规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Votre réponse manque de clarté et de structure. Essayez de formuler une phrase d'introduction claire, puis donnez des exemples précis en utilisant des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence. Par exemple, évitez les erreurs grammaticales et les répétitions.

範例: Yes, there are several rules at my school regarding clothing and appearance. For instance, students must wear black shoes and white socks, and hair dyeing is not allowed. These rules help maintain a neat and uniform look among students.

建議: Votre réponse est difficile à comprendre à cause de la grammaire et du vocabulaire incorrects. Essayez de structurer votre réponse avec une phrase principale claire et des détails de soutien, en utilisant des mots de liaison pour exprimer votre opinion clairement.

範例: I believe having a few important rules helps students behave better. However, too many rules might make students feel restricted and less motivated.

建議: Votre réponse manque de fluidité et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Utilisez une phrase d'introduction claire, puis ajoutez des détails spécifiques avec des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus naturelle et cohérente.

範例: Yes, I had a very dedicated Mandarin teacher in elementary school. She never left the classroom early and always prepared lessons carefully, which showed her professionalism.

建議: Votre réponse est compréhensible mais contient des erreurs grammaticales et de vocabulaire. Essayez de structurer votre réponse avec une phrase principale claire et des détails spécifiques, en utilisant des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence.

範例: I prefer fewer rules at school because too many rules made me feel stressed before. I think a creative and free environment helps students learn better.

建議: Votre réponse est assez claire mais contient des répétitions et des erreurs grammaticales. Améliorez la fluidité en évitant les répétitions et en utilisant des mots de liaison pour relier vos idées.

範例: I had a teacher who was both dedicated and strict. She never left the classroom early because she always prepared homework for the next day, which I found very impressive.

建議: Votre réponse contient des erreurs de vocabulaire et de grammaire. Essayez de formuler une phrase principale claire et d'ajouter des détails spécifiques avec des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus naturelle et cohérente.

範例: Yes, I would like to work in a school without strict rules because I believe a creative and free environment helps students generate new ideas and discover their potential for the future.

× Yes, there are couple rules for my and my school and such as the rules about clothing, hair and shoes.

✓ Yes, there are a couple of rules for me and my school, such as the rules about clothing, hair, and shoes.

The phrase 'couple rules' is missing the article 'a' and the preposition 'of' to correctly express 'a couple of rules'. Also, 'my and my school' is unclear and should be 'me and my school'. Additionally, commas are needed to separate items in a list.

× For example, we can wear the 2 short skirt or our hair can not be dyeing and the shoes must be black and the socks must must be white.

✓ For example, we can wear two short skirts, our hair cannot be dyed, the shoes must be black, and the socks must be white.

The number '2' should be written as 'two' in formal writing. 'Short skirt' should be plural 'skirts' to match 'we can wear'. 'Can not be dyeing' is incorrect; the correct form is 'cannot be dyed' using the past participle. Also, 'must must' is a repetition error. Commas and conjunctions are needed to separate clauses properly.

× Yeah, it's very.

✓ Yeah, it's very strict.

The sentence is incomplete; 'very' needs an adjective to modify. Adding 'strict' completes the thought.

× I think have a few rules can make student more principal, but when there are too many rules that may like may be effective students and make them feel to suggest so.

✓ I think having a few rules can make students more disciplined, but when there are too many rules, it may negatively affect students and make them feel discouraged.

The original sentence has missing subjects and verbs, incorrect word choices ('principal' instead of 'disciplined'), and awkward phrasing. 'Having' is needed as a gerund subject. 'Student' should be plural 'students'. 'May like may be effective' is unclear and corrected to 'may negatively affect'. 'Feel to suggest so' is incorrect and changed to 'feel discouraged'.

× Yes, I have a really dedicated teacher when I was in elementary school and she is my Mandarin teacher and I never seen her to leave about class and she always put be professional to us.

✓ Yes, I had a really dedicated teacher when I was in elementary school. She was my Mandarin teacher, and I never saw her leave class early. She was always very professional with us.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'Have' should be 'had' to match 'when I was'. 'Is' should be 'was'. 'Never seen' should be 'never saw'. 'Leave about class' is incorrect; 'leave class early' is appropriate. 'Put be professional' is incorrect; 'was always very professional' is correct.

× For me, I prefer to have fewer rules in at school because my school before have many rules and that make me feel stressful and sometimes I will feel the negative feeling and I prefer to have a creative and freedom environment.

✓ For me, I prefer to have fewer rules at school because my school used to have many rules, and that made me feel stressed. Sometimes I would feel negative, and I prefer to have a creative and free environment.

'In at school' is incorrect; 'at school' is correct. 'My school before have' should be 'my school used to have' to express past habit. 'Make me feel stressful' should be 'make me feel stressed' because 'stressful' describes things, 'stressed' describes feelings. 'Negative feeling' should be 'negative feelings'. 'Freedom environment' should be 'free environment' as 'free' is the adjective.

× The teacher I taught before that she was, she was a dedicated teacher, but also a strict teacher.

✓ The teacher I had before was a dedicated teacher, but also a strict one.

'I taught before that she was' is incorrect; it should be 'I had before'. The sentence is redundant and can be simplified for clarity.

× She never leave classroom early because she always prepared some some homework for tomorrow.

✓ She never leaves the classroom early because she always prepares some homework for the next day.

'Never leave' should be 'never leaves' to agree with third person singular subject. 'Prepared' should be 'prepares' to maintain present tense. 'Some some' is a repetition error. 'For tomorrow' is better expressed as 'for the next day'.

× But I think it's very impressive for me.

✓ But I think it was very impressive to me.

Since the teacher is referred to in past tense, 'is' should be 'was'. 'Impressive for me' is better expressed as 'impressive to me'.

× Yes, if I have an opportunity, I would like to work as a teacher in a room free free school.

✓ Yes, if I have an opportunity, I would like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school.

'Room free free school' is a mishearing or typo; the correct phrase is 'rule-free school' meaning a school without rules.

× Because I believe when the environment was so creative and freedom this this students can make more new idea and figure it out.

✓ Because I believe when the environment is creative and free, students can come up with more new ideas and figure things out.

'Was' should be 'is' to express a general truth. 'Freedom' should be 'free' as adjective. 'This this students' is a repetition error and should be 'students'. 'Make more new idea' should be 'come up with more new ideas'. 'Figure it out' is vague; 'figure things out' is clearer.

× What can they do in future.

✓ What can they do in the future?

'In future' should be 'in the future' with the definite article. Also, a question mark is needed at the end.