规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ваш ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и повторения, что снижает его естественность и эффективность. Рекомендуется использовать правильные формы глаголов и избегать избыточных слов. Также стоит структурировать ответ с чётким вступлением и поддерживающими деталями, используя связующие слова для логичности.

範例: Yes, my school has several important rules. For example, students must wear uniforms, behave respectfully, and focus on their studies. These rules help prepare us for adult and university life by promoting discipline and knowledge.

建議: Ответ содержит много грамматических ошибок и неясных выражений, что затрудняет понимание. Рекомендуется использовать простые и чёткие предложения, избегать повторов и неясных слов, а также логично связывать идеи с помощью союзов.

範例: I don't think having more rules benefits students. Too many rules can make students feel stressed and less motivated to attend school. Important rules like wearing uniforms, getting good marks, and behaving well are enough to maintain order.

建議: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и неестественные выражения. Рекомендуется использовать правильные времена и предлоги, а также более точные слова. Добавьте связующие слова для плавности и конкретные примеры для поддержки ответа.

範例: Yes, I had a very dedicated English teacher. She always prepared lessons carefully and wanted to provide us with valuable knowledge for our future university life. She treated us kindly, almost like her own children.

建議: Ответ содержит много грамматических ошибок и неясных выражений. Рекомендуется использовать правильные формы слов, избегать тавтологии и структурировать ответ с чётким мнением и примерами, используя связующие слова для логичности.

範例: I prefer fewer rules at school because too many regulations can distract students and reduce their concentration. For example, strict rules about small details may cause stress and lower motivation. Therefore, only the most important rules should be enforced.

建議: Ответ содержит множество грамматических ошибок и неясных фраз, что затрудняет понимание. Рекомендуется использовать простые предложения, правильные формы слов и более точные выражения. Добавьте связующие слова для логичности и конкретные примеры.

範例: I have not had a very strict teacher at my school. Instead, teachers are kind and always motivate us. For example, they sometimes give small gifts like chocolates and share their experiences to help us prepare for exams.

建議: Ответ содержит много грамматических ошибок и неясных выражений. Рекомендуется использовать правильные структуры предложений, избегать повторов и чётко выражать причины. Используйте связующие слова для логичности и конкретные детали.

範例: Honestly, I don't want to work as a teacher, especially in rule-free schools. First, my profession is different. Second, salaries in such schools are usually lower than in private schools, which makes these jobs less attractive.

× Definitely every school have their own rules for students.

✓ Definitely every school has its own rules for students.

The subject 'every school' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, 'their' should be 'its' to agree with the singular subject.

× The rules are most crucial part of the school.

✓ The rules are the most crucial part of the school.

The phrase 'most crucial part' refers to a singular part, but 'rules' is plural. It should be 'The rules are the most crucial parts of the school' or 'The rules are the most crucial part of the school' if referring collectively. Also, the definite article 'the' is missing before 'most'.

× So for instance, wearing the uniform and behave well and getting the good Marks and gain more knowledge from teachers.

✓ So for instance, wearing the uniform, behaving well, getting good marks, and gaining more knowledge from teachers.

When listing actions, the verbs should be in the same form. Here, 'wearing', 'behaving', 'getting', and 'gaining' should all be in the -ing form for parallel structure.

× So the rulers helps us to bring up the the adult and university life.

✓ So the rules help us to prepare for adult and university life.

'Rulers' is incorrect; it should be 'rules'. Also, 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with plural 'rules'. The phrase 'bring up the adult and university life' is awkward; 'prepare for adult and university life' is clearer.

× I don't think more rulers would be benefit for students.

✓ I don't think more rules would be beneficial for students.

'Rulers' should be 'rules'. Also, 'benefit' should be 'beneficial' as an adjective to describe the effect on students.

× If the school have plenty of rules.

✓ If the school has plenty of rules.

The subject 'school' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'.

× Some students with a warning of them they haven't they reduce the desires to go to the school.

✓ Some students, when warned, lose the desire to go to school.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. It needs restructuring for clarity and correct grammar.

× The significance tree lures in school.

✓ The significance of rules in school is important.

The original sentence is unclear and likely a mistranslation. It needs to be rewritten to convey the intended meaning.

× The first school is wearing uniforms that should be provide equally equal and between the students.

✓ The first rule is that wearing uniforms should be provided equally among the students.

'School' should be 'rule'. 'Provide' should be 'provided'. 'Equally equal' is redundant; 'equally' suffices. 'Between' should be 'among' for more than two students.

× The second is getting good marks.

✓ The second rule is getting good marks.

To maintain parallel structure, specify 'rule' after 'second'.

× The third is well behaved appropriately.

✓ The third rule is to behave appropriately.

'Well behaved' should be 'to behave appropriately' to form a proper rule statement.

× Actually yes, I had a teacher who really dedicated on her job.

✓ Actually yes, I had a teacher who was really dedicated to her job.

'Dedicated' is an adjective here and should be preceded by 'was'. The preposition 'on' should be 'to'.

× She is an English teacher so she always want to give us more valuable knowledge and information that would be necessary for our adult in university life.

✓ She is an English teacher, so she always wants to give us more valuable knowledge and information that will be necessary for our adult university life.

'Want' should be 'wants' to agree with third person singular. 'Would be' is changed to 'will be' to indicate certainty. 'Our adult in university life' is awkward; 'our adult university life' is clearer.

× And I saw her preparations before the starting the lesson and she always carry children's like their own.

✓ I saw her preparations before starting the lesson, and she always treats the children like her own.

The sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Carry children's like their own' is incorrect; 'treats the children like her own' is correct.

× Definitely, I prefer the fewer tools at school because there's some of their regulation can distract students and make them reduce their concentration on their studies.

✓ Definitely, I prefer fewer rules at school because some of the regulations can distract students and reduce their concentration on their studies.

'Tools' should be 'rules'. 'There's some of their regulation' is incorrect; it should be 'some of the regulations'. 'Make them reduce' is better as 'reduce'.

× So for example, when schools restrict have restrict rulers and every small details, students may feel stressed and restricted, which effects on the motivations I believe the most important rule should be provided.

✓ For example, when schools have many restrictive rules and focus on every small detail, students may feel stressed and restricted, which affects their motivation. I believe the most important rules should be provided.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'restrict have restrict rulers' is incorrect; 'many restrictive rules' is correct. 'Effects on the motivations' should be 'affects their motivation'. Sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I don't notice a really straight teacher in my school.

✓ I haven't had a really strict teacher in my school.

'Straight' should be 'strict'. 'Don't notice' is better as 'haven't had' to indicate experience.

× Instead of being a straight they always kind for children and students and all they always motivate, encourage us to giving so a little presence like a chocolate and others.

✓ Instead of being strict, they are always kind to children and students, and they always motivate and encourage us by giving small presents like chocolates and others.

'Straight' should be 'strict'. 'Kind for' should be 'kind to'. 'Giving so a little presence' should be 'giving small presents'. Sentence structure improved for clarity.

× And sometimes when we prepare to exams they inspire him to give their experience.

✓ And sometimes when we prepare for exams, they inspire us by sharing their experience.

'Prepare to exams' should be 'prepare for exams'. 'Inspire him' should be 'inspire us'. 'Give their experience' is better as 'sharing their experience'.

× To be honest, I don't want to work as a teacher, especially in rural free schools because as the first fall my profession is not suited for this one.

✓ To be honest, I don't want to work as a teacher, especially in rule-free schools, because firstly, my profession is not suited for this.

'Rural free schools' should be 'rule-free schools'. 'As the first fall' is incorrect; 'firstly' is correct. Sentence structure improved.

× The second is and rule free schools, the salary would be lower than the private schools and that would be so the shortage of this one.

✓ Secondly, in rule-free schools, the salary would be lower than in private schools, which would be a disadvantage.

'And rule free schools' is incorrect; 'in rule-free schools' is correct. 'That would be so the shortage of this one' is unclear; 'which would be a disadvantage' is clearer.

× Also the profession the my profession is another from being a teacher.

✓ Also, my profession is different from being a teacher.

The sentence is ungrammatical and redundant. It should be simplified for clarity.