聊天— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetitions, and correct small grammar issues (e.g. 'I'm an introvert, so it's difficult for me to communicate by phone or video'). Limit to 2–3 sentences and add one brief reason with a linking word.

範例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because, as an introvert, I find text easier than calls. For example, messaging lets me think before replying and express my thoughts more clearly.

建議: Organize and be specific: begin with a clear topic sentence, use linking words for listing (e.g. 'for example' or 'and also'), remove fillers, and give one concrete detail. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: We usually talk about clothes and food when planning outings. For example, in our WhatsApp group we decide what to pack, which restaurants to try, and we create a simple itinerary.

建議: Avoid repetition and state your preference directly, then give one clear reason with a linking word such as 'because' or 'so'. Remove repeated words and keep it to 2 sentences.

範例: I prefer chatting in a group because everyone can see the plans at once. This is convenient since I don't need to repeat the same information to each person.

建議: Clarify and contrast the two modes: start with a clear statement, then briefly compare using linking words ('however', 'on the other hand'), and avoid mixed or repeated phrases. Fix grammar (e.g. 'face-to-face' and 'social media give me time to think').

範例: I like both methods: face-to-face is better for clear expression and reading body language, but social media is useful because it gives me time to think before replying.

建議: Be concise and use one cohesive sentence with a supporting example. Avoid contradictions and hesitations; state frequency and give a specific topic with a linking word like 'usually' or 'mainly'.

範例: Not often, but sometimes we argue, usually about career choices. For instance, we debate which industries have better opportunities and which paths to follow.

× I enjoy chatting with my friends because I'm an introvert person so it is difficult for me to diff uh to communicate via phone call or video calls.

✓ I enjoy chatting with my friends because I'm an introvert, so it is difficult for me to communicate via phone calls or video calls.

'Introvert person' is awkward; use 'an introvert' or 'an introverted person'. Remove filler 'diff uh to'. Use plural 'phone calls' to match typical usage and parallel structure with 'video calls'. Also add a comma before 'so' joining independent clauses.

× So this is something which helps me in communicating with them and express my thoughts to the to my friends.

✓ So this is something that helps me communicate with them and express my thoughts to my friends.

Do not use 'helps me in communicating'; English prefers 'helps me communicate'. Remove the extra 'the' before 'my friends' and unnecessary 'which' when 'that' or a noun clause is better. Keep verb forms parallel: 'communicate' and 'express'.

× I usually chat about clothes and food whenever we are planning to go out or for a trip.

✓ I usually chat about clothes and food when we are planning to go out or take a trip.

Replace 'whenever' with 'when' for specific planned occasions. Use 'take a trip' rather than 'for a trip' for natural phrasing. Pronoun use is acceptable, but sentence flow improves with these preposition/phrase changes (categorized under pronoun/preposition choices).

× We discuss what type of uh, like uh, clothes are we carrying with us or the shoes.

✓ We discuss what type of clothes we will carry with us, or what shoes to bring.

Avoid filler 'uh' and re-order the clause: indirect question form should be 'what type of clothes we will carry' not 'what type of clothes are we carrying'. Use parallel structure 'what shoes to bring'. This fixes sentence structure and question word order.

× And we also discuss or make an itinerary over the chat on a group on a WhatsApp group.

✓ We also make an itinerary in a WhatsApp group chat.

'Over the chat on a group on a WhatsApp group' is redundant and incorrect. Use 'in a WhatsApp group chat' or 'on a WhatsApp group' but not both. 'Make an itinerary' is sufficient; omit 'discuss or' unless needed.

× I prefer chatting in a group so that everyone is aware about the plan that we are making.

✓ I prefer chatting in a group so that everyone is aware of the plan we are making.

Use 'aware of' not 'aware about'. Also 'that' is unnecessary after 'plan' and can be omitted for conciseness.

× It is convenient so that I don't have to explain one point to different people.

✓ It is convenient because I don't have to explain the same point to different people.

Use 'because' to show reason. Add 'the same' to clarify meaning; 'one point' is ambiguous. This improves clarity and sentence structure.

× So it it it gets very convenient for me to communicate.

✓ So it becomes very convenient for me to communicate.

Remove repeated filler 'it it it' and place 'becomes' appropriately. The adverb 'very' correctly modifies 'convenient'; original had repetition and filler disrupting flow.

× Sometimes it is easy to communicate via face to face because I am able to put my thoughts clearly and it it also becomes easy for people to know what I'm saying via my expression by social media.

✓ Sometimes it is easier to communicate face to face because I can express my thoughts clearly, and it is also easier for people to understand what I'm saying through my facial expressions than via social media.

Use comparative 'easier' to compare communication modes. 'Face to face' should be adjective/adverb without 'via'. Replace awkward 'put my thoughts clearly' with 'express my thoughts clearly'. 'Via my expression by social media' is unclear; use 'through my facial expressions' and add 'than via social media' for clear comparison.

× I get some time to think before replying, so I prefer.

✓ I have some time to think before replying, so I prefer it.

Use present simple 'have' to express a habitual situation rather than 'get'. Add object 'it' after 'prefer' for grammatical completeness.

× Not really, but I won't say that I haven't argued with them.

✓ Not really, but I wouldn't say that I have never argued with them.

Use conditional 'wouldn't' to match conversational hedging. Use present perfect 'have never argued' rather than negative past 'haven't argued' for clarity about experience up to now.

× There are times where we are of different opinions.

✓ There are times when we have different opinions.

'Where' is incorrect for time expressions; use 'when'. Use 'have different opinions' rather than 'are of different opinions' for natural phrasing.

× It is mostly, uh, related to career because we all have different opinions like how what type of career we should opt and uh, what the opportunities are there.

✓ It is mostly related to careers because we all have different opinions about what type of career we should choose and what opportunities are available.

'Related to career' should be 'related to careers' or 'related to our careers'. Use 'about' after 'opinions'. Replace 'opt' with 'choose' and restructure 'what the opportunities are there' to 'what opportunities are available' for natural English.