爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one brief specific detail using a linking word. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy watching films and musical theatre. For example, I often watch contemporary dramas and Broadway-style musicals online because I like the storytelling and music.

建議: Organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words and correct grammar; avoid sentence fragments and repetition.

範例: Yes, as a child I enjoyed solving puzzles such as word puzzles, jigsaws and Rubik's cubes. Even though I wasn’t very quick, I kept practicing because it sharpened my mind and I found it satisfying.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence stating the hobby and how long you've done it, then add one specific reason or effect using linking words. Fix grammar and avoid informal fillers.

範例: Yes, I have been drawing since I was about four years old. Drawing has always calmed me and helped me concentrate, so I still sketch regularly in my free time.

建議: Answer directly, then give one specific explanation and a brief contrasting detail using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and repetition; express feelings more precisely.

範例: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. As a result, we rarely participate in the same activities, which can be disappointing, although we sometimes try to join each other’s interests.

× I have hobbies, I like to watch movies and I like to watch musicals.

✓ I have hobbies; I like watching movies and musicals.

Use of plural 'hobbies' is fine but the sentence is run-on and repetitive. Replace 'I like to watch movies and I like to watch musicals' with 'I like watching movies and musicals' to avoid repetition and use gerund for parallel structure. This fits Grammar Problem Type 1 because it involves improving plural usage and sentence structure for naturalness.

× I used to solve riddles like word puzzles, jigsaw puzzles and solve Rubik's cubes and that was my hobby.

✓ I used to solve riddles like word puzzles and jigsaw puzzles, and I used to solve Rubik's Cubes; that was my hobby.

The original mixed verb forms and omitted parallel structure. Maintain past habitual 'used to' for each activity and capitalize 'Rubik's Cube'. This is a past tense consistency issue (Type 5). Use parallel constructions: 'used to solve... and I used to solve...'.

× Even though I wasn't really good at it.

✓ Even though I wasn't really good at them.

The fragment lacks clarity and has incorrect pronoun reference. 'It' is singular but refers to multiple activities (puzzles, cubes). Change to 'them' to match plural antecedent and complete the idea; this fixes sentence structure (Type 26) and pronoun agreement.

× I just like to try try it.

✓ I just liked to try it.

The context is past habit, so simple past 'liked' or 'used to' should be used instead of present 'like'. Also remove duplicate 'try'. This is a tense consistency error (Type 6/5); choose past tense to match surrounding sentences.

× Yeah, I have been trying since I was like 4 years old.

✓ Yeah, I've been drawing since I was about four years old.

'Have been trying' is vague; use 'have been drawing' to specify the hobby and 'about four years old' is more natural. Use present perfect continuous to show an action continuing from past to present (Type 6).

× I when I was young I used to draw a lot even though it wasn't really that good and just like drawing made my mind calm and keep me kind of silent, so I still do it.

✓ When I was young, I used to draw a lot, although the drawings weren't very good; drawing made me feel calm and quiet, so I still do it.

Original has word order issues ('I when I was young'), pronoun/verb agreement ('it wasn't really that good' refers to drawings), and awkward phrasing ('keep me kind of silent'). Reorder sentence, use plural agreement 'drawings weren't', and replace 'keep me kind of silent' with 'made me feel calm and quiet.' This addresses sentence structure errors (Type 26) and adjective/adverb use (Type 13).

× No, now I have different hobbies so it is kind of difficult to enjoy the same thing as I do as my family members, so I cannot share my experience with them.

✓ No. My hobbies are different now, so it's difficult to enjoy the same things as my family members; I can't share my experiences with them.

Problems include awkward phrasing and incorrect pronoun/reference ('the same thing as I do as my family members'). Correct by making subject clear, using plural 'things' and 'experiences', and appropriate contractions. This fixes pronoun use and sentence clarity (Type 12).

× It's kind of, it's sad.

✓ It's kind of sad.

Redundant clause 'it's kind of, it's sad' should be condensed to 'It's kind of sad.' Remove repetition to improve fluency and sentence structure (Type 26).