爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ должен быть более кратким и естественным, с чётким топик-предложением и одним-двумя конкретными примерами. Избегайте тавтологии (например, "gives me more energy" и "feel recharging" несут похожий смысл). Добавьте связующее слово, если даёте дополнительную деталь.

範例: Yes, I have several hobbies, mainly physical activities such as running and cycling. For example, I go running three times a week because it boosts my energy and helps me clear my mind.

建議: Сформулируйте предложение правильно и избегайте грамматических ошибок (например, "when I was a child"). Упомяните 2–3 конкретных хобби и коротко поясните одно, используя связку для плавности речи.

範例: Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed painting and singing, and I also learned sewing. Sewing was unusual for my age, but I liked making small toys for my friends.

建議: Исправьте грамматику и сделайте высказывание более естественным: используйте простое объяснение, почему хобби сохранилось. Избегайте устаревших или громоздких фраз ("haven't been extinguished").

範例: Yes, I've been singing since childhood and I still love it. I take part in a local choir because singing helps me relax and improves my confidence.

建議: Сделайте начало предложения более естественным ("Yes, we share some hobbies"). Уточните одно хобби и добавьте короткое объяснение, как вы занимаетесь им вместе, используя связочное слово для логики.

範例: Yes, we share some hobbies, such as solving logical puzzles and drafting ideas for small projects. For example, my father, brother and I meet on weekends to solve brainteasers and design simple models together.

× It gives me more energy and I feel recharging after doing that.

✓ It gives me more energy and I feel recharged after doing it.

The verb phrase 'feel recharging' is incorrect; use the past participle 'recharged' with 'feel' to describe a resulting state. Also replace vague 'that' with the pronoun 'it' referring to the activity. Suggestion: use 'I feel recharged' to express a completed effect.

× Yes, when I was child I had hobbies like painting, singing and, which are unusual, sewing.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had hobbies like painting and singing and, unusually, sewing.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' is a singular/plural/article error. Also word order 'which are unusual' is awkward; use the adverb 'unusually' before 'sewing'. Suggestion: add 'a' and place 'unusually' correctly.

× Yes, and it is singing. My love to this hobby haven't been extinguished nowadays.

✓ Yes, it is singing. My love for this hobby has not been extinguished.

'My love to' is incorrect preposition use; 'love for' is natural. 'Haven't' does not agree with the singular subject 'love'—use 'has not'. 'Nowadays' is unnecessary and awkward here; omit or use 'today' if needed. Suggestion: use 'has not been extinguished' or simpler 'has not faded'.

× Yes, we have number of common hobbies and that's for example drafting and solving logical problems.

✓ Yes, we have a number of common hobbies; for example, drafting and solving logical problems.

Missing article 'a' before 'number' is incorrect. 'That's for example' is ungrammatical; use 'for example' with a comma and restructure the sentence. Suggestion: insert 'a' and use a semicolon or separate clause for clarity.

× We do that with my father and brother.

✓ We do those with my father and brother.

Pronoun agreement: 'that' refers to singular, but 'hobbies' is plural; use 'those' to match plural noun. Alternatively, rephrase 'We do them with my father and brother.' Suggestion: use 'those' or 'them' for plural reference.