聊天— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Бага зэрэг тодорхой, илэрхий яриа байвал сайн. Илүү байнгын, цэвэр хэллэг хэрэглэж, "uh/umm" зэрэг дүүргэгч үгсийг багасга. Эхэнд шууд асуултанд хариулж, дараа туслалцаа тайлбар нэм. Мөн товч тодорхой өгүүлбэрүүд ашигла.

範例: Yes, I do, especially with my close friends. We communicate almost every day, and when we cannot meet in person we usually use Facebook Messenger. This helps us stay updated and feel connected.

建議: Яриандаа илүү тодорхой жишээ, нарийн мэдээлэл оруул. Дүүргэгч үгсийг багасгах, холбоос үг (for example, also, additionally) ашиглан логик холбож өг. Дэлгэрэнгүй, тодорхой сэдвийн жишээ хэлэх нь сайн.

範例: We usually talk about everyday life, such as work or studies. For example, we discuss problems we are facing and share any improvements we have made. We also sometimes talk about rumours or news involving our friends.

建議: Сэдвийг тодорхой эхэлж, дэмжлэгт тодорхой жишээ, шалтгаан нэм. "uh" зэрэг дүүргэгчүүдээс зайлсхийж, илүү холбогч үгс ашигла (for example, because, so). Хэллэгийг хялбар, логик болго.

範例: I prefer chatting in a group because many of my friends know each other and it is encouraging. For example, in group chats we get different perspectives on a problem, so we can find better solutions together.

建議: Эхэнд шууд хариулж дараа нөхцөл нэм. "There is no big difference"-ыг илүү нарийвчлан тайлбарла. Нэг эсвэл хоёр жишээ, нөхцөл (when...) ашиглаж илүү цэгцтэй өг.

範例: I prefer both, because each has its benefits. For quick chats I use social media, but if I want a personal conversation or to discuss something important, I prefer to meet that friend in person.

建議: Илүү тодорхой, цэвэр өгүүлбэр ашигла. Алдаатай бүтэц, хэллэгийг засаж, шалтгаан, давтамж (how often) өг. Нэг эсвэл хоёр үгтэй мэдээлэл биш, жишээ хэлж тайлбарла.

範例: Yes, we sometimes argue, but it is rare. This is usually because we have different opinions on certain topics; for example, we might disagree about plans or personal choices, but we usually resolve these arguments quickly.

× Yes I do like especially with my close friends.

✓ Yes, I do, especially with my close friends.

The sentence needs commas to set off the adverbial phrase 'especially with my close friends' and a comma after 'do' for natural spoken emphasis. Add commas to improve clarity and natural rhythm. Suggestion: Say 'Yes, I do, especially with my close friends.' or 'Yes, I especially like chatting with my close friends.'.

× We uh have everyday communication and if we can uh meet face to face then we use some a Facebook Messenger to chat with umm.

✓ We have everyday communication, and if we can meet face to face, we use Facebook Messenger to chat.

Remove filler words and correct article use: 'Facebook Messenger' is a proper noun and does not take 'a' or 'some' here. Add commas to separate clauses. Use 'have everyday communication' or better 'communicate every day.' Suggestion: 'We communicate every day, and if we can meet face to face we do; otherwise we use Facebook Messenger.'.

× About everyday life, the problems that we are struggling and also some uh, rumors, uh, around our, uh, friends.

✓ We talk about everyday life, the problems we are struggling with, and also some rumors about our friends.

Use correct verb-preposition collocation: 'struggling with' not 'struggling'. 'Rumors about our friends' is correct preposition use instead of 'around our friends.' Also use full clauses: 'We talk about' at the start. Suggestion: 'We talk about everyday life, problems we are struggling with, and rumors about our friends.'.

× We, we chat and also sometimes we chat about the improvements that we gained uh, during the time passed.

✓ We chat, and sometimes we talk about improvements that we have made over time.

Use present simple for habitual action: 'We chat.' For improvements that developed up to now, use present perfect 'have made' or 'have gained' rather than simple past 'gained' with 'over time.' 'During the time passed' is incorrect; use 'over time.' Suggestion: 'We chat, and sometimes we talk about improvements we have made over time.'.

× I prefer to chat in a group as well as I have many friends familiar and closer to each other and it is really encouraging to have a different, uh, perspectives about the situation and deal with the problems from different angle of view.

✓ I prefer to chat in a group because many of my friends are familiar and close to each other, and it is encouraging to have different perspectives on a situation and to deal with problems from different points of view.

Use 'because' for reason. 'Friends familiar and closer to each other' should be 'many of my friends are familiar and close to each other.' 'Different perspectives' should be plural without article and use 'on a situation' not 'about the situation.' 'Different points of view' is the correct idiom. Suggestion: 'I prefer group chats because many of my friends are close to each other, so we get different perspectives and approaches to problems.'.

× There is no big difference so I prefer both of them.

✓ There is no big difference, so I prefer both.

Avoid redundant pronoun 'of them.' 'Prefer both' is sufficient. Add comma before 'so.' Suggestion: 'There is no big difference, so I like both.'.

× But if I would like to have a individual personal meeting, would like to meet in person with someone from friends, then I would prefer to meet with her.

✓ But if I want to have an individual meeting and meet a friend in person, I would prefer to meet them.

Do not mix conditional 'if I would like' with main clause 'I would prefer'—use 'if I want' or 'if I would like... I would...'. Use 'an individual meeting' (article and adjective order) and avoid 'someone from friends'—use 'a friend' or 'them' for gender neutrality rather than 'her.' Suggestion: 'But if I want a one-on-one meeting, I would prefer to meet a friend in person.'.

× Yes, actually it happens, but seldomly.

✓ Yes, actually it happens, but seldomly -> seldom.

The adverb 'seldomly' is nonstandard; use 'seldom' or 'rarely.' Keep punctuation: 'Yes, actually it happens, but seldom.' Suggestion: 'Yes, it happens, but rarely.'.

× Since we do have a different aspects of you in a very variety of things.

✓ Since we have different aspects of opinion in a variety of things.

Sentence is unclear and pronoun 'you' is incorrect. Likely intended: 'we have different viewpoints on many things' or 'we have different opinions about various things.' Use 'different opinions' or 'different viewpoints' and 'a variety of things' not 'very variety.' Suggestion: 'Since we have different opinions about a variety of things.'.

× We sometimes agree on specific occasion, especially related to them personal opinion on specific things.

✓ We sometimes agree on specific occasions, especially regarding their personal opinions on certain things.

Use plural 'occasions.' 'Them' should be 'their' as a possessive pronoun. Use 'regarding' or 'about' and 'their personal opinions' and 'certain things' for clarity. Suggestion: 'We sometimes agree on particular occasions, especially about their personal opinions on certain matters.'.