规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Focus on clarity, correct vocabulary and grammar, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by two specific rules. Avoid hesitations and incorrect words (e.g., 'arrows', 'punks'). Use linking words such as 'for example' or 'also' to connect details.

範例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must complete their homework on time, and they are not allowed to use mobile phones during lessons. Also, students should arrive to class on time and avoid disrupting lectures.

建議: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give two concise reasons with linking words. Use correct phrasing ('students would benefit', 'more rules would help'), and avoid repetition. Be specific about how rules help (e.g., discipline, time management).

範例: Yes, I think more reasonable rules could be beneficial. Firstly, they would help students develop discipline and manage their time better; for example, deadlines can improve study habits. Secondly, clear rules can discourage cheating or other unethical behaviour, creating a fair learning environment.

建議: Answer directly with one topic sentence saying 'Yes' then describe one teacher with specific examples of their dedication and its impact on you. Use past tense consistently and avoid fillers and repetition.

範例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher in elementary school. She stayed after class to help me with reading and praised my progress, which boosted my confidence and made me enjoy learning. I still remember her support and try to apply her advice today.

建議: Give a clear preference (more or fewer) and two concise, specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary ('more rules' not 'morals') and clear grammar. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect reasons.

範例: I prefer more reasonable rules at school because they encourage self-discipline and create a stable environment. For example, rules about attendance help students balance study and personal life, leading to better academic performance.

建議: State clearly that you had strict teachers, then describe one briefly with specific behaviours that made them strict (e.g., strict grading, tight deadlines). Use past tense and avoid unclear expressions like 'too much heart'. Keep to two or three sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher at university — the department head. He gave very strict deadlines and marked harshly, which caused a lot of stress; I even cried once after a harsh grade. However, his high standards pushed me to improve my work.

建議: Give a direct yes/no answer then explain succinctly why, with one or two specific reasons and an example of how you'd manage without formal rules (e.g., encourage self-directed learning, involve parents). Avoid excessive fillers and vague phrasing.

範例: Yes, I would like to teach in a rule-free school if given the chance. I believe I could promote self-directed learning by setting clear expectations and involving parents and the community in supporting student responsibility, for example through project-based activities that require teamwork and accountability.

× Yes, there are a lot of arrows at school.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of rules at school.

The student used 'arrows' instead of 'rules' which is a lexical error; however it also implies incorrect article/word choice. Replace with the correct noun 'rules' to match context. Use 'a lot of' with plural noun 'rules'.

× Uh, firstly, student should uh, do their homework and they should be punks.

✓ Firstly, students should do their homework and behave properly.

'Student' is singular but context requires plural; subject-verb agreement and word choice errors. Use plural 'students' with base verb 'should do'. 'Be punks' is incorrect and informal; 'behave properly' conveys intended meaning.

× Well, uh, don't do late at class and also, uh, student do not uh, learner do not allow to buying their mobile phone at school.

✓ They should not be late to class, and students are not allowed to buy or bring mobile phones to school.

The original is ungrammatical and mixed forms. Use imperative/advice structure 'should not be late to class'. Use passive 'students are not allowed' for rules. Correct infinitive forms: 'to buy' or 'bring', and maintain plural 'students'.

× They do not talk uh, uh, during the lecture with their PR.

✓ They do not talk during the lecture with their peers.

Use the correct noun 'peers' instead of 'PR' (abbreviation unclear). Preposition 'during' is fine; ensure the noun is appropriate. If meaning 'partner' or 'peer', use 'peers'.

× Obviously it would be more beneficial if student get more numerous rules firstly and they uh will learn about their discipline and they they also learn about learn balancing of their life and they don't engage with any unethical activities.

✓ Obviously it would be more beneficial if students received more rules; they would learn discipline, how to balance their lives, and not engage in unethical activities.

Use plural 'students' and correct tense/mood: conditional 'would be beneficial if students received'. 'Get' should be 'received' or 'were given'. Replace awkward phrasing 'learn balancing of their life' with 'learn how to balance their lives'.

× Yes, I have. When I was at elementary school that time, I have a couple of teaser who is really who are who are really extraordinary.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was in elementary school, I had a couple of teachers who were really extraordinary.

Use past simple 'had' for past time reference and plural 'teachers' with plural verb 'were'. 'At elementary school that time' is awkward; use 'When I was in elementary school'.

× They gave me a a significant effort in my life and eventually I love them.

✓ They made a significant impact on my life, and I will always remember them fondly.

'Gave me a significant effort' is incorrect collocation. Use 'made a significant impact on my life'. 'Eventually I love them' mixes tenses; use present 'I will always remember them' or 'I love them' depending on meaning; 'always remember them fondly' fits.

× Obviously I prefer morals at school because is a health student, self-discipline and give them sense of stability and they can balance both their life and also their study.

✓ Obviously I prefer morals to be taught at school because they promote students' health, self-discipline, and a sense of stability; students can balance their lives and their studies.

Fix article and noun forms: 'is a health student' is incorrect. Use 'they promote students' health'. Use possessive 'students' and plural 'lives' and 'studies'. Clarify 'prefer morals at school' to 'prefer morals to be taught at school'.

× Yes, I heard, uh, two or more, uh, when I was at university, my department head was too much heart and I literally cried when I got any subject because and there are so much pressure in his subject.

✓ Yes, I had two or more strict teachers when I was at university. My department head was very harsh, and I literally cried when I took some subjects because there was so much pressure in his classes.

Use past tense consistently: 'had' instead of 'heard'. 'Too much heart' is wrong; use 'very harsh'. 'When I got any subject' should be 'when I took some subjects'. 'There was so much pressure' corrects agreement and tense.

× And she, he was really, really straightforward person.

✓ He was a really straightforward person.

The mixed pronouns 'she, he' are confusing; choose the correct pronoun 'he' based on context. Include the article 'a' before 'really straightforward person'.

× Uh, yes, uh, I definitely, I would, uh, like to do if I had a chance, I must go for that.

✓ Yes, I would definitely like to do it if I had the chance; I would go for it.

Streamline the sentence: use conditional 'would like to do it if I had the chance'. Replace repeated fillers and incorrect modal 'must' with 'would'.

× And I will try to involve, uh, with full student and, and also the community who is, uh, help to keep my balance in my life and help the society and student.

✓ I would try to involve all students and the community to help maintain balance in my life and to benefit society and the students.

Use 'all students' instead of 'full student'. Use infinitive 'to help' and consistent structure. 'Who is help to keep my balance' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'the community to help maintain balance'.