规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and confident. Also, focus on clear sentence structure and correct grammar, for example, use 'strict rules' instead of 'a strict rules'. Provide specific examples of the rules to enrich your answer.

範例: Yes, my school has strict rules for students. For instance, we must maintain a neat dress code and follow guidelines for hairstyles that reflect the school's professionalism.

建議: Reduce the use of filler words and try to make your answer more concise and direct. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, clarify your opinion with specific reasons or examples.

範例: I believe students don't need more rules; however, some rules are necessary because schools teach discipline from an early age, which helps students develop good habits.

建議: Work on sentence clarity and grammar, such as subject-verb agreement and word choice. Avoid vague phrases like 'they are also like we.' Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples of how the teacher was dedicated.

範例: Yes, I had many dedicated teachers at my school. For example, one teacher always arrived on time and patiently helped students understand difficult topics, which inspired me a lot.

建議: Avoid repetition and filler words to make your answer clearer. Organize your ideas logically using linking words like 'however' or 'but.' Also, clarify your opinion with specific reasons.

範例: I prefer having more strict rules at school. Although rules were stricter when I studied, I think stricter rules now would help maintain discipline among students.

建議: Try to speak more clearly and avoid filler words. Use complete sentences and provide specific examples of the teacher's strictness to make your answer more informative and coherent.

範例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher who was very attentive to students following all the rules. For example, she would immediately correct us if we broke any classroom regulations.

建議: Avoid repeating phrases and filler words. Structure your answer clearly by stating your opinion first, then giving reasons. Use linking words like 'because' to connect your ideas.

範例: No, I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because schools need rules to teach students discipline, and I don't see myself pursuing a teaching career.

× the school I was studying it, it has a, a strict rules for students

✓ the school I was studying at has strict rules for students

The phrase 'a strict rules' is incorrect because 'rules' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'studying it' is unnecessary and incorrect; 'studying at' is the correct preposition. The sentence should use plural 'rules' without 'a' and correct preposition usage.

× We have to maintain a proper disc brisk board in a professionalism manner

✓ We have to maintain a proper discipline board in a professional manner

The phrase 'disc brisk board' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'discipline board'. Also, 'in a professionalism manner' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in a professional manner' because 'professional' is the adjective modifying 'manner'.

× And also we had the hairstyle as supposed to be a proper way, which goes with our school, uh, uni

✓ And also we had to have our hairstyle in a proper way, which fits with our school, uh, uni

The phrase 'had the hairstyle as supposed to be a proper way' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'had to have our hairstyle in a proper way'. Also, 'goes with' is better replaced with 'fits with' when referring to conformity with school standards.

× the institution teaches us how to be disciplined and it starts from this, uh, very early stage

✓ the institution teaches us how to be disciplined and it starts at this very early stage

The preposition 'from' is less appropriate here; 'starts at this very early stage' is the correct phrase to indicate the point in time when discipline begins.

× all the teachers were very punctual, dedicated to other student and they are a very professional

✓ all the teachers were very punctual, dedicated to other students and they are very professional

'Other student' should be plural 'other students' to agree with 'teachers'. Also, 'a very professional' is incorrect because 'professional' is an adjective here and should not have the article 'a'. The correct phrase is 'very professional'.

× They taught us how to be disciplined in a professionalism

✓ They taught us how to be disciplined in a professional manner

'In a professionalism' is incorrect because 'professionalism' is a noun. The correct phrase is 'in a professional manner' to describe how discipline is taught.

× there are a lot of rules, but nowadays I saw there are not that people are way less strict than the before

✓ there were a lot of rules, but nowadays I see people are way less strict than before

'There are a lot of rules' should be past tense 'there were a lot of rules' to match 'when I was studying'. Also, 'I saw there are not that people' is incorrect; it should be 'I see people are way less strict'. 'Than the before' should be 'than before'.

× most of the teachers are strict, but I had one particular strict teacher

✓ most of the teachers were strict, but I had one particular strict teacher

The tense should be consistent with past events; 'are' should be 'were' to match 'I had'. This is a tense consistency issue but also relates to verb usage.

× She was, I mean super umm, conscious about the student

✓ She was, I mean, super conscious about the students

'Conscious about the student' is incorrect; it should be 'conscious about the students' to refer to all students, plural. Also, commas improve clarity.

× If anything, umm, we had we do anything wrong

✓ If we did anything wrong

The phrase 'we had we do anything wrong' is ungrammatical. The correct conditional past form is 'If we did anything wrong'.

× No, I'm not good at teaching, but there should be some rules in the school because this is our first institution to learn about the discipline

✓ No, I'm not good at teaching, but there should be some rules in school because it is our first institution to learn about discipline

'In the school' is better as 'in school' when speaking generally. Also, 'this is our first institution' is unclear; 'it is our first institution' refers better to the school. 'About the discipline' should be 'about discipline' without 'the'.

× No, like I have, I, I cannot, I, I, I'm not seeing myself pursuing that career

✓ No, I cannot; I don't see myself pursuing that career

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. The corrected sentence is clearer and grammatically correct, using 'I cannot' and 'I don't see myself' properly.