鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your responses grammatically correct, concise, and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence. Use simple past or present continuous correctly, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail (e.g., frequency or typical triggers). Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy them every two months when I see good promotions on TV or online, because discounts make the purchase affordable and I enjoy trying new styles.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and use correct verb forms. Give one or two specific reasons or an example of the experience and link ideas with words like 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid vague phrases like 'some offer'.

範例: Yes, I recently bought a pair of running shoes on Amazon. It was very convenient because I could compare several brands, read reviews, and use a discount code that saved me 20%.

建議: Give a direct estimate (a number or range) and explain briefly why prices vary. Use correct sentence structure, quantify where possible, and contrast with linking words like 'but' or 'however'.

範例: I usually spend around $50–$100 on a pair of shoes. However, I sometimes spend more on branded shoes for special occasions, while casual work shoes cost me about $30–$40.

建議: Begin with a clear preference and explain the context using linking words like 'when' or 'but'. Avoid awkward or informal phrases (e.g., 'show and I saw jealousy in their eyes'); instead describe social reasons succinctly and provide a short example.

範例: I prefer fashionable shoes for social outings because they make me feel confident and suit my outfits. But for evening walks or long periods on my feet, I choose comfortable shoes so I can stay relaxed and avoid soreness.

× Yes, I like buy shoes for myself because I like shopping and I am shopolic person.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes for myself because I like shopping and I am a shopaholic person.

Multiple verb and noun form errors: 'like buy' should be 'like buying' because verbs after 'like' commonly take the -ing form (Grammar Problem Type 8). 'shopolic' is a misspelling and needs the noun form 'shopaholic' with the article 'a' (Article/word form error, falls under incorrect use of adjectives/nouns - Type 13/22). Suggestion: use 'like buying' and include the article 'a' before countable nouns like 'shopaholic'.

× I often buying shoes when I saw advertisement on TV.

✓ I often buy shoes when I see advertisements on TV.

Mix of tenses and verb forms: 'I often buying' is incorrect because habitual actions use the base verb with 'often' (Type 8 and Type 6). 'when I saw' mixes past with present habitual; use present simple 'see'. 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' if general (Type 1 singular/plural). Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions: 'I often buy shoes when I see advertisements on TV.'

× They provide some discount on shoe so I will buy some shoe.

✓ They provide some discounts on shoes so I buy some shoes.

Count noun number and tense issues: 'discount' and 'shoe' should be plural when speaking generally (Type 1). The original uses future 'will buy' oddly after a general statement about offers; present simple 'I buy' or 'I will buy' can work depending on intended meaning. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements: 'discounts on shoes' and match tense to context (habitual: 'I buy').

× Recently I bought the shoes for myself by online platform such as Amazon.

✓ Recently I bought shoes for myself on an online platform such as Amazon.

Preposition and article issues: use 'on' with 'an online platform' (Type 11 and Type 22). 'the shoes' is unnecessarily specific unless previously mentioned; 'shoes' is sufficient. Suggestion: 'bought shoes on an online platform such as Amazon.'

× It is a very convenient and accessible app which also save my time and energy and they provide some offer to me so I feel so happy.

✓ It is a very convenient and accessible app which also saves me time and energy, and they give me some offers, so I feel very happy.

Subject-verb agreement: 'which also save' should be 'which also saves' because the subject 'app' is singular (Type 2/27). Pronoun and verb choice: 'save my time and energy' prefers 'saves me time and energy' (Type 12). 'provide some offer to me' is awkward; use 'give me some offers' or 'provide some offers' (Type 13/14). 'so I feel so happy' uses redundant 'so'; change to 'so I feel very happy.' Suggestion: ensure singular verbs agree with singular subjects and use natural collocations like 'saves me time.'

× I usually spend money on a shoes such as when I buy some brand shoes so I too much spend money on them.

✓ I usually spend money on shoes; for example, when I buy branded shoes I spend a lot on them.

Article and noun number: 'a shoes' is incorrect; use plural 'shoes' without 'a' (Type 22/1). Word order and adverb placement: 'so I too much spend money on them' is ungrammatical—use 'I spend a lot on them' (Type 20). 'brand shoes' should be 'branded shoes' or 'brand-name shoes' (Type 13). Suggestion: use 'I spend a lot on branded shoes.'

× Sometime I buy casual shoes for my office work so it is a cheaper.

✓ Sometimes I buy casual shoes for my office work, so they are cheaper.

Adverb and article errors: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' (Type 6/13). 'it is a cheaper' is wrong because 'shoes' is plural and 'cheaper' needs a comparison object or 'cheaper' can be used predicatively with plural subject: 'they are cheaper' (Type 1/25). Suggestion: use 'Sometimes I buy casual shoes for work, so they are cheaper.'

× Well, I prefer fashionable shoes when I go outside with my friends to show and I saw jealousy in their eyes.

✓ Well, I prefer fashionable shoes when I go out with my friends to show off, and I see jealousy in their eyes.

Verb tense consistency: 'go outside' is better as 'go out' in this context (Type 6). 'to show' is incomplete; common phrase is 'to show off' (Type 13). 'I saw jealousy' mixes past with present; use present 'I see' for habitual reactions (Type 5/6). Suggestion: use 'go out' and 'show off' and keep present tense for habitual actions: 'I see jealousy in their eyes.'

× On the other hand, I feel comfortable shoes during evening walk.

✓ On the other hand, I feel comfortable in shoes during my evening walk.

Incorrect verb/predicate structure: 'feel comfortable shoes' is ungrammatical; use 'feel comfortable in shoes' (Type 10/13). Missing article: 'during evening walk' needs 'my' or 'an' before 'evening walk' (Type 22/11). Suggestion: 'I feel comfortable in shoes during my evening walk.'

× I can feel relaxed after that.

✓ I feel relaxed afterward.

Awkward phrasing: 'I can feel relaxed after that' is understandable but wordy; 'I feel relaxed afterward' is more natural (Type 26). Suggestion: use concise expressions: 'I feel relaxed afterward.'