聊天— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm), and shorten redundant phrases. Use one or two supporting details about when or why you chat. Aim for 2–3 sentences with clear linking words.

範例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends occasionally because I’m naturally introverted and need time alone. However, when I feel like catching up or sharing news, I’m happy to have a conversation.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and add one specific example to make your answer more informative. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid hesitations like "like" repeated.

範例: Mostly I talk about work, shopping, and movies. For example, we often discuss new films we’ve seen and recommend favourites to each other.

建議: Respond directly and combine ideas into one smooth answer. Remove filler words and use linking phrases such as "however" or "but" to contrast preferences. Provide a short reason why you prefer one-to-one chats.

範例: I prefer chatting one-on-one because I find deep conversations easier in private; however, I might join a small group if the topic is meaningful.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then explain with a clear contrast. Remove unclear words like "valid" and avoid repeating phrases. Use cohesive devices like "if" and "whereas" to structure the comparison.

範例: It depends on the relationship: I prefer face-to-face conversations with close friends, whereas I use social media to talk to acquaintances or people I don’t know well.

建議: Start with a clear statement and give one concise condition when you would argue. Avoid fillers and repeated words. Use a linking word like "however" to show contrast and give a brief reason for your stance.

範例: I usually avoid arguments because I dislike confrontation; however, if a situation requires it and I believe someone is clearly wrong, I will speak up to defend my point.

× I do like to chat with friends from time to time, although I'm a person of introverted personality, but sometimes if I feel like the umm there should be umm some conversation between me and my friend and I would love to do that.

✓ I do like to chat with friends from time to time because I am an introvert but sometimes I feel there should be a conversation between my friend and me, and I would enjoy that.

The original sentence uses redundant and contradictory conjunctions 'although' and 'but' together and has awkward phrasing 'person of introverted personality'. Replace 'although ... but' with a clearer connector and use 'because' to explain the contrast; use 'I am an introvert' and correct object pronoun order to 'my friend and me'. Also remove filler words and unnecessary repetitions. Grammar problem type ID:16

× I usually chat about my work or like some shopping stuff or movies as well.

✓ I usually chat about my work, shopping, or movies as well.

The phrase 'some shopping stuff' is informal and ungrammatical; simplify with the noun 'shopping'. Remove unnecessary filler 'like' and use parallel structure in the list. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Me and my friends are both are fond of movies so we usually talk about that.

✓ My friends and I are both fond of movies, so we usually talk about them.

Use subject pronoun order 'My friends and I' instead of 'Me and my friends'; remove duplicate 'are'; 'movies' is plural so refer to 'them', not 'that'. This fixes subject-verb agreement and pronoun usage. Grammar problem type ID:27

× I'm an introvert so I don't like to chat in groups or teams.

✓ I'm an introvert, so I don't like chatting in groups or teams.

Use gerund 'chatting' after 'like' for natural phrasing and add a comma before 'so'. This corrects verb form and improves fluency. Grammar problem type ID:16

× On the other hand, if someone is having some meaningful conversation with me and the person is alone, then I would definitely love to jump in.

✓ On the other hand, if someone is having a meaningful conversation with me and is alone, I would definitely like to join in.

Use the article 'a' before 'meaningful conversation'; replace 'the person is alone' with 'is alone' to avoid repetition; 'join in' is more natural than 'jump in', and 'would definitely like to' is more appropriate than 'would definitely love to' in this context. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Valid, dependent person to person.

✓ It depends on the person.

The original fragment 'Valid, dependent person to person' is ungrammatical. Use the correct idiom 'It depends on the person' to convey variability between individuals. Grammar problem type ID:13

× If I'm attached to somebody and they are very close to me, then I would love to do it face to face.

✓ If I'm close to someone, I would prefer to communicate face to face.

Avoid mixing 'attached to somebody' and 'they are very close to me'; instead use 'I'm close to someone'. 'Prefer' is a better verb than 'would love to do it' for this context, and 'face to face' is written without hyphens here. Grammar problem type ID:12

× But if if I'm chatting with somebody who's not very close to me and kind of stranger, then I would go on social media to do that.

✓ But if I'm chatting with someone who isn't very close to me or is more of a stranger, I would use social media to do that.

Remove duplicate 'if if'; use 'someone who isn't' and 'more of a stranger' for clarity; 'use social media' is more natural than 'go on social media'. This corrects repetition and improves wording. Grammar problem type ID:16

× I don't like confrontation so I usually avoid any argument with my friends and even my family.

✓ I don't like confrontation, so I usually avoid arguments with my friends and even my family.

Use plural 'arguments' instead of 'any argument' for natural expression. Add a comma before 'so'. Tense is fine but pluralization improves grammar and fluency. Grammar problem type ID:6

× However, if there's umm situation demands it and and if I feel the person on the other hand is wrong, then I would definitely not hesitate to argue with them.

✓ However, if a situation demands it and I feel the other person is wrong, I would definitely not hesitate to argue with them.

Replace 'there's umm situation' with 'a situation' (correct use of 'there is' omitted); remove duplicate 'and'; 'the person on the other hand' is awkward — use 'the other person'. This corrects the 'there be' misuse and clarifies the sentence. Grammar problem type ID:3