规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Избегайте повторений и уточните детали, используя связующие слова для логичности.

範例: Yes, there are several rules at my school, such as wearing a school uniform. In fact, in Kazakhstan, there is a law that requires students to wear uniforms, and if they don't, their parents must pay a fine.

建議: Старайтесь строить предложения грамотно и избегать грамматических ошибок. Используйте связующие слова для плавности речи.

範例: In some cases, more rules can help promote and maintain discipline; however, too many rules might make students feel less free.

建議: Используйте правильные времена и избегайте повторений. Добавьте связующие слова для улучшения связности.

範例: Yes, I had a really dedicated history teacher at my previous school. Although she was quite strict, she knew her subject very well and was passionate about teaching.

建議: Обратите внимание на правильное использование слов и грамматики. Сделайте ответ более ясным и логичным с помощью связующих слов.

範例: I would definitely prefer fewer rules at school, focusing only on behavior and the educational system. Even though my school has many rules, I try to follow them because I understand their importance.

建議: Избегайте повторений и улучшайте грамматику. Используйте связующие слова для более плавного и логичного ответа.

範例: Yes, I have a very strict teacher who is also my mentor. She teaches Kazakh language and often shouts at students, even those who behave well and participate actively in class.

建議: Старайтесь избегать повторений и улучшайте структуру предложений. Используйте связующие слова для логичности.

範例: No, I wouldn't like to work as a teacher because it is a very stressful job. Moreover, many people do not appreciate those who work in the education system, and teaching students, especially teenagers, can be quite challenging.

× Yes, there are many rules for students at my school, for example wearing school uniform.

✓ Yes, there are many rules for students at my school, for example, wearing a school uniform.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'school uniform'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Adding 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× And in Kazakhstan there is a law uh, when a student doesn't wear a school uniform, his or her parents must pay fine that his child didn't wear school uniform.

✓ And in Kazakhstan, there is a law that if a student doesn't wear a school uniform, his or her parents must pay a fine because their child didn't wear the school uniform.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'when' instead of 'if' to express a condition. Also, 'pay fine' should be 'pay a fine' because 'fine' is a countable noun. Additionally, 'that his child didn't wear school uniform' is awkward; it is better to say 'because their child didn't wear the school uniform' for clarity and correctness.

× Or in some cases, yes it's promotes and maintains discipline, but when there's too much rules for students, students wouldn't feel his self free.

✓ In some cases, yes, it promotes and maintains discipline, but when there are too many rules for students, students wouldn't feel free.

'It's promotes' is incorrect; it should be 'it promotes' (present tense). 'Too much rules' is incorrect because 'rules' is countable; it should be 'too many rules'. 'His self free' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'feel free'. Also, 'Or' at the beginning is unnecessary and removed for clarity.

× When I was studied at my previous school, he was uh, history teacher and uh, she was a bit, not a bit.

✓ When I studied at my previous school, he was a history teacher and she was a bit, not a bit.

The phrase 'I was studied' is incorrect; the correct past tense form is 'I studied'. Also, 'he was uh, history teacher' is missing the article 'a' before 'history teacher'. The sentence is confusing with 'she was a bit, not a bit' but this seems more about content than grammar.

× She knows, knew her subject very well.

✓ She knew her subject very well.

The sentence incorrectly mixes present tense 'knows' with past tense 'knew'. Since the context is past, 'knew' alone is correct.

× I would definitely prefer fewer roles at school, but the rules should be connected only to behavior and educational system.

✓ I would definitely prefer fewer rules at school, but the rules should be connected only to behavior and the educational system.

'Roles' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'rules'. Also, 'educational system' is a specific system and should have the definite article 'the' before it.

× But even now, if maybe in some cases my school has a lot of rules, I follow them in a lo knows them very well.

✓ But even now, if maybe in some cases my school has a lot of rules, I follow them and know them very well.

The phrase 'in a lo knows them very well' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'and know them very well' to correctly connect the ideas and use the correct pronoun and verb form.

× Yes, I have a really strict teacher.

✓ Yes, I have a really strict teacher.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense as it refers to a current situation.

× She is also my mentor and her subject is Kazakh language and she always shouts at students even if the student is well behaved and active at clay lesson.

✓ She is also my mentor, and her subject is the Kazakh language. She always shouts at students even if the student is well-behaved and active in class lessons.

'Kazakh language' should have the definite article 'the' before it. 'Well behaved' should be hyphenated as 'well-behaved'. 'Clay lesson' is a typo and should be 'class lessons'. Also, the sentence is long and benefits from being split for clarity.

× But when she does like something she always shouts every every day.

✓ But when she likes something, she always shouts every day.

'Does like' is incorrect; the correct present simple form is 'likes'. The phrase 'every every day' is repetitive; it should be 'every day'.

× No, I wouldn't like to work as a teacher in any way because I think this is a really stressful job and many people don't appreciate this people who works in educational system.

✓ No, I wouldn't like to work as a teacher in any way because I think this is a really stressful job and many people don't appreciate the people who work in the educational system.

'People who works' is incorrect; 'people' is plural and should be followed by 'work'. 'Educational system' needs the definite article 'the'. The sentence is corrected for subject-verb agreement and article usage.

× Also it's it's really difficult to teach students and teenagers especially.

✓ Also, it's really difficult to teach students and teenagers, especially.

The repetition 'it's it's' is a mistake; one 'it's' is sufficient. Adding commas improves readability.