爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical and concise. Use correct tense (use present perfect or simple past appropriately), avoid filler words, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Provide one clear topic sentence, then 1–2 supporting details with linking words. Vary vocabulary (e.g., "I’ve been playing the piano since I was six" instead of "I play piano since").

範例: I have several hobbies. I’ve been playing the piano since I was six and I also enjoyed drawing, which I started around age five. Recently I’ve taken up coding and I’m learning Python to build small projects.

建議: Correct tense and remove hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give specific examples and a brief reason or change. Use linking words like "but" or "however" to show contrast with current habits.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved reading story books and some short novels. However, I don’t read as much now because I’m busier with school and hobbies like piano.

建議: Use accurate grammar and clearer vocabulary. Say "I’ve had" and "I’ve been playing" for duration; replace unclear words like "expires me" with "inspires me". Keep it concise: one topic sentence and one supporting reason with a linking word.

範例: Yes, I’ve had playing the piano since childhood. I’ve been playing the piano since I was six, and I still practice regularly because it inspires me and helps me understand music better.

建議: Be more fluent and reduce repetition. Use a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example of when you play together and a linking word like "for example" or "so". Correct phrasing: "my younger sister" and "we often play together after family meals."

範例: Yes, my younger sister shares my hobby of playing the piano. We often play together after family meals, for example we practice duets or learn songs we both enjoy.

× Yes, I do have hobbies like umm playing piano.

✓ Yes, I have hobbies like playing the piano.

The phrase 'do have' is unnecessary for simple present affirmative sentences with 'have'. Also 'playing piano' needs the article 'the' before musical instruments in this context. Simplify to 'I have' and use 'the piano' for correctness and naturalness.

× I play piano since I was six years old and I also like drawing.

✓ I have played the piano since I was six years old, and I also like drawing.

The action started in the past and continues to the present, so the present perfect 'have played' is required with 'since'. Also include 'the' before 'piano'.

× I learn drawing since I was five years old in the preschool and now I have a new hobby which is coding.

✓ I have been learning drawing since I was five years old at preschool, and now I have a new hobby, coding.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been learning' (or present perfect) with 'since' to show an action that began in the past and continued. 'In the preschool' should be 'at preschool'. Also simplify 'which is coding' to 'coding'.

× I am learning currently learning coding like Python.

✓ I am currently learning coding, like Python.

There is a duplicated verb 'learning'. Remove the repetition and place the adverb 'currently' before the verb phrase for natural adverb placement. Add a comma before the example 'like Python'.

× Yes, I do have hobbies when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had hobbies when I was a child.

The clause refers to the past ('when I was a child'), so use past simple 'had' rather than present 'do have'.

× I like reading books when I was child, which I'm not like reading anymore now and it when I was a child I like reading some uh, story books and some novels.

✓ I liked reading books when I was a child, but I do not like reading as much now. When I was a child I liked reading story books and some novels.

Mixing present and past is inconsistent. Use past simple 'liked' for past habits. 'I'm not like reading anymore now' is ungrammatical; use 'I do not like reading as much now'. Remove filler words and correct article usage: 'a child' and 'story books'.

× Yes, the hobby that I've had since childhood is playing piano.

✓ Yes, the hobby that I've had since childhood is playing the piano.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'piano' when referring to the musical instrument in general. The present perfect 'I've had' is acceptable here.

× As I said above, I started learning piano since I was 6, so I continuously playing piano since, uh, until now.

✓ As I said, I started learning the piano when I was six, and I have continued playing the piano until now.

When describing a start point in the past, use past simple 'started' with 'when' (or 'in') and then present perfect 'have continued' to show continuation. 'Continuously playing' lacked an auxiliary verb. Use 'the piano' and write numbers as words in speech contexts: 'six'.

× And I love playing piano because it expires me about music.

✓ And I love playing the piano because it inspires me about music.

The verb 'expires' is incorrect; the intended word is 'inspires'. Also add 'the' before 'piano'. 'Inspires me about music' could be improved further to 'inspires me to learn more about music' for clarity.

× Yes, my sister, my younger sister have the same hobbies as me.

✓ Yes, my sister and my younger sister have the same hobbies as I do.

When listing two subjects, connect them with 'and'. Subject-verb agreement 'have' is correct for plural subject, but the object pronoun should be 'I do' or 'me' in spoken English; formal 'as I do' is preferred. Also avoid repeating 'my sister' unnecessarily.

× Both of us like to play piano and we often play piano together whenever we are free.

✓ Both of us like to play the piano, and we often play it together whenever we are free.

Add 'the' before 'piano' and use the pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition. The sentence is otherwise acceptable; placing 'often' before the verb is natural.

× Like we will play some songs we both like when when we can or when after our meet after family meal.

✓ We will play some songs we both like when we can, for example after our family meal when we meet.

Remove filler 'Like' at the start, fix the repeated 'when', and restructure the sentence for clarity: 'when we can' and 'after our family meal when we meet'. Avoid double 'after'.