爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장 구조와 문법을 바로잡고 자연스럽게 말하는 연습이 필요합니다. 주어와 동사의 일치, 관사와 동명사의 사용을 확인하세요. 또한 한 문장으로 핵심을 말한 뒤 자세한 정보를 덧붙이면 더 효과적입니다. 예를 들어 ‘My hobby is playing soccer. I usually play as a left back.’처럼 간결하게 말하세요.

範例: Yes, I have a hobby. My main hobby is playing soccer, and I usually play as a left back for my local team.

建議: 시제와 표현을 정확히 사용하고, 불필요한 단어를 제거하세요. ‘Before retired’는 문맥에 맞지 않습니다. 과거에 대해 말할 때는 간단한 과거 시제를 사용하고 구체적인 정보(언제, 누가, 어떤 상)를 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

範例: Yes. When I was a child, I used to play handball with my school friends. We often entered local tournaments and once our team won a prize at the Gyeongsangbuk-do competition.

建議: 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하고 문법을 고치세요. ‘the how to play’ 같은 오류를 피하고, 연결어를 사용해 시간을 설명하면 더 유창합니다. 예: ‘I have played soccer since I was seven because my father taught me.’

範例: Yes, I do. I have been playing soccer since I was seven years old because my father taught me how to play, and I’ve practiced regularly ever since.

建議: 부정문과 이유를 명확히 표현하고 문법과 어순을 교정하세요. 가족 구성원 각각의 취미를 간결하게 나열하고 연결어(for example, while, whereas)를 사용하세요. 마지막의 ‘So you're’는 어색하니 빼세요.

範例: No, I don’t. My older brother prefers playing basketball, my father likes golf, and my mother loves travelling, so our hobbies are quite different.

× Yes I have hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby.

'Hobbies' is plural; context indicates the student then describes a single hobby, so 'a hobby' (singular) matches. Add a comma after 'Yes' for natural phrasing.

× My hobby is play soccer and I my position is left back.

✓ My hobby is playing soccer and my position is left back.

Use the gerund 'playing' after 'My hobby is'. Also remove extra 'I' before 'my position' and use correct linking 'my position is left back.'

× Yes, I have hobby.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby.

This is a present-tense question; use present simple 'have' and include the article 'a' before 'hobby'.

× Before retired, my hobby was playing handball with my friends in school.

✓ Before I retired, my hobby was playing handball with my friends at school.

Add subject 'I' before 'retired' and use the preposition 'at school' for activities that happened in school. 'Before retired' is incorrect without a subject.

× I usually went to the tournament with my team and we won the prize at the Gyeongsangbuto.

✓ I usually went to tournaments with my team and we won a prize at the Gyeongsangbu-to.

Use plural 'tournaments' for repeated events, use the article 'a' before 'prize', and correct the place name formatting. 'With my team' is fine.

× Yes I have. My hobby is play soccer and when I was seven years old my father told me the how to play soccer and I exercise.

✓ Yes, I have. My hobby is playing soccer, and when I was seven years old my father taught me how to play soccer and I practiced.

Use 'playing' after 'My hobby is'. 'Told me the how to play' is incorrect; use 'taught me how to play'. 'I exercise' is present; for past context use 'I practiced' or 'I used to practice'.

× No, I don't have because my older brother usually do the playing the basketball and my father went to field and playing golf.

✓ No, I don't. My older brother usually plays basketball and my father goes to the field to play golf.

'Don't have' needs an object; better 'No, I don't' meaning 'I don't have the same hobbies.' Use third person singular 'plays'. Remove extra 'the' before 'basketball'. Use present simple 'goes' for habitual actions and 'to play golf' for purpose.

× My mother loved to travel. So you're.

✓ My mother loves to travel.

Shift to present simple 'loves' to match current habitual action. The fragment 'So you're.' is incomplete and unclear and should be omitted or clarified.