规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer wa shizen de wakariyasui eigo de kotaeru koto ga taisetsu desu. Koko de wa, fukuzatsu na kotoba ya kurikaeshi ga arimasu. Motto seikaku ni, shitsumon ni chokusetsu kotaete kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Yes, students must display their parking permission card on the dashboard. If they don't, they will be punished.' to iu fuu ni.

範例: Yes, students must display their parking permission card on the dashboard. If they don't, they will be punished.

建議: Kotae wa motto seikaku ni shite, rikai shi yasui you ni shite kudasai. 'Umm' ya 'like' nado no fukushi wa herashite kudasai. Mata, riyuu o tsukete kotaeru to yoi desu. Tatoeba, 'I think university students need fewer rules because they are mature and can manage their own time.' to iu fuu ni.

範例: I think university students need fewer rules because they are mature and can manage their own time effectively.

建議: Kotae wa motto meikaku ni shite, fukuzatsu na kotoba ya machigatta kotoba o saisho ni shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Yes, I had a dedicated teacher at engineering high school. She worked hard to help students who struggled.' to iu fuu ni.

範例: Yes, I had a dedicated teacher at engineering high school. She worked hard to help students who struggled.

建議: Kotae wa motto seikaku ni shite, rikai shi yasui you ni shite kudasai. 'Umm' ya 'like' nado no fukushi wa herashite kudasai. Mata, riyuu o tsukete kotaeru to yoi desu. Tatoeba, 'I think younger students need more rules to guide them, but older students need fewer rules because they are more responsible.' to iu fuu ni.

範例: I think younger students need more rules to guide them, but older students need fewer rules because they are more responsible.

建議: Kotae wa motto seikaku ni shite, fukuzatsu na kotoba ya machigatta kotoba o saisho ni shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Yes, I had a strict PE teacher in junior high school. He often pointed out bad behavior to help us improve.' to iu fuu ni.

範例: Yes, I had a strict PE teacher in junior high school. He often pointed out bad behavior to help us improve.

建議: Kotae wa motto seikaku ni shite, rikai shi yasui you ni shite kudasai. 'Umm' ya 'uh' nado no fukushi wa herashite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'No, I would not like to work in a rule-free school because without rules, children might cause more problems.' to iu fuu ni.

範例: No, I would not like to work in a rule-free school because without rules, children might cause more problems.

× OK immersed core student have to put their UMM parking parking permission card on the dashboard because umm if they don't have they don't do UMM.

✓ OK, immersed core students have to put their UMM parking permission card on the dashboard because if they don't have it, they can't do UMM.

The word 'student' should be plural 'students' to agree with the plural pronoun 'their'. Also, 'parking parking' is a repetition and should be corrected to 'parking'. The phrase 'if they don't have they don't do UMM' is unclear and corrected to 'if they don't have it, they can't do UMM' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× The permission is no the punish they punished.

✓ The permission is not the punishment; they are punished.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun and verb usage. 'No the punish' should be 'not the punishment', and 'they punished' should be 'they are punished' to correctly express passive voice.

× I think the student especially university student umm need less laws and more freedom.

✓ I think the students, especially university students, need fewer rules and more freedom.

Both 'student' and 'university student' should be plural to match the context. Also, 'laws' is better replaced with 'rules' in this context, and 'less' should be 'fewer' when referring to countable nouns like 'rules'.

× Yeah we need to more freedom umm because with think umm myself and what they have to do or like go what they want to.

✓ Yeah, we need more freedom because I think for myself and others, we should do what we want to do or go where we want to go.

The phrase 'need to more freedom' is incorrect; it should be 'need more freedom'. The sentence is also restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I would like to say one of my teacher was in uh, Engineer high school.

✓ Yes, I would like to say one of my teachers was in Engineer High School.

'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' because 'one of my' implies multiple teachers. Also, 'Engineer high school' is capitalized as 'Engineer High School' as a proper noun.

× She's very dedicated and yeah, many people strap, many students struggle with them.

✓ She's very dedicated, and yeah, many students struggle with her.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrect when referring to a singular female teacher; it should be 'her'. Also, 'strap' seems to be a mispronunciation or error and is removed for clarity.

× I think it depends on what grades the student team, umm, in their mental high school or junior high school, uh, they need to set the little more directory or like a more more, but the graduate student or college students they don't need.

✓ I think it depends on what grade the students are in; in middle school or junior high school, they need to have a little more discipline or more rules, but graduate students or college students don't need that.

'Student team' is unclear and corrected to 'students are in'. 'Mental high school' is corrected to 'middle school'. 'Set the little more directory or like a more more' is unclear and corrected to 'have a little more discipline or more rules'. 'Graduate student' is pluralized to 'graduate students'.

× What a strict teacher.

✓ What a strict teacher!

This is an exclamation and should end with an exclamation mark to express emotion properly.

× Uh, I will say one of my junior high school teacher, uh, who was in, uh, PE class was very districted, uh, very strict.

✓ Uh, I would say one of my junior high school teachers, who was in PE class, was very strict.

'Will say' is changed to 'would say' to match the past context. 'Teacher' is pluralized to 'teachers' because 'one of my' implies multiple teachers. 'Districted' is incorrect and removed.

× And he often, uh, argued that point out, oh, it's not bad your behavior, uh.

✓ And he often pointed out that my behavior was not bad.

The phrase 'argued that point out' is incorrect; 'pointed out' is the correct verb. 'It's not bad your behavior' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'my behavior was not bad' for clarity and correctness.

× Umm, I would say no because yeah, let's move is attractive for me, but no lure is kind of complex.

✓ Umm, I would say no because, yeah, teaching is attractive to me, but a rule-free school is kind of complex.

'Let's move' is incorrect and replaced with 'teaching'. 'No lure' is unclear and corrected to 'a rule-free school'. Modal verb 'would say' is appropriate here.

× Many children have free, uh, and they, I think it there are more trouble with this.

✓ Many children have freedom, and I think there is more trouble because of this.

'Have free' is incorrect; it should be 'have freedom'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.