规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答不够流畅且语法错误较多，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和犹豫词汇，明确表达规则内容。

範例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to smoke on campus, and they must get permission before leaving the school during class hours.

建議: 表达不清晰且有语法错误，建议使用简单句子直接表达观点，并用连接词补充理由。

範例: Yes, I believe having more rules can help students be more serious and respectful towards teachers and classmates.

建議: 回答含糊且有语法错误，建议明确描述老师的特点和具体行为，避免无意义的填充词。

範例: Yes, my English teacher is very dedicated. She always encourages students to participate by asking questions and giving detailed explanations.

建議: 表达不准确且语法错误严重，建议使用正确词汇表达偏好，并说明原因，避免重复。

範例: I prefer fewer rules at school because too many rules can make students dislike school and feel restricted.

建議: 回答不连贯且含糊，建议清晰描述老师的严格表现和自己的感受，避免不完整句子。

範例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher who often made me stand up and answer many questions to help me improve.

建議: 回答重复且句子结构不完整，建议简洁表达观点并用连接词说明原因。

範例: Actually, I would not like to work in a rule-free school because it would be difficult to manage students who are too relaxed without any rules.

× For example, UMM students don't allow to smoke UMM and students UMM was not permission.

✓ For example, students are not allowed to smoke and students do not have permission.

这里错误地使用了动词结构，应该用被动语态表达“学生不被允许吸烟”，即用“are not allowed”而不是“don't allow”。另外，“students was not permission”结构错误，应改为“students do not have permission”。

× Yes, I think umm some rules can makes students more a series to Android, the teachers and the umm classmates.

✓ Yes, I think some rules can make students more serious to the teachers and the classmates.

动词“make”在这里应与主语“some rules”保持一致，使用原形“make”而不是“makes”。另外，“a series to Android”表达不清，改为“more serious to the teachers and the classmates”更合适。

× At class she asked students to answer the questions and umm, that the more, uh, queer.

✓ In class, she asked students to answer the questions, and she was very strict.

介词“at class”应改为“in class”。原句后半部分“that the more, uh, queer”语义不明，推测意为“她很严格”，故改为“she was very strict”。

× I prefer furious at school.

✓ I prefer fewer rules at school.

“furious”是形容词，意思是“愤怒的”，与句意不符。应使用“fewer rules”表示“更少的规则”，符合语境。

× I think too much rules can make students more hate to the school and they think why why they are to wear shoes.

✓ I think too many rules can make students hate school more, and they wonder why they have to wear shoes.

“too much rules”应改为“too many rules”，因为“rules”是可数名词。动词“make students more hate”应改为“make students hate more”或“make students hate”。“think why why they are to wear shoes”表达不正确，应改为“wonder why they have to wear shoes”。

× Yes, I had a really strict teacher as well as she.

✓ Yes, I had a really strict teacher, and she...

句子结构不完整且“as well as she”用法不当，应改为“and she...”以连接后续内容。

× She let me stand up and ask me a lot of questions and then she finally let me see that.

✓ She let me stand up and asked me a lot of questions, and then she finally let me leave.

“let”后面动词应为原形，但“ask me a lot of questions”前面是“let me stand up and”，两个动作应保持时态一致，改为“asked”。“let me see that”语义不明，推测为“let me leave”，故作此修改。

× Actually, I don't want to work as a teacher in a real free school because I think it's difficult to teach students because they because they don't have any rules and they are relaxed.

✓ Actually, I don't want to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because I think it's difficult to teach students who don't have any rules and are relaxed.

“real free school”应为“rule-free school”，表示“无规则的学校”。句子中重复“because they”，应简化为“students who don't have any rules and are relaxed”。