规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, there were many rules at my school.), then give one or two specific rules with linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and grammar mistakes (tense, article use). Keep to a maximum of about three sentences.

範例: Yes, there were many rules at my school. For example, students were not allowed to leave campus after classes, and during study periods we were prohibited from going to the market. These rules were meant to help us focus on our studies.

建議: Give a clear opinion first, then two specific reasons linked with words like 'because' or 'so'. Correct grammar: use plural/singular agreement and proper verb forms. Remove hesitation and keep sentences short and coherent.

範例: No, I don't think more rules would help. Because too many rules can make students anxious and reduce their motivation, so they may become less productive in their studies.

建議: Answer directly: say yes and name one teacher and why they were dedicated. Use clear nouns (teacher, subject) and avoid unclear phrases. Provide a brief example of what they did to support you.

範例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher at university who taught textile manufacturing. He spent extra time explaining difficult concepts and encouraged me to try practical projects, which greatly improved my skills and confidence.

建議: Make your preference explicit (more or fewer) and give two balanced reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'however'. Fix word choice (prefer, fewer/more rules) and grammar. Limit to three sentences.

範例: I prefer fewer rules at school because students need freedom to be creative and take initiative. However, some strict rules are necessary for safety and discipline, so a balance is best.

建議: Respond with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific details about the teacher's strictness and its effect on you. Use proper grammar (number agreement, tense) and avoid repetition. Keep it concise.

範例: Yes, I had several strict teachers, especially in physics and math. They enforced rules very rigidly and focused only on grades, which made me feel nervous during class.

建議: Answer the question directly (yes/no) and explain briefly why, linking reasons logically. Avoid unrelated details (country, relocation) unless relevant. Use correct future or present continuous tenses and clear structure.

範例: No, I would not like to work in a rule-free school because I prefer some structure to ensure student safety and learning. At the moment I am focused on finishing my studies and starting a career in a multinational company.

× Yes, so when I was school this time there are a lot of regulations, especially every student should maintain the also rules like uh, uh, they don't go out after classes and also umm, after having the laser period, uh, nobody allowed to go uh, in market.

✓ When I was at school there were a lot of regulations. For example, every student had to follow the rules: they were not allowed to go out after classes, and after the last period nobody was allowed to go to the market.

Multiple issues: 1) 'when I was school' is missing preposition 'at' (Grammar Problem Type 11: Incorrect use of prepositions). 2) 'there are a lot' uses present tense incorrectly for a past situation; should be past 'there were' (6: Present tense issue). 3) 'every student should maintain the also rules' is awkward and incorrect article/word order; corrected to 'every student had to follow the rules' (22: Article errors and 26: Sentence structure errors). 4) 'they don't go out after classes' conflicts with past narrative and third-person plural tense—changed to 'they were not allowed to go out after classes' (6: Present tense issue and 21: Incorrect passive voice to convey permission rules). 5) 'after having the laser period' likely 'last period' (11: Incorrect use of prepositions/word choice). 6) 'nobody allowed to go uh, in market' missing auxiliary and preposition: corrected to 'nobody was allowed to go to the market' (21: Incorrect passive voice and 11: Incorrect preposition). Suggestion: use clear past tense when describing past situations, include necessary prepositions (at, to), and use passive voice with auxiliary 'was/were' when describing rules that prohibit actions.

× Uh, I don't think student are more benefited when, uh, uh, there would be more roles because, uh, when student is easily, I stuck with lot of rules this time they get panic and they cannot approach their work and which, uh, help unless reduce their productivity.

✓ I don't think students benefit from having more rules, because when students are overwhelmed by many rules they panic and cannot focus on their work, which reduces their productivity.

Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure errors: 1) 'student are' should be plural 'students are' or 'students benefit' (27: Subject-verb agreement). 2) 'more benefited' is incorrect; use 'benefit' (13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 3) 'there would be more roles' should be 'there are more rules'—'roles' is wrong word (11: Incorrect use of prepositions/word choice). 4) 'student is easily, I stuck with lot of rules' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'when students are overwhelmed by many rules' (26: Sentence structure errors). 5) 'they get panic' -> 'they panic' (13: Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs). 6) 'they cannot approach their work' -> 'cannot focus on their work' (11: Incorrect use of prepositions/word choice). 7) 'which, uh, help unless reduce their productivity' -> 'which reduces their productivity' (6: Present tense issue and 26: Sentence structure). Suggestion: ensure subjects and verbs agree in number, use active simple verbs (benefit, panic, focus), and break long sentences into clear clauses.

× Yes, I have a lot of dedicated, uh, teaser, especially when I was at university that time, uh, my uh, fabric manufacturing, uh, T-shirt was really exceptional. He failed a significant part in my life and ** *** he allowed, encouraged me and I also appreciate his dedication.

✓ Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher at university. My fabric manufacturing T-shirt lecturer was exceptional. He played an important role in my life: he supported and encouraged me, and I appreciate his dedication.

Pronoun and word choice errors plus tense issues: 1) 'I have a lot of dedicated, uh, teaser' is incorrect—'teacher' not 'teaser', and 'a lot of dedicated' misuses quantifier; use 'a dedicated teacher' or 'very dedicated teacher' (12: Incorrect use of pronouns/word choice and 14: Incorrect use of quantifiers). 2) 'when I was at university that time' redundant; simplified and kept past tense 'had' (6: Present tense issue). 3) 'my fabric manufacturing, uh, T-shirt' is unclear; interpreted as 'fabric manufacturing (T-shirt) lecturer' for clarity (11: Incorrect use of prepositions/word choice). 4) 'He failed a significant part in my life' is wrong verb; likely 'He played a significant part in my life' (13: Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs/word choice). 5) 'he allowed, encouraged me' missing conjunction and proper verbs; corrected to 'he supported and encouraged me' and past tense 'appreciated' changed to present 'I appreciate' acceptable. Suggestion: choose correct nouns, simplify redundant phrases, use appropriate verbs (play a part, support), and keep consistent past tense when describing past events.

× I personally pepper, uh, pure rules at school because, uh, if there, if you are a student, uh, get a freedom and they're able to, uh, and do something, a creative, a creative and they don't be scared to do anything. Umm, also sometimes, uh, harder roles is very important.

✓ I personally prefer more flexible rules at school because if students have freedom they can be creative and are not afraid to try new things. However, sometimes stricter rules are also important.

Several errors: 1) 'pepper' is wrong word; should be 'prefer' (13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs/word choice). 2) 'pure rules' unclear—interpreted as 'more flexible rules' or speaker meant 'fewer rules'; context suggests 'prefer more freedom', so corrected accordingly (11: Incorrect use of prepositions/word choice). 3) 'if you are a student, uh, get a freedom' -> 'if students have freedom' (12: Incorrect use of pronouns). 4) 'they're able to, uh, and do something, a creative, a creative' -> 'they can be creative' (26: Sentence structure errors and 18: Incorrect order of adjectives). 5) 'they don't be scared to do anything' -> 'they are not afraid to try new things' (13: Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs). 6) 'harder roles is very important' -> 'stricter rules are also important' (1: Singular and plural issue and 11: Incorrect word choice). Suggestion: use precise vocabulary (prefer, flexible/stricter), keep subject consistent (students), and use natural collocations (be creative, not afraid).

× Yes, I had three or four state teacher when I was at school, especially my physics and math teacher there was really straightforward and they didn't consider anything else always I we need to concern more about this early. So I I was scared that time.

✓ Yes, I had three or four strict teachers when I was at school. In particular, my physics and math teachers were very strict and always focused only on the subjects; I was scared at that time.

Plural and agreement errors plus sentence structure: 1) 'state teacher' is likely wrong word; replaced with 'strict teachers' (11: Incorrect use of prepositions/word choice). 2) 'three or four state teacher' needs plural 'teachers' (1: Singular and plural issue). 3) 'my physics and math teacher there was really straightforward' should be plural 'teachers were' since two teachers (27: Subject-verb agreement and 1: Singular and plural). 4) 'they didn't consider anything else always I we need to concern more about this early' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'always focused only on the subjects' (26: Sentence structure errors). 5) 'I I was scared that time' simplified to 'I was scared at that time' (11: Incorrect use of prepositions). Suggestion: ensure nouns match number, make verbs agree with plural subjects, and simplify complex clauses for clarity.

× Actually, currently I don't have plan to go, uh, countryside purchasing because I, I live in, here in Canada. I have planned to complete my graduation and I join a multinational company here and who is helped me to make a good career.

✓ Currently I don't have plans to move to the countryside because I live here in Canada. I plan to complete my degree and join a multinational company here, which will help me build a good career.

Tense and word-form issues: 1) 'I don't have plan' should be 'I don't have plans' or 'a plan' (1: Singular and plural issue). 2) 'to go, uh, countryside purchasing' is incorrect phrasing; corrected to 'to move to the countryside' (11: Incorrect use of prepositions/word choice). 3) 'I, I live in, here in Canada' simplified to 'I live here in Canada' (26: Sentence structure). 4) 'I have planned to complete my graduation and I join a multinational company' mixing tenses; corrected to present/future intent: 'I plan to complete my degree and join a multinational company' (6: Present tense issue and 7: Future tense issue). 5) 'and who is helped me to make a good career' incorrect relative clause; corrected to 'which will help me build a good career' (26: Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: use correct collocations (move to the countryside, complete my degree), maintain consistent tense for future plans (I plan to / I will), and use appropriate relative pronouns (which) with clear verb forms.