规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and more accurate phrasing, and avoid long hesitations or fragmented sentences.

範例: I’m no longer a student, but when I was at university the rules were quite relaxed. For example, attendance was optional for many lectures and students were trusted to meet deadlines on their own.

建議: Answer the question directly then support with a clear reason and an example. Use linking words (however, for example) and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles). Avoid vague phrases like “their own conservativeness.”

範例: I don’t think more rules are generally beneficial. Instead, rules should be updated to reflect social change; for example, some outdated regulations still ban long hair even though they do not affect learning.

建議: Organize your response: start with yes/no, then give one or two specific examples with brief details of what made them dedicated. Keep sentences short and avoid rambling. Check tense and pronoun reference.

範例: Yes, I have. For instance, my high school English teacher stayed after class every week to help students with essays, and my university supervisor regularly gave detailed feedback on drafts, which showed real dedication.

建議: State your preference clearly first, then explain with two concise reasons and one example. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect words; use linking words like because and for example.

範例: I prefer fewer rules because many existing regulations in Thailand are outdated and do not prepare students for modern workplaces. For example, uniform and grooming policies often focus on appearance rather than learning outcomes.

建議: Avoid vague percentages and unclear phrases. Answer directly (yes/no) then describe one clear memory of a strict teacher, what they required, and how it affected you. Use simple, accurate language.

範例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in middle school who enforced silence during study periods and punished late homework. Although it felt harsh, it made me much more disciplined with my assignments.

建議: Give a clear stance (yes/no/depends) and then explain two specific conditions that would make you accept such a job. Reduce filler words (umm) and finish with a concise conclusion.

範例: It depends. I would consider working in a rule-free school if it had a clear support structure for students and trained staff; for example, for students with special needs there must be specialist aides and individual plans to ensure safety and learning.

× Long no longer a student but when I attended university it's pretty relaxed I guess.

✓ I'm no longer a student, but when I attended university it was pretty relaxed, I guess.

The original sentence lacks a subject and has incorrect tense consistency. Use 'I'm no longer a student' for present state and 'when I attended university it was pretty relaxed' for past reference. Add commas to separate clauses and 'I guess' as a comment.

× Never because they expected you to be an adult and be responsible for your own actions.

✓ Not really, because they expected you to be an adult and to be responsible for your own actions.

Sentence fragment 'Never' is incomplete. Use 'Not really' as a response and include the infinitive 'to be' for parallel structure: 'to be an adult and to be responsible'. This completes the sentence and improves grammaticality.

× Not necessary.

✓ Not necessary.

Short response is acceptable in conversation; no article error if used as a brief reply. Keep as is.

× And sometimes they implemented some rule because of their own conservativeness and that does not necessarily reflect the rapidly changing world, for example.

✓ And sometimes they implement some rules because of their own conservativeness, which does not necessarily reflect the rapidly changing world, for example.

Tense should be present simple 'implement' to match the general statement. Use plural 'rules' for generality. Replace 'and that' with 'which' to link clauses correctly.

× And in some countries they're still prohibit students from having long hairs.

✓ And in some countries they still prohibit students from having long hair.

Remove contraction 'they're' (they are) which is incorrect here; use 'they still prohibit'. 'Hair' is uncountable in this context, so use 'long hair' not 'long hairs'.

× I do I think it's very unfortunate of me to have met many so dedicated teachers in my life since primary school middle schools have 30 university and actually I'm pretty surprised back in the university as well because he kind of.

✓ Yes, I do. I think I've been very fortunate to have met so many dedicated teachers in my life, from primary school through middle school and university. Actually, I was also quite surprised at university because he was kind of...

The original mixes tenses and contains fragments and nonstandard phrases. Use present perfect 'I've been' and 'to have met' for life experiences. Clarify sequence 'from primary school through middle school and university'. Keep trailing thought 'he was kind of...' if speaker trails off.

× I think the patterns in Thailand specifically, I think that should be feel a rose because we have so many rules already and some of them are ridiculous and irrelevant in the current global context.

✓ I think the policies in Thailand, specifically, should be relaxed because we already have so many rules, and some of them are ridiculous and irrelevant in the current global context.

Original has wrong words ('patterns', 'feel a rose'). Use 'policies' or 'rules' and 'relaxed' instead of 'feel a rose'. Rephrase for clarity and correct parallel structure.

× And I think it didn't prepare students for the world ahead.

✓ And I think it doesn't prepare students for the world ahead.

If speaking generally about current policies, use present tense 'doesn't prepare'. Use 'didn't' only if referring to past policies no longer in effect.

× This one is a classic 1, isn't it? Especially for Asian students? And in fact about 8290% of all the teachers are so split.

✓ This one is a classic, isn't it? Especially for Asian students. In fact, about 82–90% of all the teachers are so strict.

Original contains numeric error '8290%' and 'split' instead of 'strict'. Provide a plausible range '82–90%' and correct adjective 'strict'. Also correct punctuation and sentence fragments.

× That's probably because our system set up that way because all more super tissues in town and they graduate a bit from the cinema.

✓ That's probably because our system is set up that way: there are many private schools in town, and teachers are trained in a similar way.

Original is garbled and contains nonsense phrases. Reconstruct sentence to convey likely meaning: system setup, many schools, teacher training. Use proper verb 'is set up' and clearer nouns.

× Umm, it depends. Firstly, it depends on where that school is located and what kind of umm, demographic I'll be targeting.

✓ Umm, it depends. First, it depends on where the school is located and what kind of demographic I'll be targeting.

'Firstly' is acceptable but 'First' is more natural. Remove extra 'that' and redundant 'umm'. Maintain correct future reference 'I'll be targeting'.

× Here. I'll be talking about umm, students with special needs.

✓ Here, I'll be talking about students with special needs.

Replace period with comma to connect clauses; remove filler 'umm'. This makes a single coherent sentence.

× Let's say that you need to pay particular attention to not really UMM.

✓ Let's say that you need to pay particular attention; not really, umm...

Original ends abruptly and is unclear. Provide a grammatical structure with a semicolon and filler to indicate trailing-off. If the speaker intended a complete thought, they should finish the sentence, e.g. '...to students' behavior'.