爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid fillers (umm, uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Use correct plural forms and a smoother phrase for learning instruments.

範例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy painting and drawing, especially watercolor landscapes, and I am learning to play musical instruments such as the violin and the drums.

建議: Keep the answer direct and reduce hesitations. Use linking words to connect reasons and add one specific example of a book or poet to make it more vivid.

範例: Yes, I used to enjoy reading fiction and poetry because I had much more free time. For example, I loved diving into adventure novels like The Chronicles of Narnia and reading romantic poems by Pablo Neruda.

建議: Remove fillers and give a clearer structure: state the hobby, explain continuity, and give a brief reason for the change (time constraints). Use correct grammar (read → reading; fictions → fiction).

範例: Yes, I still enjoy reading fiction and poetry, although I read less often now because I have less free time due to work and studies.

建議: Avoid repetition and filler words. Combine sentences with linking words for clarity and correct subject-verb agreement (brother likes). Give one specific detail about how they practice their hobby to enrich the answer.

範例: No, we all have different hobbies. For example, my brother likes watching football matches regularly, my father spends weekends gardening and growing flowers and vegetables, and my mother enjoys window shopping at local markets.

× I like to learn to play instruments, for example, violins and drum.

✓ I like to learn to play instruments, for example, the violin and the drums.

Use of instrument names: 'violin' and 'drum' need correct singular/plural and articles in this context. Also after 'play' we use the instrument noun; when listing examples, use 'the violin' and 'the drums' or plural 'violins and drums'. Here 'drum' should be 'drums' or 'the drums' to match common collocations. Suggestion: say 'I like to learn to play instruments, for example the violin and the drums' or 'for example, violins and drums.'

× So I uh, have the time to dive into, you know, the stories and, uh, the characters and also romantic poems.

✓ So I had the time to dive into, you know, the stories and the characters and also romantic poems.

The student is describing past habits ('when I was a child') so the verb should be in the past tense. 'have' is present; change to 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past tense consistently in past-time clauses: 'I had the time to...'.

× I think I still like, uh, read fictions and poems now, but just because I have less free time so I do that less often than before.

✓ I think I still like reading fiction and poems now, but because I have less free time I do that less often than before.

After 'like' we should use the gerund 'reading' not the base verb 'read'. Also 'fictions' is incorrect; 'fiction' is an uncountable noun. Remove the redundant 'so' when using 'but' and ensure sentence flow. Suggestion: 'I still like reading fiction and poems now, but because I have less free time I do that less often.'

× Every member of my family has their own hobby.

✓ Every member of my family has his or her own hobby.

'Every member' is singular so the possessive should be singular. Using 'their' is common in informal speech, but formally match singular with 'his or her' (or rephrase to pluralize: 'All members of my family have their own hobbies'). Suggestion: write 'Every member of my family has his or her own hobby' or 'All members of my family have their own hobbies.'

× For example, my brother like to watch sports like football, my father enjoys gardening, he loves uh flowers and and plants, while my mother likes window shopping.

✓ For example, my brother likes to watch sports like football, my father enjoys gardening; he loves flowers and plants, while my mother likes window shopping.

Subject-verb agreement: 'my brother' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'likes' not 'like'. Also remove duplicate 'and' and improve punctuation for clarity. Ensure parallel structure with verbs. Suggestion: 'My brother likes to watch sports such as football; my father enjoys gardening; he loves flowers and plants; my mother likes window shopping.'