爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a direct, natural topic sentence and avoid unclear phrases. Use correct grammar (articles, verb forms) and concise supporting details with linking words. For example, start with: “Yes, I enjoy reading.” Then add two specific reasons with linking words such as “because” or “and,” and keep it to 2–4 short sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy reading. It broadens my knowledge and helps me relax after a tiring day. For example, I often read historical novels and science articles because they help me learn new facts and unwind.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence about childhood hobby, avoid irrelevant words and incorrect time phrases. Provide specific details (what you painted, how often) and use linking words like “and” or “so.” Keep sentences simple and grammatical.

範例: Yes, when I was a child I loved painting. I painted almost every day, usually landscapes and animals, and I didn’t worry about perfection. This helped me become more creative and relaxed as a person.

建議: Give a clear, grammatically correct statement naming the hobby and state how long you have done it. Avoid repetitions and unclear words. Use linking words to explain why you continue it (e.g., “because” or “so”). Provide a concise example of how it helps you now.

範例: Yes, I have kept painting since I was six years old. I still paint regularly because it calms me and helps me think more clearly when I feel stressed.

建議: Start with a direct sentence saying whether you share hobbies. Use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary (e.g., “family members” and “I”). Explain differences with specific examples and linking words such as “however” or “whereas.”

範例: No, my family and I don't share the same hobbies. For example, my parents enjoy outdoor sports and gardening, whereas I prefer artistic activities like reading and painting.

× From my perfect almost anyone, everyone has hobby about myself.

✓ In my opinion, almost everyone has a hobby.

The original sentence uses incorrect and confused pronouns and word order ('my perfect', 'anyone', 'about myself'). Use 'In my opinion' to express personal view, 'almost everyone' for generalization, and 'has a hobby' for a clear subject-verb-object structure.

× I'm very interested in reading book.

✓ I'm very interested in reading books.

'Reading book' is incorrect because 'book' as a countable noun requires either an article or the plural form when speaking generally. Use the plural 'books' to indicate reading in general.

× This hobby not only widen my knowledge, but also make me happy, make me relax when I'm very tired.

✓ This hobby not only widens my knowledge, but also makes me happy and helps me relax when I'm very tired.

Subject-verb agreement: with singular subject 'This hobby' the verbs must take third-person singular forms ('widens', 'makes'). Also combine ideas smoothly ('and helps me relax').

× By Tuesday I was a child, my hobby was painting.

✓ When I was a child, my hobby was painting.

'By Tuesday I was a child' is nonsensical and uses wrong time reference. Use 'When I was a child' to indicate childhood. The past tense 'was' is correct for both clauses.

× Despite painting not beautiful, I painted a lot, I painted freely and I think this childhood topic has contribution to establish a funny PE funny person like me today.

✓ Although my paintings were not beautiful, I painted a lot and painted freely, and I think this childhood hobby contributed to making me the playful person I am today.

Use 'Although' for contrast, pluralize 'paintings' and use past 'were' for description. 'Has contribution to establish' is awkward; use 'contributed to making' plus clear description 'playful person' instead of 'funny PE funny person'. Maintain past tense for childhood influence.

× Yeah, it's been it's been in.

✓ Yes, I have kept it since childhood.

Original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'I have kept it since childhood' conveys the intended meaning using present perfect to indicate a hobby continued from past to present.

× I maintain this hobby from my was a six track 6 year try till now.

✓ I have maintained this hobby since I was six years old.

Fix word order and tense: use present perfect 'have maintained' to show continuity, 'since I was six years old' for age expression. Remove extraneous words like 'track' and duplicate numbers.

× Whenever I feel confused I take time to be MMM and that thing make me relax a lot.

✓ Whenever I feel confused, I take time to meditate, and that helps me relax a lot.

'Be MMM' is unclear; likely 'meditate' or 'rest' fits. Use gerund or verb appropriately: 'take time to meditate'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'that helps me relax'.

× In spite of living in the same house, my family member and me don't have something in common.

✓ Although we live in the same house, my family members and I do not have much in common.

Use subject pronoun 'I' not 'me' in subject position; pluralize 'family members' when referring to several; 'do not have much in common' is natural phrasing.

× They like support and me like and I like artistic activity like reading or painting.

✓ They like sports, while I prefer artistic activities such as reading and painting.

The original mixes words and is unclear. Likely meaning: family members enjoy sports ('sports' not 'support'). Use contrast 'while' and 'prefer' to show difference, and 'artistic activities such as' for examples.