规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ был достаточно естественным и содержательным, однако есть небольшие повторы ("to to be distracted") и можно улучшить связность, используя больше связующих слов для плавного перехода между идеями.

範例: Yes, there were several important rules at my school. For instance, we all had to wear the same uniform so that everyone would be seen as equal and not distracted by fashionable clothes or accessories. Moreover, punctuality was expected from all students to ensure lessons started on time.

建議: Ответ содержит смысл, но структура предложения немного запутана, и можно улучшить связность с помощью вводных слов. Также стоит избегать тавтологии и сделать фразы более естественными.

範例: I'm not sure that having more rules necessarily benefits students; however, I believe that some important regulations are essential for their development. For example, rules help students learn discipline and responsibility, which are crucial skills for their future.

建議: Ответ содержит повтор "they really they really" и некоторые выражения звучат неестественно ("light up fire in the students eyes"). Рекомендуется использовать более естественные фразы и избегать повторов.

範例: Unfortunately, I didn't have any really dedicated teachers at school. However, at university, I was fortunate to have some very committed professors who inspired me greatly. They knew how to ignite passion in students' eyes and encouraged us to think critically with great enthusiasm.

建議: Ответ хорошо структурирован и понятен, но можно улучшить связность, добавив связующие слова для более плавного перехода между частями ответа.

範例: To be honest, as a child I disliked many rules at school. For example, I didn't like wearing a uniform because it felt like it limited my ability to express my personality. However, now as an adult, I appreciate those regulations because they taught me discipline and helped me develop important life skills.

建議: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткую структуру (например, предложение "Yes, apparently it was my English teacher and although my classmates and I were afraid to attend her lessons."). Рекомендуется использовать более простые и правильные конструкции.

範例: Yes, my English teacher was quite strict. Although my classmates and I were afraid to attend her lessons at first, I later realized that she disliked a careless attitude. Despite being tough, she was also very fair.

建議: Ответ ясен и логичен, но можно улучшить связность и естественность речи, используя более плавные переходы и избегая повторов.

範例: From my perspective, a complete absence of regulations can lead to chaos, so I really don't see myself teaching in such a school. To be honest, I lack the patience and other vital skills required to be a teacher, so my answer is no.

× Yes, there were several important rules at my school.

✓ Yes, there are several important rules at my school.

The question is about current rules at the school, so the present tense 'are' should be used instead of the past tense 'were'.

× Additionally, it was expected for students to be on time for the lessons.

✓ Additionally, it was expected that students be on time for the lessons.

The phrase 'expected for students to be' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'expected that students be' or 'expected students to be'.

× I'm not sure if the more rules the more beneficial for students, but I believe that having some important regulations is essential for the development.

✓ I'm not sure if more rules are more beneficial for students, but I believe that having some important regulations is essential for development.

The sentence lacks a verb in the first clause and has an unnecessary article before 'development'. The corrected sentence includes the verb 'are' and removes 'the' before 'development'.

× Unfortunately, I didn't have any really dedicated teachers at school.

✓ Unfortunately, I haven't had any really dedicated teachers at school.

Since the speaker is referring to their entire school experience up to now, the present perfect tense 'haven't had' is more appropriate than the simple past 'didn't have'.

× They really they really knew how to light up fire in the students eyes and encourage us to think critically and show great enthusiasm.

✓ They really knew how to light a fire in the students' eyes and encourage us to think critically and show great enthusiasm.

The phrase 'light up fire' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'light a fire'. Also, 'students eyes' needs an apostrophe to show possession: 'students' eyes'. The repeated phrase 'they really' is redundant and removed.

× I didn't like wearing a uniform because it felt limiting my ability to express my personality.

✓ I didn't like wearing a uniform because it felt like it was limiting my ability to express my personality.

The verb 'felt' should be followed by a clause or an adjective, not directly by a verb in the '-ing' form. Adding 'like it was' corrects the structure.

× Yes, apparently it was my English teacher and although my classmates and I were afraid to attend her lessons.

✓ Yes, apparently it was my English teacher, and although my classmates and I were afraid to attend her lessons,

The sentence is incomplete and incorrectly structured. Adding a comma and completing the sentence is necessary for clarity.

× she just didn't like a foolish attitude to her lessons and as well as being tough, she was pretty fair.

✓ she just didn't like a foolish attitude towards her lessons, and as well as being tough, she was pretty fair.

The correct preposition is 'towards' when referring to an attitude about something.

× In my perspective, complete absence of any regulations can lead to chaos and I really don't see myself teaching in such a school.

✓ From my perspective, the complete absence of any regulations can lead to chaos, and I really don't see myself teaching in such a school.

The correct phrase is 'from my perspective' not 'in my perspective'. Also, 'the' is needed before 'complete absence'.