爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Сократите и упростите ответ, давая ясное тематическое предложение, затем добавьте одно-два конкретных подробных примера. Избегайте повторов и грамматических ошибок (например, «I have the hobbies» → «I have several hobbies»). Используйте связки для плавности, например, «for example», «also».

範例: I have several hobbies. I enjoy listening to music—especially pop and classical—which helps me relax after work. I also like playing computer games, mainly strategy games, because they challenge my problem-solving skills.

建議: Сформулируйте полное предложение в прошедшем времени и объедините идеи связкой. Дайте конкретный пример или причину, почему вам нравились эти хобби, избегайте обрывистых фраз. Исправьте грамматику: «I loved studying history and drawing.»

範例: Yes, I loved studying history and drawing when I was a child. For example, I often read books about ancient civilizations and sketched scenes from history books, which made learning more fun.

建議: Отвечайте кратко и ясно, используя корректные времена (present perfect или past simple) для выражения длительности: «I've enjoyed drawing since childhood.» Объединяйте повторяющиеся идеи и приводите конкретный пример, как вы занимаетесь этим хобби сейчас.

範例: Yes, I've enjoyed drawing since childhood. I still sketch regularly, especially landscapes and people, and I often spend an hour a day practicing techniques I learned as a child.

建議: Сделайте ответ более связным: начните с общего утверждения, затем объясните детали. Используйте правильную грамматику и порядок слов: «My family and I share some hobbies» и конкретизируйте, кто что любит. Уберите лишние слова и исправьте времена и согласование (например, «my grandma likes reading»).

範例: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family. For instance, my mother used to play the piano for many years, and my grandmother enjoys reading, so I developed a love of books from her and read a lot with her when I was young.

× Yes, I have the hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have some hobbies.

The sentence incorrectly uses the definite article 'the' with a plural noun 'hobbies'. In English, when referring to hobbies in general, use no article or an indefinite determiner such as 'some'. Suggestion: say 'I have some hobbies' or simply 'I have hobbies.'

× It's music and I like to play computer games and I like study.

✓ I like music, I play computer games, and I like to study.

The original mixes 'It's music' (unclear pronoun use) and the verb 'study' without 'to' or appropriate form. Use parallel structure and correct verb forms: 'I like music', 'I play computer games', 'I like to study.'

× Yes, I love to study about history and. Drawing.

✓ Yes, I loved studying history and drawing when I was a child.

The question asks about past hobbies, so past tense is required. 'Love' should be 'loved', and 'study about history' is unnatural — use 'studying history'. Also combine fragments into a single sentence.

× Yes, in my childhood I have enjoined drawing and.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I enjoyed drawing.

The present perfect 'have enjoined' is incorrect here and 'enjoined' is the wrong verb (meaning 'ordered'). Use simple past 'enjoyed' to describe past habitual activities. Remove the trailing 'and.'

× In my childhood, I love to study about history.

✓ In my childhood, I loved studying history.

The original uses present tense 'love' for a past time reference. Use past tense 'loved' and the gerund 'studying history' for correct expression.

× Yes, I have my mom's.

✓ Yes, I share some hobbies with my mom.

'I have my mom's' is incomplete and ambiguous; it incorrectly uses the possessive without a noun. Be explicit: 'I share some hobbies with my mom' or 'I have the same hobbies as my mom.'

× A lot of years ago playing on the piano, so right now I interesting that my grandma like to reading so I like reading too.

✓ Many years ago she played the piano, and now I am interested in reading because my grandmother liked to read, so I like reading too.

This sentence has multiple structural and grammatical errors: missing subject for 'playing', incorrect tense forms ('interesting' should be 'interested'), wrong verb forms ('like to reading' should be 'liked to read'), and run-on structure. Break into clauses, supply subjects, use past tense for past facts ('played', 'liked'), and correct adjective 'interested'.