规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it is a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to be more concise and avoid unnecessary details that do not directly answer the question. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: When I was a student, we had to hand over our phones at the start of each lesson to prevent distractions and maintain a good learning environment.

建議: Good use of linking words and examples. To improve, try to use a wider range of vocabulary and make your supporting details more specific and varied.

範例: I believe students benefit from a balanced number of rules because excessive regulations can lead to stress and discourage participation, which harms their learning.

建議: Your answer lacks a clear topic sentence and some sentences are incomplete or awkward. Try to start with a direct answer and then add supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid repetition and improve sentence structure.

範例: Yes, I had a very dedicated chemistry teacher who, despite his age, used unusual teaching methods to share a lot of new information with us.

建議: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Focus on clear sentence structure and correct word usage. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and provide a clear conclusion.

範例: I prefer fewer rules at school because too many can put unnecessary pressure on students and limit their creativity, making learning less enjoyable.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains informal expressions. Try to use formal and clear language, avoid slang, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

範例: Yes, I had a strict Russian language teacher who often asked questions outside the syllabus, which made us feel stressed because we couldn't answer them.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains unclear phrases like 'improve some of my UH'. Try to clarify your ideas and avoid vague expressions. Also, keep your answer concise and coherent.

範例: I would like to work in a rule-free school to gain new experiences and skills, which will help me in my future career as a psychologist working with people.

× Many dedicated teachers in my past, but the one I respected the most was the chemistry teacher.

✓ I had many dedicated teachers in my past, but the one I respected the most was the chemistry teacher.

The original sentence lacks a verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'I had' completes the sentence structure, providing a subject and verb for clarity.

× He always used such unusual methods in his teaching process.

✓ He always used such unusual methods during his teaching process.

The preposition 'in' is less appropriate here; 'during' better indicates the time frame when the methods were used.

× I prefer having fewer rules at school because too many of them can cost sometimes unnecessary pressure on students.

✓ I prefer having fewer rules at school because too many of them can sometimes cause unnecessary pressure on students.

The phrase 'cost sometimes unnecessary pressure' is incorrect. The verb 'cause' fits better with 'pressure', and 'sometimes' should precede the verb for correct adverb placement.

× strict rules might limit create the creativity of students and make the learning environment less enjoyable.

✓ Strict rules might limit the creativity of students and make the learning environment less enjoyable.

The phrase 'limit create' is incorrect; only one verb is needed here. 'Limit' is appropriate, and 'the creativity' requires the definite article.

× So in my opinion, it is better to not.

✓ So in my opinion, it is better not to.

The phrase 'better to not' is awkward; the correct form is 'better not to' to maintain proper infinitive structure.

× Many dedicated teachers in my past, but the one I respected the most was the chemistry teacher.

✓ I had many dedicated teachers in my past, but the one I respected the most was the chemistry teacher.

The sentence lacks a verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'I had' completes the sentence structure.

× She obviously would get really angry at us and scream uh, guilt trip us.

✓ She obviously would get really angry at us and scream, uh, guilt-trip us.

The phrase 'guilt trip us' should be hyphenated as 'guilt-trip us' when used as a verb. Also, commas are needed to separate interjections for clarity.

× I have had a relationship teacher which was a Russian language teacher.

✓ I have had a Russian language teacher who was very strict.

The phrase 'relationship teacher' is unclear and likely incorrect. Also, 'which' should be 'who' when referring to a person. The sentence is rephrased for clarity.

× I can say that this is my dream job, but I'd like to work as a teacher in a rule free school someday to get the new experience, learn new skills, and improve some of my UH that I already have.

✓ I can say that this is my dream job, but I'd like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school someday to gain new experience, learn new skills, and improve some of my skills that I already have.

'Rule free' should be hyphenated as 'rule-free' when used as an adjective. 'The new experience' is incorrect; 'new experience' is better. 'UH' is unclear and replaced with 'skills' for clarity.