规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat clear but lacks fluency and coherence. Avoid fragment sentences like "Teachers." and try to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific about the rules and their purpose. Use linking words to improve flow.

範例: Yes, there are several rules for students at my school. For example, teachers prohibit us from using social media or playing games during class because these activities distract us and reduce our concentration on studying.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Avoid repeating the same idea and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like "therefore" or "as a result" to connect ideas logically. Also, clarify your points with specific reasons.

範例: I believe students would benefit from having more rules because they would be less likely to break them in order to avoid punishment. Therefore, students would become more disciplined and focused on their studies, which could lead to better academic results.

建議: Your answer is confusing and inconsistent with pronouns. Avoid asking a question back to the examiner. Use clear sentences with correct pronouns and linking words. Provide specific examples and results to support your answer.

範例: Yes, I have a math teacher who does his job very well. Last year, he explained topics like triangles clearly, which helped me understand them better. As a result, I scored very high in my last term test, and I am very grateful to him.

× Teachers. They restrict us from scrolling through social media and playing games because they reduce our concentration on study.

✓ Teachers restrict us from scrolling through social media and playing games because these activities reduce our concentration on study.

The original sentence 'Teachers. They restrict us...' is a sentence fragment and lacks proper sentence structure. Combining the two parts into one complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think students will benefit more as because they will have less chance to break the rules because they want to avoid punishment.

✓ I think students will benefit more because they will have less chance to break the rules as they want to avoid punishment.

The phrase 'as because' is redundant and incorrect. Using either 'because' or 'as' alone is sufficient to express the reason. Here, 'because' is used first, so 'as' should be removed or repositioned to avoid redundancy.

× If this thing happens, there will be more staff disciplined and concentrated on study, so their academic results will get higher.

✓ If this happens, more students will be disciplined and concentrate on their studies, so their academic results will improve.

The phrase 'more staff disciplined and concentrated on study' is awkward and unclear. 'Staff' likely should be 'students'. Also, 'disciplined' and 'concentrated' need to be in correct verb forms. 'Concentrate on their studies' is the correct expression. 'Get higher' is informal; 'improve' is more appropriate.

× Do you have a math teacher? Last year he taught us really well which he made me understand topics, for example triangles really well and at the last term of my test I scored really high and I want to thank her.

✓ Do you have a math teacher? Last year he taught us really well and helped me understand topics, for example triangles, very well. In the last term test, I scored very high and I want to thank him.

The original sentence has inconsistent pronouns 'he' and 'her' referring to the same teacher, causing confusion. Also, the sentence is run-on and unclear. Correcting pronouns to be consistent and breaking the sentence into clearer parts improves understanding.