenience' is incorrect because 'shoes' plural needs 'their convenience' or refer to 'online shopping' as 'its convenience'. Suggestion: use 'have purchased' and match pronoun number.

× For example, when I adopted online shopping, it allowed me to compare the prices in various shop and websites.

✓ For example, when I took up online shopping, it allowed me to compare prices across various shops and websites.

'adopted online shopping' is awkward; 'took up' or 'started' is better. 'Compare the prices in' should be 'compare prices across' or 'among', and 'shop' should be plural 'shops'. Suggestion: use 'compare prices across various shops and websites'.

× Umm thereby I I can make informed choice to find out the real bargain.

✓ Umm, thereby I can make an informed choice to find the real bargain.

'Make informed choice' needs the article 'an'. 'To find out the real bargain' is wordy; 'find the real bargain' is more natural. Also remove duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: include correct article and simplify verb phrase.

× Oh well, would like to say that I do not tend to spend much money on shoes honestly.

✓ Oh well, I'd like to say that I do not tend to spend much money on shoes, honestly.

Missing subject for 'would like' — should be 'I'd like'. Commas improve clarity. Tense is present; correction adds contraction and punctuation. Suggestion: include subject and punctuation.

× Uh, the reason is I am a student right now, so an expensive or extravagant pair of shoes is definitely out.

✓ Uh, the reason is I am a student right now, so an expensive or extravagant pair of shoes is definitely out of the question.

The phrase 'is definitely out' is incomplete; common expression is 'out of the question'. Suggestion: use full idiomatic phrase.

× Marriage umm, for example, I uh, always look for their uh, shoes that are appropriate for daily use with affordable prices.

✓ For example, I always look for shoes that are appropriate for daily use and are affordable.

'Marriage' seems irrelevant or incorrect here. 'Their shoes' is wrong pronoun reference. 'Affordable prices' should be 'are affordable' or 'at affordable prices'. Suggestion: remove irrelevant word, use correct pronouns and parallel structure.

× Uh, when it comes to shoes, I definitely lean towards the comfortable ones.

✓ When it comes to shoes, I definitely lean towards comfortable ones.

Original is acceptable but 'the comfortable ones' is slightly wordy in casual speech; removing 'the' is smoother. Suggestion: either form is grammatical; prefer concise version.

× Uh, this immediately because they not only provide me with, uh, easy mobility and flexibility, uh, but also, uh, it can prevent my leg pain.

✓ This is because they not only provide me with easy mobility and flexibility, but they can also prevent leg pain.

Missing verb 'is' after 'this'. Pronoun and verb agreement: 'they... but it can' mixes plural and singular; should be 'they... they can also'. 'My leg pain' can be simplified to 'leg pain'. Suggestion: add 'is' and ensure pronoun-verb agreement.

× Uh, that set the fashionable shoes are also essential.

✓ That said, fashionable shoes are also important.

'That set the' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'that said'. 'Essential' can be replaced with 'important' for naturalness. Suggestion: use transitional phrase 'that said' to contrast previous idea.