规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains many hesitations and filler words. Try to give a direct response with clear examples and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, there are several rules for students at my school. For instance, we must arrive on time for classes and maintain good attendance. These rules help students develop discipline from an early age.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and contains many hesitations. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid filler words. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I believe students would benefit from having more rules because it teaches them punctuality and discipline. For example, strict attendance policies encourage students to be responsible and focused on their studies.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains incomplete phrases and filler words. Try to express your ideas clearly and provide specific examples without hesitation.

範例: Yes, I had a very dedicated math teacher who was strict about attendance and punctuality. For example, even during sports events, she would ensure we attended dance practice and would personally remind us if we were absent.

建議: Your answer is unclear and incomplete with some repetition. Try to give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples, using linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: I prefer having more rules at school because they create a better learning environment. For instance, strict rules about attendance and punctuality help students stay focused and respectful.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains many hesitations and some unclear phrases. Try to speak more fluently and organize your answer with clear examples and linking words.

範例: Yes, I had a very strict math teacher who emphasized good grades and attentiveness. For example, when I was distracted in class once, she noticed and gave me detention to help me improve my focus. I believe strict teachers can be helpful.

建議: Your answer is somewhat off-topic and contains many hesitations. Try to directly answer the question and provide reasons clearly and concisely without unnecessary filler words.

範例: I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because I believe rules are important for maintaining order. Also, my career goal is to become a quality analyst, so teaching is not my preferred path.

× Yes, there are many rules made just for the students at my school.

✓ Yes, there are many rules made just for the students in my school.

The preposition 'at' is less appropriate when referring to students belonging to a school; 'in' is more commonly used to indicate membership or inclusion within an institution.

× For example, uh, coming early to the UH classes or maintaining your attendance during the classes or etcetera.

✓ For example, coming early to the UH classes or maintaining your attendance in the classes, etc.

The phrase 'during the classes' is awkward; 'in the classes' is more appropriate to indicate attendance. Also, 'or etcetera' is redundant; 'etc.' alone suffices.

× Or made for uh the students to follow or it helps the student uh, to learn discipline at a very early age.

✓ These rules are made for the students to follow and help them learn discipline at a very early age.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining the ideas into a complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, absolutely. Uh students would definitely benefit from umm, uh, learning or having more uh, roles, uh, because uh students, uh, are uh, supposed to uh, learn punctuality at a very young age.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Students would definitely benefit from learning or having more rules because students are supposed to learn punctuality at a very young age.

The word 'roles' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'rules'. Also, unnecessary fillers like 'uh' and 'umm' should be omitted for clarity.

× And of course, discipline plays a very important role, umm, role in the school curriculum.

✓ And of course, discipline plays a very important role in the school curriculum.

The repetition of 'role' is redundant and should be removed for clarity.

× It was my math teacher. She was a very strict about that ***** and attending classes.

✓ It was my math teacher. She was very strict about that subject and attending classes.

The phrase 'a very strict about that *****' is incomplete and unclear. Assuming '*****' refers to a subject, it should be replaced with 'subject' and the article 'a' removed before 'very strict'.

× Even if we had for example in even if we had any sports stand, we had to go for a dance practice or something or she used to come to the practice time and call us.

✓ Even if we had, for example, any sports event, we had to go to dance practice or something, and she used to come at practice time and call us.

The phrase 'sports stand' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'sports event' fits better. Prepositions 'go for' should be 'go to' for activities, and 'come to the practice time' should be 'come at practice time'.

× I prefer to have more rules at school school because having more rules makes the learning environment very good for example.

✓ I prefer to have more rules at school because having more rules makes the learning environment very good, for example.

The word 'school' is repeated unnecessarily. Also, a comma is needed before 'for example' to separate clauses.

× Or for instance if we have more rules like attending classes or having very strict entering timing of the school makes some open share.

✓ For instance, if we have more rules like attending classes or having very strict school entry times, it makes some open share.

The phrase 'entering timing of the school' is awkward; 'school entry times' is clearer. The phrase 'makes some open share' is unclear and likely incorrect; clarification is needed.

× She was very strict when it comes to, uh, grades or uh, even, uh, being attentive in class.

✓ She was very strict when it came to grades or even being attentive in class.

The phrase 'when it comes to' should be in past tense 'when it came to' to match the past tense context.

× For instance, uh, once, umm, I uh, lost uh, interest in the class and was very distracted by, uh, the, my surroundings And uh, she actually pointed out and uh, umm, gave me detention for the same.

✓ For instance, once I lost interest in the class and was very distracted by my surroundings, and she actually pointed it out and gave me detention for the same.

The phrase 'pointed out' needs an object ('it'). Also, 'the, my surroundings' is redundant; 'my surroundings' suffices. Commas and conjunctions are adjusted for clarity.

× So I think having a very strict cheater helps.

✓ So I think having a very strict teacher helps.

The word 'cheater' is a typo and should be 'teacher'.

× I would not, uh, work as a teacher in a role free school because uh, my career path is different from becoming a teacher.

✓ I would not work as a teacher in a rule-free school because my career path is different from becoming a teacher.

The phrase 'role free school' is incorrect; it should be 'rule-free school' to mean a school without rules.

× Umm, for an uh, For example, in uh, in the future, I want to become a quality analyst, which is a different career path from uh, me becoming a teacher.

✓ For example, in the future, I want to become a quality analyst, which is a different career path from becoming a teacher.

The phrase 'from me becoming a teacher' is awkward; 'from becoming a teacher' is more natural and grammatically correct.