规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and difficult to understand due to incorrect word choices and grammar. Try to respond directly to the question with clear and simple sentences, mentioning specific rules at your school. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise.

範例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear uniforms, including a tie for boys. Also, girls are not allowed to wear sports shoes in class. These rules help maintain discipline and a good learning environment.

建議: Your answer has some good ideas but is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly with supporting reasons, using linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I believe students would benefit from more rules because they help students become more mature and responsible. For example, following rules teaches discipline, which is useful for their future careers. Therefore, having more rules can improve students' behaviour and success.

建議: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to answer directly by describing a specific dedicated teacher, explaining why you think they are dedicated, and giving examples of their dedication.

範例: Yes, I have had a very dedicated teacher during my school time. My tuition teacher always prepared extra lessons and helped me understand difficult topics. She was patient and motivated me to study hard, which really helped me improve.

建議: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Try to clearly state your preference and explain your reasons with specific details and linking words.

範例: I prefer to have more rules at school because they help maintain discipline and create a better learning environment. For instance, rules about punctuality and behaviour encourage students to be responsible, which benefits everyone.

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✓ Emails from the school point to rules like punctuality, discipline, and wearing a uniform. They also mention consequences like taking away privileges for those who don't wear a tie or for girls who don't wear sports uniforms, something like that.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and contains unclear references, making it difficult to understand. Replacing 'Emails from the Rose' with 'Emails from the school' and clarifying the subjects and objects improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, at all It is advantageous for the students who are following the rules because the the keeps them more mature and any better.

✓ Yes, overall it is advantageous for the students who follow the rules because it keeps them more mature and better behaved.

The original sentence has incorrect conjunction usage and redundancy ('the the'). 'At all' is incorrectly used; 'overall' fits better. Also, 'any better' is unclear and replaced with 'better behaved' for clarity.

× And sometimes you know, if you do better, I will probably use it's better for better police than or in the future.

✓ And sometimes, you know, if you do better, it will probably be better for your future or career.

The sentence contains unclear pronoun references and awkward phrasing. 'I will probably use it's better for better police than or in the future' is confusing. Replacing it with a clearer statement about future benefits improves understanding.

× So they are disciplined, right.

✓ So they become disciplined, right?

Adding 'become' clarifies the meaning, indicating the process of becoming disciplined. Also, adding a question mark fits the conversational tone.

× Pause in my school time, there are so many details that my tuition teacher are very dedicated,

✓ During my school time, there were many occasions when my tuition teachers were very dedicated,

'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match 'many details' (occasions). Also, verb agreement changes to past tense 'were' to match past time reference.

× They see this name is so so mature and everyday when I want to show, but we always have a struggle.

✓ They seem very mature, and every day when I want to show my progress, we always face some struggles.

The original sentence is unclear and misuses pronouns. Clarifying 'they seem very mature' and specifying 'show my progress' improves clarity and grammar.

× Two patients say they are tickets having a more growth status quo as anything she approves for the student.

✓ Some people say that having more rules helps students grow, and I agree with that.

The original sentence is incoherent and contains many errors. Rewriting it to a clear, grammatically correct sentence conveys the intended meaning.

× I can see what else in the future, right? So every time when you'll see all discipline.

✓ I can see the benefits in the future, right? So every time you see discipline,

The original sentence misuses pronouns and has awkward phrasing. Correcting pronouns and sentence structure improves clarity.