规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples. Remove filler words (uh) and avoid repeating. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes. We have a strict dress code: all students must wear a uniform. In addition, the school prohibits makeup and accessories such as earrings and bracelets to maintain a neat appearance.

建議: Give a clear opinion in one sentence then support it with a reason and an example. Avoid hesitation and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

範例: No. I don't think more rules would help students because they would increase stress and reduce creativity. For example, strict regulations on study times could make students anxious rather than motivated.

建議: Provide a clear, specific answer with a brief description of why the teacher was dedicated. Use past tense correctly and avoid vague phrases like 'someday'.

範例: Yes. When I was in middle school I had a very dedicated teacher who spent extra time after class helping struggling students and regularly prepared detailed lessons to make the material clearer.

建議: State your preference clearly, then give two specific reasons connected with linking words. Avoid unclear fragments and correct grammar (e.g. 'I prefer fewer rules').

範例: I prefer fewer rules at school because excessive strictness makes students anxious and limits independence. However, I still think basic rules are necessary for safety and order.

建議: Answer directly and give concrete examples of strict behaviour. Use complete sentences and correct tense; avoid trailing off. Use linking words to explain the effect of the strictness.

範例: Yes. My middle-school English teacher was very strict: she forbade students from using colored pens and insisted on neat, uniform handwriting. Because of her rules, I improved my writing clarity but felt nervous during lessons.

建議: Give a direct yes/no, then explain with two clear reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'however'). Avoid repetition and correct phrasing ('rule-free').

範例: No. I would not want to teach in a rule-free school because rules are important for safety and consistent learning. However, I would support flexible policies that encourage student autonomy while maintaining basic standards.

× Yes, uh, there is a dress code.

✓ Yes, there is a dress code.

Minor filler words 'uh' disrupt clarity but the sentence structure 'there is' is correct; remove filler to be concise.

× Everyone has to wear a uniform.

✓ Everyone has to wear a uniform.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no pronoun error. No change needed.

× That school uniform, uh, we don't allow to wear makeup, wear accessories like earrings or bracelets.

✓ Regarding the school uniform, we do not allow students to wear makeup or accessories such as earrings or bracelets.

'Allow' should be followed by an object and base verb (allow someone to do). The original omits the object and uses awkward structure. Reordering and adding 'students' and 'to' fixes verb complementation and clarity.

× No, I don't think that students would benefit more from rules, more from more rules, because I think that more rules would stress, stress the students.

✓ No, I don't think students would benefit from more rules because I think additional rules would stress the students.

Redundant phrases and repeated words create clutter. Remove repetition and simplify 'benefit from' and 'additional rules' to maintain correct preposition and concise structure.

× Yes, I had when I was going to the middle school someday.

✓ Yes, I did when I was in middle school.

Use 'did' as short answer to 'Have you ever...?' and 'in middle school' is the correct expression; 'someday' is incorrect for a past event.

× I went to the school and my teacher.

✓ I attended that school and had a dedicated teacher.

Original is a sentence fragment and unclear. 'Attended that school' and 'had a dedicated teacher' complete the thought and match the question about a dedicated teacher.

× I prefer fewer rules at school because my school is very strict, so I'm not prefer Norals or I'm not saying that rules are. Have to be ignored but.

✓ I prefer fewer rules at school because my school is very strict; I'm not saying that rules should be ignored, though.

Original contains pronoun and word-choice errors ('I'm not prefer', 'Norals') and fragmented clauses. Use 'I'm not saying that rules should be ignored' to express the intended contrast clearly.

× Yes, I had. My English teacher in the middle school was a really strict teacher.

✓ Yes, I did. My English teacher in middle school was really strict.

Use 'did' as short answer to 'Have you ever...?' and drop unnecessary article before 'middle school'; 'was really strict' is correct past tense.

× She doesn't allow to. Writing by the different colors and she never let me be the.

✓ She didn't allow us to write using different colors, and she never let me do that.

'Allow' requires an object and infinitive (allow someone to do). For past habit, use past tense 'didn't allow' and 'let me do that' completes the idea. Original fragments were ungrammatical.

× I would not like to prefer to work as a teacher in a world free school because I think that rules are.

✓ I would not prefer to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because I think schools need rules.

'Would not like to prefer' is redundant and incorrect; use 'would not prefer'. 'World free school' should be 'rule-free school'. Also simplify 'rules are' to complete the thought.

× I think that school needs the rules because I don't think the school has to be a rule free.

✓ I think schools need rules because I don't think a school should be rule-free.

'Has to be a rule free' is ungrammatical; use 'should be rule-free' and adjust articles/plurality for general statement; 'schools' generalizes and reads more naturally.