聊天— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Use more natural phrasing, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles), and shorten repetitive ideas. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. For example, replace "build the connection" with "helps build connections" and reduce redundancy like "joy and sorrow of each other" to "both joys and sorrows."

範例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends because it helps build strong connections. For example, when I'm stressed I often talk to a close friend and they help me feel better, which reduces my mental load.

建議: Avoid filler words and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to organise topics (e.g., "mainly... but sometimes...") and be more specific with examples. Correct tense errors like "which has been a burden." Limit to a maximum of five sentences.

範例: Mainly we talk about current trends, such as fashion and popular styles, and we also discuss studies, like exam plans or assignments. Sometimes we talk about family matters or personal problems that have been weighing on us.

建議: Remove hesitations and repeat words. Use a clear topic sentence and give one concise reason with an example. Correct grammar ("chat with one person and have" → "chat one-on-one and have").

範例: I prefer chatting one-on-one because it allows deeper, more meaningful conversations. For instance, I can discuss personal issues privately with a close friend and get detailed advice.

建議: Organise the answer with a conditional structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "if... then... otherwise..." and finish the sentence clearly ("I prefer social media"). Correct small grammar issues ("near to" → "near").

範例: It depends: if I'm near my friends or family, I prefer face-to-face conversations because they're more personal. But when we're far apart, I use social media or video calls to stay in touch.

建議: Be concise and avoid fillers. Give one reason and a brief example. Fix awkward phrasing like "maintain the balance between balance and harmony" to "maintain harmony."

範例: I usually don't argue with my friends because I try to maintain harmony and resolve issues calmly. For example, if a disagreement arises I prefer to discuss it politely rather than escalating it into an argument.

× It makes me feel very delighted because chatting with friends build the connection with each other and we can share the joy and sorrow of each other so we can decrease our mental load.

✓ It makes me feel very delighted because chatting with friends builds a connection between us, and we can share each other's joys and sorrows so we can reduce our mental burden.

The verb must agree with the singular noun 'chatting' (a gerund functioning as singular), so 'build' should be 'builds'. Also, use 'a connection between us' and possessive forms 'each other's joys and sorrows' for natural English, and 'reduce our mental burden' is more idiomatic than 'decrease our mental load'.

× Also, it's very helpful chatting with friends.

✓ Also, it's very helpful to chat with friends.

After 'helpful', use the infinitive 'to chat' rather than a bare gerund for clearer, more natural structure: 'helpful to do something.' Alternatively, 'chatting with friends is very helpful' would also be correct.

× And normally we chat about the trending things, trending clothes, the new fashions and also study related things.

✓ Normally we chat about trending topics, trending clothes, new fashions, and study-related things.

'Trending things' is vague; 'trending topics' is idiomatic. Remove the unnecessary definite article before 'new fashions'. Use a hyphen in 'study-related' when used as a compound adjective before a noun.

× And sometimes, uh, we talk about family related issues and also share something, umm, which been, uh, been a burden to you.

✓ And sometimes we talk about family-related issues and share things that have been a burden to you.

Use 'family-related' with a hyphen as a compound adjective. Use a relative clause with appropriate tense: 'that have been a burden to you' instead of the incorrect 'which been been'.

× I would love to say that I, I like to chat with a person rather than in a group because, uh, I think chatting with one person and have a meaningful, meaningful conversation is more relevant and, uh, uh, worthy than chatting with the group of.

✓ I would say I prefer to chat one-on-one rather than in a group because chatting with one person and having a meaningful conversation is more worthwhile than chatting with a group.

Use 'prefer' instead of 'like to' for clarity. 'Chat with a person' is awkward; 'chat one-on-one' or 'chat with one person' is clearer. After 'chatting with one person' use 'having' (gerund) to maintain parallel structure. 'Worthy' should be 'worthwhile' or 'more meaningful.' Remove redundant words and incomplete phrase 'group of'.

× It depends on the situation if I prefer to communicate face to face or via social media.

✓ It depends on the situation whether I prefer to communicate face to face or via social media.

Use 'whether' to introduce the two alternatives (face to face or via social media). 'If' is often used for conditional clauses; 'whether' is more appropriate for choices.

× If I am near to my friends or families I would rather go to them and chat with them but as I'm far across the world right now and very far from them then so I prefer social.

✓ If I am near my friends or family I would rather go to them and chat, but since I am far away from them right now, I prefer social media.

Use 'near my friends or family' (no 'to' after 'near'; 'family' typically uncountable here). Use 'far away' for distance and 'social media' as the noun. Remove redundant words 'then so' and simplify the clause order for clarity.

× And sometimes we talk about family related issues and also share something, umm, which been, uh, been a burden to you.

✓ And sometimes we talk about family-related issues and share things that have been a burden to you.

The relative clause needs the present perfect passive/active 'have been' to describe an experience continuing to now. 'Which been been' is ungrammatical; use 'that have been'.

× Normally I don't argue with my friends and I have, uh, no such memory having so having, having an argument with someone because I'm a person to, uh, maintain the balance between balance and harmony between me and my friends.

✓ Normally I don't argue with my friends; I have no memory of having an argument with anyone because I try to maintain balance and harmony with them.

Simplify and correct the noun phrase: 'have no memory of having an argument' is the correct expression. Remove repeated words and awkward phrasing 'person to maintain the balance between balance and harmony between me and my friends' — instead use 'I try to maintain balance and harmony with them.'