爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and use correct tense and clearer nouns. Start with a topic sentence stating your hobby, then give one or two specific supporting details (how you collected stamps, why you liked it). Use linking words (for example, because, so) and keep it to no more than 3–4 short sentences. Correct common errors: say “I collected stamps” or “I used to collect stamps,” and avoid unnecessary words like “anyone that I know them.”

範例: I used to collect stamps when I was young. I gathered them from family and friends because I couldn’t afford to buy many. For example, my uncle gave me a small album of international stamps, which sparked my interest.

建議: Use clear grammar and precise vocabulary. Begin with a topic sentence in past tense: “Yes, I collected stamps.” Then add a specific detail about the collection (types, colors, how you kept them). Avoid unclear phrases like “color default” or “collective booth.” Keep it concise and coherent with linking words such as “and” or “so.”

範例: Yes, I collected stamps as a child, especially colorful stamps from different countries. I kept them in a small album organized by color and country, and I still keep that album today.

建議: Answer directly and give a clear reason with one supporting detail. Say whether you still have the hobby and why not, using simple, correct sentences. Avoid vague expressions and unrelated phrases (e.g., “four thing,” “Don't do it with animals”). Use linking words like “because” or “so.”

範例: No, I don’t still have that hobby because my interests have changed as I grew older. For example, stamp collecting became difficult because stamps are rarer now, so I stopped collecting a few years ago.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail comparing your hobbies to your family’s. Use correct phrases: “We have different hobbies” and add an example of a family member’s hobby to make the answer concrete. Use linking words like “but” or “however.”

範例: No, we have different hobbies. For instance, my sister enjoys gardening while I used to collect stamps, so our interests don’t overlap much.

× Yes, I did. I have the stamps auction as my hobbies.

✓ Yes, I did. I collected stamps as my hobby.

The student used present tense 'have' with 'did' and an incorrect noun phrase 'stamps auction'. The context asks about past hobbies, so simple past 'collected' fits. Also 'hobby' should be singular and the correct collocation is 'collect stamps'. Replace 'stamps auction' with 'collect stamps' or 'stamp collecting'.

× I will select the stamps from anyone that I know them and ask them for it because I was young don't have money.

✓ I would ask anyone I knew for their stamps because when I was young I did not have money.

Pronoun usage and tense are incorrect. 'Anyone that I know them' duplicates pronouns; use 'anyone I knew'. 'Ask them for it' should be 'ask for their stamps'. Also 'I was young don't have money' mixes past and present; correct to 'when I was young I did not have money'. Modal 'would' fits habitual past requests.

× Yes, my hobby is collective stamps color default all the collective booth and I'm still keeping it right now.

✓ Yes, my hobby is collecting stamps of different colors, and I still keep them now.

Phrase 'collective stamps color default' is ungrammatical; use gerund 'collecting stamps'. 'All the collective booth' is unclear; likely 'different colors'. 'I'm still keeping it' should be 'I still keep them' to match plural 'stamps'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.

× No, not anymore, because the time changed and the time changed too.

✓ No, not anymore, because times have changed.

Repetition and tense are awkward. Use present perfect 'have changed' to indicate change since childhood. 'The time changed' is unnatural; 'times have changed' is idiomatic.

× Normally it just followed the four thing.

✓ Normally it followed a few traditions.

'Followed the four thing' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Followed a few traditions' or 'followed certain customs' conveys intended meaning. Match past tense with earlier 'not anymore'.

× They're old fashioned, so right now it's hard to get that thing so out.

✓ They are old-fashioned, so now it is hard to find those items.

'Old fashioned' should be hyphenated as 'old-fashioned'. 'Get that thing so out' is incorrect; replace with 'find those items' to express rarity. Use correct demonstrative 'those' for plural items.

× Don't do it with animals.

✓ This sentence is unclear; if meaning 'It does not involve animals', write: 'It does not involve animals.'

Original imperative 'Don't do it with animals' is confusing in context. Clarify intended meaning: likely saying the hobby did not include animals. Use 'It does not involve animals.' to be clear and grammatical.

× No, we entails in the different things.

✓ No, we are interested in different things.

'We entails in' is incorrect verb and preposition use. Use 'we are interested in' or 'we are involved in' followed by 'different things'. Match subject 'we' with 'are'.

× So they have these two discuss the same.

✓ So they have different interests; they do not discuss the same things.

Sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Clarify that family members have different interests and do not discuss the same topics. Use proper clause structure and negatives.

× It's quite different.

✓ They are quite different.

Pronoun 'it' does not agree with plural 'interests'. Use 'They are quite different.' to refer to plural 'interests' or 'hobbies'.