鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar; avoid hesitations and unclear words. Give a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and link them smoothly. Replace unclear phrase 'Sterita will be with my former outfit' with a precise description (e.g. 'a pair of heels for work').

範例: Yes, I do. I buy shoes fairly often because I like matching them to different outfits; for example, I’ll buy trainers for casual weekends and a pair of heels for the office. This way my shoes fit both comfort and style needs.

建議: Improve grammar and cohesion: use a clear topic sentence, correct noun phrases, and linking words to explain reasons. Be specific about the item and why you chose it.

範例: Yes, I have. Last week I ordered a wide pair of ballet flats because they match several skirts I often wear; also, the wide fit makes them more comfortable for long days on my feet.

建議: Use formal register and correct verb forms; avoid colloquial 'wanna'. Start with a clear general statement, then give specific examples and a brief reason. Ensure verb tenses are consistent.

範例: It depends on how many pairs I need. For instance, buying two or three pairs usually costs me about $150 in total, while a single pair typically costs around $40 because I stick to mid-range brands.

建議: Good content and coherence; reduce hesitation and tighten phrasing. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences, use linking words smoothly, and give a brief example of a shoe type or situation.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes. Because I walk long distances during my daily commute and dress casually for work, I usually choose trainers or sneakers as they provide good support and allow me to stay on my feet all day.

× For example when I get a trainer for casual wear.

✓ For example, when I get trainers for casual wear.

Plural needed for general reference to types of shoes; also no present participle issue but plural falls under 'Verb in the present participle form' is incorrect category. However according to the allowed list, this is best treated as singular and plural issue (ID 1). Use plural 'trainers' when speaking about a kind of shoe in general; add a comma after 'For example'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general categories and include comma after introductory phrase.

× When I get uh, Sterita will be with my former outfit for work.

✓ When I get them, they will go with my work outfit.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical; 'Sterita' seems incorrect word choice. Restructure to subject 'them' referring to shoes and verb 'go with' to express matching. Keep future 'will' appropriate for intended meaning. Suggestion: Replace unclear word with correct pronoun and rephrase for clarity.

× Yes, I have bought shoes online.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable in present perfect to indicate past experience relevant now. No correction needed. Suggestion: Keep present perfect for experiences up to the present.

× Last week I ordered a nice one.

✓ Last week I ordered a nice pair.

When referring to shoes, use 'pair' rather than 'one' to indicate a set of two. 'One' is ambiguous; 'pair' is correct. Maintain past tense 'ordered'. Suggestion: Use 'a pair' when speaking of shoes.

× It is wide pair of ballet flat because they will match several of my skirts when I wear them in the next few weeks.

✓ It is a wide pair of ballet flats because they will match several of my skirts when I wear them in the next few weeks.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'wide pair' and noun should be plural 'flats' to match 'pair'. 'It is' could be kept, but better 'They are' for a pair; either is acceptable but 'It is a pair' is okay. Also 'will match' is acceptable for future use. Suggestion: Add 'a' and pluralize 'flat' to 'flats'; consider using 'They are a wide pair of ballet flats' for natural phrasing.

× Well it depends on how many pairs I wanna buy.

✓ Well, it depends on how many pairs I want to buy.

Use formal 'want to' instead of colloquial 'wanna' in speaking test context and add comma after introductory clause. 'It depends' requires comma. Suggestion: Avoid slang in formal speech and punctuate introductory phrases.

× For example, if I bought two or three pairs it would cost me about $150.00 in total.

✓ For example, if I bought two or three pairs, it would cost me about $150 in total.

This is a correct second conditional form (past simple 'bought' with 'would'); only missing comma after the conditional clause and unnecessary '.00' in informal text. Keep tense as is. Suggestion: Add comma after 'pairs' and simplify currency formatting.

× But if I only needed one pair, this will cost me about $40 because I usually buy my mid range brands.

✓ But if I only needed one pair, it would cost me about $40 because I usually buy mid-range brands.

Mix of conditional forms: 'needed' (past) should pair with 'would' not 'will'. Change 'this will' to 'it would' to match second conditional. 'Mid range' should be hyphenated 'mid-range' and remove possessive 'my' before 'mid-range brands' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Keep conditional forms consistent and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× I usually prefer comfortable shoes because I walk long distance during my daily commute and tend to dress casually for work, so I often, uh, choose trainers or sneakers since they provide a good support and let me stay on my feet all day.

✓ I usually prefer comfortable shoes because I walk long distances during my daily commute and tend to dress casually for work, so I often choose trainers or sneakers since they provide good support and let me stay on my feet all day.

Use plural 'long distances' to reflect repeated or general action. Remove filler 'uh' and comma around it. 'Support' is uncountable so drop 'a'. The sentence is long but grammatically correct after these adjustments. Suggestion: Use plural for repeated actions, avoid fillers, and remember uncountable nouns do not take 'a'.