规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating similar ideas and try to use linking words to connect your points smoothly. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary related to school rules.

範例: Yes, my school has several rules to ensure discipline and respect among students. For instance, we must arrive on time, wear the correct uniform, and treat teachers and classmates with respect. These rules help create a positive learning environment.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to express your opinion more directly and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to clarify your reasoning and provide specific reasons or examples to support your view.

範例: I think having a reasonable number of rules is important because they teach children how to behave properly and become responsible citizens. However, too many rules might restrict their freedom and creativity.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and contains repetitions and unclear phrases. Try to complete your sentences fully and avoid repeating words. Provide specific examples of how the teacher was dedicated to make your answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I had a very dedicated science teacher in grade 11 who always stayed after class to help students understand difficult topics. She motivated us to work hard and supported us until we succeeded.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more fluent. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to organise your ideas. Also, try to explain why you think stricter rules are needed now.

範例: When I was a student, the existing rules were sufficient to maintain discipline. However, nowadays I believe schools need stricter rules to address new challenges and ensure students behave appropriately.

建議: Your answer has some grammar and vocabulary errors, such as 'did maths' and 'stricken'. Try to use correct expressions and avoid repetition. Also, explain why you think the strictness was beneficial.

範例: Yes, I had a very strict maths teacher in grade 6. Although she was tough, I now realise her strictness helped us develop discipline and improve our skills.

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to express your opinion more clearly and use linking words to explain your reasons. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

範例: I wouldn't like to work in a school without rules because students might take advantage of the freedom and behave badly, which would make teaching difficult.

× My school has a set of rules to maintain the behaviour and discipline at the school.

✓ My school has a set of rules to maintain the behaviour and discipline in the school.

The preposition 'at' is incorrectly used here. When referring to maintaining behaviour and discipline within an institution, 'in' is the correct preposition to indicate location or context.

× For example, this includes coming on time and wearing appropriate clothes and respecting teachers and students.

✓ For example, this includes coming on time, wearing appropriate clothes, and respecting teachers and students.

The sentence lacks commas to separate items in a list, which is important for clarity. Also, the phrase 'coming on time' is correct but adding commas improves readability.

× Most of the time I believe it's really important to have a set of rules to make a child a child a good citizen and they learn how to behave properly with with a set of rules.

✓ Most of the time, I believe it's really important to have a set of rules to make a child a good citizen and help them learn how to behave properly with a set of rules.

The sentence has repetition ('a child a child') and repeated words ('with with'). Also, the sentence structure is awkward and unclear. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× For example, when when I was in grade 11, my science teacher was really dedicated and she helped the students a lot to achieve the success and even in the she helped to.

✓ For example, when I was in grade 11, my science teacher was really dedicated and she helped the students a lot to achieve success and even beyond that.

The sentence contains repeated words ('when when') and an incomplete phrase ('even in the she helped to'). The past tense is used correctly but the sentence needs completion and correction for clarity.

× During my time I believe those rules were enough to uh, keep the discipline and behaviour of these children within the school, but now I have seen it's not enough and I believe they should improve and should be strict more than earlier time.

✓ During my time, I believe those rules were enough to keep the discipline and behaviour of the children within the school, but now I have seen it's not enough and I believe they should improve and be stricter than before.

The phrase 'strict more than earlier time' is incorrect. The correct comparative form is 'be stricter than before'. Also, 'these children' is better as 'the children' in this context. Adding commas improves sentence flow.

× Now I see her as a good one teacher, although she was stricken.

✓ Now I see her as a good teacher, although she was strict.

The phrase 'a good one teacher' is incorrect; it should be 'a good teacher'. The word 'stricken' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'strict' to describe a teacher's behaviour.

× I don't think so. I in my point of view a rule free school will not be good enough to learn children because then they have there are enough freedom to be wild.

✓ I don't think so. In my point of view, a rule-free school will not be good enough to teach children because then they have enough freedom to be wild.

The phrase 'I in my point of view' is incorrect; it should be 'In my point of view'. 'Learn children' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'teach children'. 'There are enough freedom' is incorrect; 'enough freedom' is uncountable and does not need 'there are'.