鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no + frequency), then give one reason with a linking word and a short detail. Avoid unclear phrases like "see someone I like" and correct grammar (e.g., "how much I spent on life cost" → "how much I spend on living expenses").

範例: Yes, I do. I usually buy shoes about once a month. However, recently I try to be more careful with my spending because I need to budget for living expenses, so I only buy when I really need a new pair.

建議: Use a clear topic sentence and link reasons coherently. Use correct verb forms and reduce repetition. Mention a specific example or detail to make the answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I have. I often shop online because I don’t always have time to visit shops. For example, I usually browse websites in the evening and buy shoes when I find a style and size that suit me.

建議: Give a direct estimate (a price range) as a topic sentence, then explain with one reason. Use correct grammar ("I don't mind spending"), and avoid vague contrasts—be specific about amounts and situations.

範例: It depends, but I usually spend between $50 and $120 on a good pair. I don’t mind paying more for high-quality shoes that last, but I also buy cheaper pairs when I want variety.

建議: Start with a clear preference statement, then give two specific reasons linked smoothly. Fix grammar and awkward phrasing ("maintain in comfortable" → "keep me comfortable"). Keep it to two or three short sentences.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes now. Since I walk a lot for work and enjoy hiking, I need footwear that supports my feet and keeps me comfortable all day.

× Yes I do, I used to buy shoes whatever time I see someone I like without thinking, maybe once a month.

✓ Yes, I do. I used to buy shoes whenever I saw someone I liked without thinking; maybe once a month.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'Whatever time' should be 'whenever' (preposition/word choice) and when referring to a past habitual action use past tense: 'saw' and 'liked'. Also punctuation split into two sentences improves clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use 'whenever' for repeated occasions. Grammar problem type ID:6

× But now I'm more concerned how much I spent on life course.

✓ But now I'm more concerned about how much I spend on living expenses.

The phrase uses past tense 'spent' incorrectly when referring to ongoing concern in the present; use present simple 'spend'. Preposition 'about' is required after 'concerned', and 'life course' is not idiomatic—use 'living expenses'. Suggestion: use correct preposition and present tense for current concerns. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes I did because I can't go shopping on the street all the time, so I spend my leisure time browsing online and to see if I see something I like I will go buy it.

✓ Yes, I have, because I can't go shopping on the street all the time, so I spend my leisure time browsing online; if I see something I like, I will buy it.

Use present perfect 'have' for experience up to now in response to 'Have you ever...'. The clause 'to see if I see' is redundant; use conditional 'if I see'. Also punctuation and word order improved. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences and simplify conditional clauses. Grammar problem type ID:4

× Depends on the quality.

✓ It depends on the quality.

This fragment lacks a subject; add 'It' to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: include explicit subject for clarity and grammatical correctness. Grammar problem type ID:23

× I don't mind spend so much money on high quality shoes and I also like to spend money on the low price shoes I can have several choices with.

✓ I don't mind spending a lot of money on high-quality shoes, and I also like to buy inexpensive shoes so I can have several choices.

After 'don't mind' the verb should be in -ing form ('spending'). 'So much money' is more natural as 'a lot of money'. Use hyphen in 'high-quality' as a compound adjective. 'Low price shoes' should be 'inexpensive shoes' and rephrase 'I can have several choices with' to 'so I can have several choices'. Suggestion: use correct verb form after 'don't mind', prefer natural phrases and correct adjective placement. Grammar problem type ID:8

× I used to prefer fashionable shoes because I was young, but now I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot, I like to go hiking and go to work, and I need the shoes to maintain in comfortable.

✓ I used to prefer fashionable shoes when I was younger, but now I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot, I like hiking and commuting to work, and I need the shoes to remain comfortable.

Use 'when I was younger' for natural past reference. 'Go hiking and go to work' is repetitive; use 'hiking and commuting to work' or 'going to work'. 'Maintain in comfortable' is ungrammatical — use 'remain comfortable'. Also adjust gerund usage for parallel structure. Suggestion: keep parallel structure, use correct idioms ('remain comfortable'). Grammar problem type ID:6}]}